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Whom Can You Trust in This Short Life?33 total reviews
Comment from apky
Hello Jay,
Great to have you pop in here again after the long stretch of absence. Of course I do receive and read your newsletter, for which I thank you. I particularly like its design too - mine is so bad it's best not to show it.
The Flash Fiction read more like prose poem to me - which probably says a lot about my expertise in poems and prose.
Best,
Aki
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Hello Jay,
Great to have you pop in here again after the long stretch of absence. Of course I do receive and read your newsletter, for which I thank you. I particularly like its design too - mine is so bad it's best not to show it.
The Flash Fiction read more like prose poem to me - which probably says a lot about my expertise in poems and prose.
Best,
Aki
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Much obliged, Apky. Yes, there's a lot in common with the prose poem and flash fiction. I had two other readers call it a poem, so there might be something there, too. Good to see you're still here.
Comment from Halfree
What the heck...word counts and such. Delightful interlude and well done and that's all that counts. I could never do a short posting of a story... My short stories start out short and somehow they mutate to page after page. Good work here.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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What the heck...word counts and such. Delightful interlude and well done and that's all that counts. I could never do a short posting of a story... My short stories start out short and somehow they mutate to page after page. Good work here.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Many thanks, Halfree. I'm glad it gave you a chuckle ... or at least didn't leave you gagging (since I just realized you said nothing about a chuckle. Anyhoo, glad you enjoyed it.
Jay
Comment from Dean Kuch
You're a very clever guy, Jay, getting your readers to fall for a ruse like the one you set up for us to fall into here.
And I will admit, you almost got me with it.
Ya know, while it is true that people look a lot like ants from a tall building like the Sear's Tower in Chicago, ants also look like...well... ants...when one is standing on a curb looking down into the gutter from the corner of Washington St. and Hargrove Ave.
Good job wuth your entry.
Best of luck in the contest.
~ Dean
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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You're a very clever guy, Jay, getting your readers to fall for a ruse like the one you set up for us to fall into here.
And I will admit, you almost got me with it.
Ya know, while it is true that people look a lot like ants from a tall building like the Sear's Tower in Chicago, ants also look like...well... ants...when one is standing on a curb looking down into the gutter from the corner of Washington St. and Hargrove Ave.
Good job wuth your entry.
Best of luck in the contest.
~ Dean
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Especially if you are on the curb, knowing your pest control man didn't do his job, and not quite believing your eyes. Yep, they look like ants. Thanks, Dean. I figured you were long gone. But you're back!
Jay
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I've been in the hospital, Jay, prepping for ipen heart surgery.
There's a lot they have to "fix" before they'll take a chance on opening up my chest.
I'm still ariund just keepin a low profile.
Good luck, my friend.
~Dean
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written seventy-five word flash fiction poem. There are very little people that we can trust with anything in our lives but ourselves. Everyone i s just interesting to get paid for a job not wel-done.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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A very well-written seventy-five word flash fiction poem. There are very little people that we can trust with anything in our lives but ourselves. Everyone i s just interesting to get paid for a job not wel-done.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Very true, Sandra. But if it's a contest, you do want a fighting chance. Hey, good to see you're still here. Thanks for reading it.
Comment from kiwijenny
I love the wind up.....not airy wind.....up though I love the gusty reference
I had him high on a ledge about to do himself in...as you wanted me to..
Loved it and the attention to word count.....I should count it for you but I have to go to work.lol
God bless
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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I love the wind up.....not airy wind.....up though I love the gusty reference
I had him high on a ledge about to do himself in...as you wanted me to..
Loved it and the attention to word count.....I should count it for you but I have to go to work.lol
God bless
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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You are back! I hope you're still posting your fantasy stuff. I used to love reading it!
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I have t been but I loved your fantasy stuff and was so happy to see your name...my hubby lost his job a few years ago and I didn't renew my fanstory...but noe everything is great. We have a great life, new state , new house and both of have great work we love.
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I'm happy to hear God's smiling on you, Jenny. I do hope you revive your lovable characters. They were a joy to read.
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Thank you
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Jay,
Good to see a post from you. Hope you are well.
I concur with the word count at 75 exactly. lol
Nice tension wrung out in the opening sentences, before the smile raising conclusion.
Good stuff.
G
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Hi Jay,
Good to see a post from you. Hope you are well.
I concur with the word count at 75 exactly. lol
Nice tension wrung out in the opening sentences, before the smile raising conclusion.
Good stuff.
G
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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My dear friend. It is good to see you're still here. Thank you for reading and counting. I'm glad you fell for it.
Jay
Comment from Scarbrems
Well, I think this is very clever. You had me going for a minute, there. You've got some bright 11th-12th graders over there. Should do well in the contest, and i'm sure the wordcount will be fine.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Well, I think this is very clever. You had me going for a minute, there. You've got some bright 11th-12th graders over there. Should do well in the contest, and i'm sure the wordcount will be fine.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thank you, Sarkems. I'm happy you enjoyed it.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! Funny one. Of course they look like ants, cuz they ARE ants. You tried to trick us, and you succeeded toooo well. So you stepped off the curb. Well, sometimes that takes courage too. :)
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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LOL! Funny one. Of course they look like ants, cuz they ARE ants. You tried to trick us, and you succeeded toooo well. So you stepped off the curb. Well, sometimes that takes courage too. :)
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thank you, Phyllis! You don't know how happy I am to see you still here. I think you qualify as being the grande dame of FanStory. Glad you enjoyed my little bit of fluff!
Comment from Irish Rain
Wonderful!! Had me thinking he was going to jump there for a minute! And he did, right off the curb, ha ha. No wonder they looked like ants! Loved this,
Blessings...
PS...I always count manually
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Wonderful!! Had me thinking he was going to jump there for a minute! And he did, right off the curb, ha ha. No wonder they looked like ants! Loved this,
Blessings...
PS...I always count manually
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much for your kindness. Yeah, I tried to play with the reader's mind a bit. The surrender flag, the sirens.
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Worked for me!
Comment from tbacha58
Hi, In my opinion i did not count, but i know what you wrote is so interesting describing the spirit of a bird, making it a complete story not a 75 word demand. I so enjoyed reading your poem and watching the bird as if it is sitting next to me, so much your description is net clear and wonderful. I hope it's a contest, as i am sure you would win. Love Terry
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Hi, In my opinion i did not count, but i know what you wrote is so interesting describing the spirit of a bird, making it a complete story not a 75 word demand. I so enjoyed reading your poem and watching the bird as if it is sitting next to me, so much your description is net clear and wonderful. I hope it's a contest, as i am sure you would win. Love Terry
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Aww, you are so sweet, Terry. Yes, it is a contest. So I hope your wish comes true. It was a wish, wasn't it?
Jay
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Yes Jay it was a sincere wish. Win it. xoxo
