Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi, W. I;. Your double cinquain is timely and well constructed. This time of year it certainly applies. It is written in a very professional manner, I think. You always were a fine poet, my friend. Blessings and Happy Holidays. Bob

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Hi Bob,
Thank you for the encouraging comments about the writing. Happy Holidays to you as well.
Debi

Comment from duchessofdrumborg

Excellent

"With Me" is an extremely well-written and spiritually-uplifting piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented work.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thank you for the encouraging comments about the poem. I am still smiling.

reply by duchessofdrumborg on 11-Dec-2016

w.j.debi, you're more than welcome. KEEP SMILING!

Best wishes, the Duchess

Comment from EricBrady

Exceptional

Beautiful poem. I love how one cinquain is man's view and how the second is Jesus' view. A wonderful visual you have painted showing the love of Christ. Best wishes and many blessings.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

You got exactly what I was going for--pharaoh representing the world and man's point of view vs Jesus' superior message. Thank you for the exceptional six star rating. It is much appreciate, especially at the end of the week when ther are to few left.
Blessing to you as well.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

I love this cinquain poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and great art work. So true what Jesus said. I enjoyed it very much! Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Hi Teri,
Thank you for the encouraging review. I appreciate you mentioning the wording and am pleased that you enjoyed reading it. Thank you for stopping by.
Debi

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Amen, how beautiful is this!? I love the analogy, and of course, the Hebrews in the wilderness often complained of their lack, not seeing their blessing. Sounds like us. Blessings to you...

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

You share excellent wisdoms. We are so like those who came before. Human nature means we all have to learn our own lesions. Thank you so much for the review and the blessings.

Comment from Ridley Williams

Excellent

Hi, Debi,

I appreciate the contrast in this double Cinquain for it portrays the idea of what is truly worthy in our lives; finding that inner peace that comes with trust and faith. I liked your vehicle to project your thought; using the time period of Pharaohs in Egypt with their mistaken idea of what is truly royal.
This is a solid write with a great message...well done!
I hope you have a good weekend,
Bill

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Hi Bill,
Thank you for the great review. You are spot on with your analysis. Thank you for the encouraging words of support. You have a wonderful weekend, too.
Debi

Comment from AnnaLinda

Excellent

Debi,

I really like how you have highlighted the contrasts
between a Kings entitlement and Christ's gift in your
well crafted double Cinquian entry poem.

It is very unique indeed. I especially liked your impacting
last three lines:

"Love's path climbs true and straight.
Come. Follow me. Learn how royal
you are."

Very powerful!
Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest,
Linda

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Hi Linda,
Thank you for your analysis of the poem. You got exactly where Inwas going with it--the contrast of the world vs Christ's gift. Thank you for pointing out what you like.
Debi

reply by AnnaLinda on 11-Dec-2016

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Comment from loismddavis

Excellent

a nice presentation and a clever poem with a surprising twist. One does not expect to here pharaoh's words in a spiritual poem but you have done it very effectively in contrasting them with Jesus-I really liked that. You also fulfilled the requirements of the Cinquain. good job

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 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thank you for the uplifting review. I appreciate the comments about the surprising twist and that you found it effective. Such encouragement is appreciated.

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

What a wonderful poem, the contrast between the Pharaoh and Jesus a brilliant idea! We forget, sometimes, just how far we actually have progressed. Those were terrible times, especially for some. Well done!

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 Comment Written 10-Dec-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2016

Thank you for the encouraging view. I appreciate you noting the contrast between Pharoah and Jesus, also the progress we have made.

reply by Dawn Munro on 11-Dec-2016

It was my pleasure.