Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 56 "The Path"Dawn of Chaos
33 total reviews
Comment from Bruno Thomas
I really enjoyed reading this. This goal, this path a wish. I love this line you chose my awards tried per day desired I outline. I really liked how it is deep but shapes the spirit of the path. Well done, Cheers Brian
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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I really enjoyed reading this. This goal, this path a wish. I love this line you chose my awards tried per day desired I outline. I really liked how it is deep but shapes the spirit of the path. Well done, Cheers Brian
Comment Written 02-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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This write surfaced a curious response by its reviewers. A poor, average and your excellent valued opinion about its presentation. I thank all responses and welcome them. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
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Keep it up. Good writing doesn't happen in a day. Cheers, Brian
Comment from Raul1
Well done! The important lesson here is never hang around with a negative person. I like how you say that we all have to set our needed goals in mind. No mistakes in this poem.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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Well done! The important lesson here is never hang around with a negative person. I like how you say that we all have to set our needed goals in mind. No mistakes in this poem.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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I have so many doubts about my writes but I'm learning, still asking myself if this is poetry. Glad whatever it is you found aspects captivating to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting words.
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You're welcome
Comment from Cybertron1986
I like how you broke each paragraph into three parts. This provides the reader with the convenient setting of a rhythmic glue to the piece's straightforward nature of voice. The voice is deep and sophisticated in thought, but relevant to human nature. Beautifully presented
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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I like how you broke each paragraph into three parts. This provides the reader with the convenient setting of a rhythmic glue to the piece's straightforward nature of voice. The voice is deep and sophisticated in thought, but relevant to human nature. Beautifully presented
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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I feel I'm slowly getting a better grasp anout my writes. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks an experience of setting and reaching goal in life and that a goal set is unreachable and after persistent efforts it is failed, the mind is torn, a new goal set after learning shortcomings by experience; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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This speaks an experience of setting and reaching goal in life and that a goal set is unreachable and after persistent efforts it is failed, the mind is torn, a new goal set after learning shortcomings by experience; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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I think I'm grasping the concept of clarity in my writes, new revisions of former works might enhance them under these factors. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from Artasylum
Very lovely...Tpac... yours, diana
"Ahead my path has its way laid course,
my nods it deposits say of yes it of a no,
my awards tried per day desired I outline."
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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Very lovely...Tpac... yours, diana
"Ahead my path has its way laid course,
my nods it deposits say of yes it of a no,
my awards tried per day desired I outline."
Comment Written 24-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2018
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Glad these features were found appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from Shanbreen
I commend you on the topic of your poem. It is good, but it lacks fluidity -- seems very choppy. There also seems to be an effort at making prose into poetry by shifting words around.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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I commend you on the topic of your poem. It is good, but it lacks fluidity -- seems very choppy. There also seems to be an effort at making prose into poetry by shifting words around.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Yeah, I hold a low sag in my writes, mostly defined by poor grammar. I like the efforts and cherish the responses about my works. Thanking you for your honest response and generous rate.
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon
This is certainly the most interesting piece I have read recently. It is also unique in that I have paused to read the piece several times - which is a compliment to you, or at least, it is meant as a compliment to you.
The narrative 'tumbles' in a direction. The reader is engaged, and in dismantling the phrases, finds more than a single meaning. Whether or not this was your intention I do not know, but all of us; if we look hard enough we find that which we seek.
I tire this endless unchanging maze,
years ahead I being or me back I in mire,
my assets to sink under fire I go forth.
I have spent on long time on this text, enjoying it. I am very cautious with my stars. I do try to follow the reviewing direction, but this piece meets the best criteria: it resonates and, as I say, it is engaging.
I wish you the very best with your continued writing.
Life is the journey.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Hello Anon
This is certainly the most interesting piece I have read recently. It is also unique in that I have paused to read the piece several times - which is a compliment to you, or at least, it is meant as a compliment to you.
The narrative 'tumbles' in a direction. The reader is engaged, and in dismantling the phrases, finds more than a single meaning. Whether or not this was your intention I do not know, but all of us; if we look hard enough we find that which we seek.
I tire this endless unchanging maze,
years ahead I being or me back I in mire,
my assets to sink under fire I go forth.
I have spent on long time on this text, enjoying it. I am very cautious with my stars. I do try to follow the reviewing direction, but this piece meets the best criteria: it resonates and, as I say, it is engaging.
I wish you the very best with your continued writing.
Life is the journey.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 19-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Glad this write was able to touch and excite, most my writes captures some aspect of endurance, although badly presented in grammar. I'm learning and receive my good and bad views about them. I cherish them all with a grain of salt. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were perfect.
Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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This was well written with great theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were perfect.
Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2018
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Boy, I wish all these factors stated are true for this write. I can live with it not being perfect but coherent is vital. A thought properly in grammar presented by me. Any who, thanking you for your generous rate and encouraging words.
Comment from Miriam Collins
You have created a very unique form of rhythm in this poem. It as if each line is a statement, its very interesting to read. I like how descriptive you are, and I especially love the opening line, "Balancing of my treasures stored, refining in mind in year measures", this for me creates a very neat image. Nice job!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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You have created a very unique form of rhythm in this poem. It as if each line is a statement, its very interesting to read. I like how descriptive you are, and I especially love the opening line, "Balancing of my treasures stored, refining in mind in year measures", this for me creates a very neat image. Nice job!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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My writes still suffers flaws, so revisions through reviews have assisted me correcting those lacks. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from dragonpoet
This seems to be about someone following a path despite the hurts and pains. Hiding them while looking for strength in the future.
You might want to have someone proofread this to correct several grammatical errors
Keep writing. The more you write the more you learn. This goes for everyone.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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This seems to be about someone following a path despite the hurts and pains. Hiding them while looking for strength in the future.
You might want to have someone proofread this to correct several grammatical errors
Keep writing. The more you write the more you learn. This goes for everyone.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 27-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2018
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Well spoken and very helpful. I suffer a great lack of grammar. Revisions and supportive comments as your help. Thanking you for your generous rate and splendid views.
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You're welcome, TPAC. Sometimes, I also need help on this front, too.
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