Soulmates
For a departed loved one39 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Tanka. Soulmates willl always be connected with an invisible bond even when they are far apart or one soulmate may died , but they still have a soul connection.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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A very well-written Tanka. Soulmates willl always be connected with an invisible bond even when they are far apart or one soulmate may died , but they still have a soul connection.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much for understanding****kahpot
Comment from RGstar
Nicely done. I must admit, I had to work with the commas a bit, so read a couple of times.
I would just take the first comma away...even if not using a full stop.
"Depart from this world
and find peace with my blessing
I'll stay in comfort
knowing your soul is my mate
From me, you shall never leave"
Nicely done.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Nicely done. I must admit, I had to work with the commas a bit, so read a couple of times.
I would just take the first comma away...even if not using a full stop.
"Depart from this world
and find peace with my blessing
I'll stay in comfort
knowing your soul is my mate
From me, you shall never leave"
Nicely done.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much and I will take away many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Possummagic
Well this is a lovely Tanka poem for your first try and I wish you all the best in the contest. The syllables are all in the correct order and it flows nicely. Well done. PM
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Well this is a lovely Tanka poem for your first try and I wish you all the best in the contest. The syllables are all in the correct order and it flows nicely. Well done. PM
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
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You are very welcome. PM
Comment from karenina
Perfect form.
Tragic poem.
Loss is so difficult...
Goodbye is inconceivable and yet we all will say it.
Love lives on.
Memories shine in the darkness.
Karenina
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Perfect form.
Tragic poem.
Loss is so difficult...
Goodbye is inconceivable and yet we all will say it.
Love lives on.
Memories shine in the darkness.
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much and yes love does live on****kahpot
Comment from Pamusart
Hi kahpot. This is a good entry for the contest. I can't vouch for the form or meter. At first I thought you were writing about meeting up with God. Then I read your comment at the top. I think I am so unprepared for my husband's death should he predecessor me. Even for my siblings. We are all aged 54-67. I know we are not that old. All of my siblings (there are nine of us) are healthier than I am. I inherited all the bad things from both parents and added a few of my own. Very nice message in this poem. Sorry for the diatribe. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Hi kahpot. This is a good entry for the contest. I can't vouch for the form or meter. At first I thought you were writing about meeting up with God. Then I read your comment at the top. I think I am so unprepared for my husband's death should he predecessor me. Even for my siblings. We are all aged 54-67. I know we are not that old. All of my siblings (there are nine of us) are healthier than I am. I inherited all the bad things from both parents and added a few of my own. Very nice message in this poem. Sorry for the diatribe. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much and please do not be sorry I am interested in people especially on this site****kahpot
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Soulmates", is an extremely well-written and heart-warming piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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"Soulmates", is an extremely well-written and heart-warming piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you for your excellent and inspiring review****kahpot
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****kahpot, you certainly deserved the excellent and inspiring review.
God bless you,
the Duchess
Comment from Gloria ....
Well Kah it isn't the kind of tanka I learned, but according to the rules of this contest you've written up a lovely poem. So yes! You've got it right.
Best wishes to you in the contest. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Well Kah it isn't the kind of tanka I learned, but according to the rules of this contest you've written up a lovely poem. So yes! You've got it right.
Best wishes to you in the contest. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Wow! thank you very much, I was (am) trying to write an Acrostic when this appeared on the paper, these Acrostics are tricky yet fun thank you for getting me interested in different forms of writing, I keep reading your work and realize I have quite a few to learn, many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed reading your tanka, kahpot. I am no expert, but I believe you did a great job. You have the correct number of syllables, a good pivot line 3, line 1 & 2 are connected, & I just liked it. Your tanka's message is great, too. I believe death has separated a couple, but the one left knows s/he will be reunited as they are soulmates. Best wishes in the contest. Jan
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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I enjoyed reading your tanka, kahpot. I am no expert, but I believe you did a great job. You have the correct number of syllables, a good pivot line 3, line 1 & 2 are connected, & I just liked it. Your tanka's message is great, too. I believe death has separated a couple, but the one left knows s/he will be reunited as they are soulmates. Best wishes in the contest. Jan
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much it is great to hear I have got it right****kahpot
Comment from meeshu
very nicely written Kahpot. I think you got it right but I am not an expert. I like your poem though, it is a very positive verse.........meeshu
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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very nicely written Kahpot. I think you got it right but I am not an expert. I like your poem though, it is a very positive verse.........meeshu
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
I'm not a tanka expert but I like how you wrote this one. You do make a mental pivot in the middle line changing from releasing the beloved from this physical world and the rest of the poem focuses on the closeness in soul/spirit that will continue forever.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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I'm not a tanka expert but I like how you wrote this one. You do make a mental pivot in the middle line changing from releasing the beloved from this physical world and the rest of the poem focuses on the closeness in soul/spirit that will continue forever.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2018
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Thank you very much, a pivot in the middle is the second time I have read this but did not know it was a requirement, must be lucky, many thanks****kahpot