Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "All Aboard"Dawn of Chaos
63 total reviews
Comment from karenina
An original 2015 post... Wow. It's phantasmagoriphal! A wild dream...or an unexpected "trip"--- either way the secret to enjoying this is to suspend all disbelief and enjoy the ride!
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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An original 2015 post... Wow. It's phantasmagoriphal! A wild dream...or an unexpected "trip"--- either way the secret to enjoying this is to suspend all disbelief and enjoy the ride!
Karenina
Comment Written 17-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Glad aspects prevailing this write were appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your encouraging response and generous rate.
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You are welome!
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is well done. It rides across the screen like a train across its tracks. I love the natural pauses and breaks. These are enticing words for children and I'm certain would hold their imaginations quite well.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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This is well done. It rides across the screen like a train across its tracks. I love the natural pauses and breaks. These are enticing words for children and I'm certain would hold their imaginations quite well.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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I'm glad certain aspects of this write were found appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed remarks.
Comment from papa55mike
Oh, I miss the days of Hershey Kisses, Reese's cups, and Three Musketeers. It's a pity, but I still have my memories. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Oh, I miss the days of Hershey Kisses, Reese's cups, and Three Musketeers. It's a pity, but I still have my memories. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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I love sweets myself, losing teeth near 70, wanting even more. Thanking you for your kind response and appreciated rate.
Comment from mkflood
wild poem and sounds like a bad day. i do thank you for selecting my work. it does work well together. its an honor and thanks again. great job ob the story..mkflood
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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wild poem and sounds like a bad day. i do thank you for selecting my work. it does work well together. its an honor and thanks again. great job ob the story..mkflood
Comment Written 14-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Glad aspects were pleasing, still fighting revisions. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting comments.
Comment from jusylee72
The food is easy to see. I don't quite understand the whole scenario but I do seek pleasure in food. The descriptions are great. Am I waiting for a seat in a restaurant or in life?
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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The food is easy to see. I don't quite understand the whole scenario but I do seek pleasure in food. The descriptions are great. Am I waiting for a seat in a restaurant or in life?
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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A dream I'm flying, see all these delightful features traveling valley, preparing to board a train to all pleasures. Many have problems with my writes, and now I do too, with helpful views such as yours. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Sounds like a day I recently spent with family and fiends at a local Golden Corral restaurant, TPAC,
Ever had the roast beef there?
It's to die for!
~Dean
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Sounds like a day I recently spent with family and fiends at a local Golden Corral restaurant, TPAC,
Ever had the roast beef there?
It's to die for!
~Dean
Comment Written 16-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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No I haven't, the thought about food seems to capture the reader interests, not the journey in fantasy. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed remarks.
Comment from winnona
A well-written piece. Your words flow easily line to line combining well and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Your artwork finished the piece well.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016
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A well-written piece. Your words flow easily line to line combining well and forming the message of the poem for the reader. Your artwork finished the piece well.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016
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I hope half of what you say carry weight, tumbling to properly set my writes, but cherish your statements. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging comment.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, I read this twice so I could be sure about what I was reading. While some lines I get, others are written in a confusing way. It actually begins with confusion.
Example:
In a dream eats envisioned, with streams of rows ripen,
Not sure what this means.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016
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Hmm, I read this twice so I could be sure about what I was reading. While some lines I get, others are written in a confusing way. It actually begins with confusion.
Example:
In a dream eats envisioned, with streams of rows ripen,
Not sure what this means.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016
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I will consider your statement, noting my perception might be slightly blurred, needing a refocusing upon my thoughts. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from Winslow
Dear TPC,
To dream of M & Ms and chocolate mountains tipped with frosting is pleasurable
indeed. Next stop we get on and enjoy those treats. A yummy read.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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Dear TPC,
To dream of M & Ms and chocolate mountains tipped with frosting is pleasurable
indeed. Next stop we get on and enjoy those treats. A yummy read.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2016
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You should have read the whole story before the massive cut. Glad the given aspects delighted you. Thanking you for generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from Moon baby
Tasty fantasy, with all of the chocolate and cherries, one could desire. I could keep eating them up and never get an upset stomach! Fantasy is a wonderful place to visit and be a part of someone else's! Thanks for taking me along. I still see all of the gooey and sticky chocolate I had to leave behind!
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Tasty fantasy, with all of the chocolate and cherries, one could desire. I could keep eating them up and never get an upset stomach! Fantasy is a wonderful place to visit and be a part of someone else's! Thanks for taking me along. I still see all of the gooey and sticky chocolate I had to leave behind!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2016
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Got a sweat tooth, nothing wrong with that in my book, glad aspects of this write was found pleasing. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging comment.