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Comment from C.J. 16
This is a lovely sonnet. Beautiful sentiments expressed. An excellent entry for the contest. Very well done. Thanks and best of luck to you.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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This is a lovely sonnet. Beautiful sentiments expressed. An excellent entry for the contest. Very well done. Thanks and best of luck to you.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
Comment from kathleenspalding
Excellent poem with a great message. Flows well. Excellent use of artwork. Certainly stirred my emotions. Good work! Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Excellent poem with a great message. Flows well. Excellent use of artwork. Certainly stirred my emotions. Good work! Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you Kathleen for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
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You're welcome. Thanks and blessings to you, too.
Comment from Newkidintown34
What a terribly sad poem and powerful poem. It is true that sometimes we do things that other people find hard to forgive us for. However, if we are truly sorry, there is no sin too great for the love and mercy of our Heavenly Father to cover over. Sometimes, though, the most difficult thing is to forgive ourselves. I pray that if this poem is about your real feelings, and not just fictitious, that you may find comfort and peace. As far as poetry goes this is an excellently written sonnet, with good metering and flow. Wishing you success in the contest!
Best,
Marissa
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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What a terribly sad poem and powerful poem. It is true that sometimes we do things that other people find hard to forgive us for. However, if we are truly sorry, there is no sin too great for the love and mercy of our Heavenly Father to cover over. Sometimes, though, the most difficult thing is to forgive ourselves. I pray that if this poem is about your real feelings, and not just fictitious, that you may find comfort and peace. As far as poetry goes this is an excellently written sonnet, with good metering and flow. Wishing you success in the contest!
Best,
Marissa
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you Marissa for your kind and thoughtful review. It is a about true feelings. I have made peace with God and that has to be enough.
Blessings
Comment from Pantygynt
There actually is a sonnet form I believe set out in rhyming couplets rather than the more commonly found alternat rhyme scheme. I cannot think of its name though. The meter is the standard iambic pentameter, maintained well throughout. The volta comes in at line 9 offering a new hope and a chance of forgiveness that has been distinctly absent in the first two quatrains.
I found a typo or spelling mistake in this line:
"No kindness to be shone the likes of me". I am sure you meant "shown" rather than "shone" here.
2nd Review.
Having reviewed this yesterday I came across it in a booth this morning. It has changed and for the better. Better to be safe and stay with the rhyme scheme we all accept without question and the typos gone. Good luck.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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There actually is a sonnet form I believe set out in rhyming couplets rather than the more commonly found alternat rhyme scheme. I cannot think of its name though. The meter is the standard iambic pentameter, maintained well throughout. The volta comes in at line 9 offering a new hope and a chance of forgiveness that has been distinctly absent in the first two quatrains.
I found a typo or spelling mistake in this line:
"No kindness to be shone the likes of me". I am sure you meant "shown" rather than "shone" here.
2nd Review.
Having reviewed this yesterday I came across it in a booth this morning. It has changed and for the better. Better to be safe and stay with the rhyme scheme we all accept without question and the typos gone. Good luck.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your thoughtful review. Thank you too for kind typo correction and rhyme scheme suggestion. I did revise it after reading your review. Thank you again.
Blessings
Comment from Natalie Walker
This is a great poem. I think the last sentence would read better if you moved the comma. My suggestion is "On wings of His forgiveness, I'll take flight." Other than that, this is a great poem with a lot of heartfelt meaning.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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This is a great poem. I think the last sentence would read better if you moved the comma. My suggestion is "On wings of His forgiveness, I'll take flight." Other than that, this is a great poem with a lot of heartfelt meaning.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you Natalie for your kind and thoughtful review and for the comma suggestion. You are right, it reads much better.
Blessings
Comment from TAB_that's me
I do think God gives us time in our latter years for reflection and introspection - a time to ask Him for forgiveness of us sins.
Wonderful sonnet. good luck in the contest.
Teresa
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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I do think God gives us time in our latter years for reflection and introspection - a time to ask Him for forgiveness of us sins.
Wonderful sonnet. good luck in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you Teresa for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
Comment from Dean Kuch
Good, well composed sonnet on the benefits of seeking and receiving forgiveness, Anonymous Poet. It's done in the traditional Shakespearean or English sonnet tradition.
Well done, and best of luck.
~Dean
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Good, well composed sonnet on the benefits of seeking and receiving forgiveness, Anonymous Poet. It's done in the traditional Shakespearean or English sonnet tradition.
Well done, and best of luck.
~Dean
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you Dean for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
Janet
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Anytime, Janet.
I may not be blessed, but at least I can try to be a blessing to others...
~Dean
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Dear Dean, Sometimes we have to look for those blessings. I woke up this morning. I can see, hear, and am continually amazed. I do understand, as some days, I have to work a little harder at seeing those blessings.
You are a blessings - I think that also means you are blessed.
Always
Janet
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Thanks, Janet. That's very kind of you to say.
See? Now I do feel blessed. ;)
~Dean
Comment from DonandVicki
A sonnet of a broken heart and It seems a broken spirit. You have constructed this sonnet with your own emotions and did that so very well. Nice job.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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A sonnet of a broken heart and It seems a broken spirit. You have constructed this sonnet with your own emotions and did that so very well. Nice job.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you DonandVicki for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
Comment from Judvan2
Its beautiful. I can feel her agony over the past. Thank goodness forgiveness is a basic religious ethic. Forgiving ourselves is the hardest and most important to our growth, I believe. Our trust in that releases our soul for higher things.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Its beautiful. I can feel her agony over the past. Thank goodness forgiveness is a basic religious ethic. Forgiving ourselves is the hardest and most important to our growth, I believe. Our trust in that releases our soul for higher things.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
Comment from c_lucas
Self pity has never won the race. Those who have pulled themselves up by their boot straps are usually in the winner's circle. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Self pity has never won the race. Those who have pulled themselves up by their boot straps are usually in the winner's circle. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2016
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review.
Blessings
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You're welcome, Janet. Charlie
