Comment from
rama devi
~*~ ::: Bravo again! ::: ~*~
Exquisite, Mikey!
Wish I had a six. Tight and polished fluid free verse with strong imagery, unique voicing and sculpted cadence read aloud. Lots of fine phonetics too, like the medley of M and S and P sounds here:
many masts of mist
billowed a spray of
possibility
the whole poem sounds great read aloud.
Nice internal rhyme here and I love how the three lines have a wave-like feel:
she stepped from the bow
somehow
onto the crest of a wave
Favorite lines:
tsunami quelled
and felled by the peace
in her soul
they shore wiggled
and parted for each step
laughter glittered on the wings
of crystal eagles
Perfect closing:
I held her
and the universe
became
something else
Virtual six.
Warmly, rd
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2016
Comment from
Sandra du Plessis
Oh, it seems I missed the memo, to say it is romantic Friday today. Lol. A very well-written tomantic poem. The feeling of love and romance flow right through your poem.
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2016