All the Ways
Love Poem33 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
Ah, so romantic, Steve. Like an old-fashioned love poem. Any woman who is pursued and wooed in all those ways is bound to surrender. I really enjoyed the varied images. "through the raucous neon tumult of city streets..." Nice!
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Ah, so romantic, Steve. Like an old-fashioned love poem. Any woman who is pursued and wooed in all those ways is bound to surrender. I really enjoyed the varied images. "through the raucous neon tumult of city streets..." Nice!
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thank you!
I've read it to all my current girlfriends to test their reaction! ;O)
Steve
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Aw, you big ol schmoo! LOL! So, are they all grovelling at your feet? So romantic!
Comment from Sasha
This is a lovely love poem and terrific entry for this contest. It captivated me from the first to the last line. I sincerely wish you all the best in this contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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This is a lovely love poem and terrific entry for this contest. It captivated me from the first to the last line. I sincerely wish you all the best in this contest.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanks for the warm review and lovely stars.
Steve
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, kiwisteveh, you did an excellent job with this beautiful love poem about the places and ways to express your love. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
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this is an excellent write, kiwisteveh, you did an excellent job with this beautiful love poem about the places and ways to express your love. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from nancy_e_davis
You have my vote Steve. This is quite a poem.
You covered a lot of ground and emotions in this free verse poem. Well done my friend. Good luck in the contest. Nancy
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You have my vote Steve. This is quite a poem.
You covered a lot of ground and emotions in this free verse poem. Well done my friend. Good luck in the contest. Nancy
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanks, Nancy. Just hitting my straps with this free verse business!
Steve
Comment from angel123
Your love poem is emotional and touching. I enjoyed reading it and it flows well. I enjoyed reading it and your artwork choice is nice. I like your fifth paragraph.
Angel123
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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Your love poem is emotional and touching. I enjoyed reading it and it flows well. I enjoyed reading it and your artwork choice is nice. I like your fifth paragraph.
Angel123
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Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanks, Angel!
Steve
Comment from Just2Write
Now, this poem speaks the language of love. It's simply wonderful, Steve. It will be a tough one to beat, but then again most of your writing is exemplary and tough to beat. I was drawn in from the first line and held captive until the last. I loved the way you used personification and vibrant action words to bring this poem to life.
Rose.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Now, this poem speaks the language of love. It's simply wonderful, Steve. It will be a tough one to beat, but then again most of your writing is exemplary and tough to beat. I was drawn in from the first line and held captive until the last. I loved the way you used personification and vibrant action words to bring this poem to life.
Rose.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Rose, thanks so much for the fine review and the six stars. I am very much a newcomer to free verse, so I am always pleased to hear that you felt it works.
Steve
Comment from rspoet
An irresistibly splendid poem
that gleefully sings in unmoderate alliteration
Lustrously silky
raucously brazen
intensely burning
Peacefully glowing
just a little bedazzling love poem
that shines true
Well done
God luck in the contest
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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An irresistibly splendid poem
that gleefully sings in unmoderate alliteration
Lustrously silky
raucously brazen
intensely burning
Peacefully glowing
just a little bedazzling love poem
that shines true
Well done
God luck in the contest
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thank you.
That's the danger, of course - overdoing the lush, romantic language. Hopefully the judges read it as you have done!
Steve
Comment from rama devi
Wonderful entry with fine fluid free verse rich in imagery and a tender tone of love. Fine phonetics, as always...especially the alliteration of W and S in the first few lines:
I have wooed you
with the turbulent song
of spring-fed waters
surging in irresistible splendour
Love how the bouncy L sounds make this sound like what it is describing:
to leap in glee from mountain's lip,
a cataract of diamonds, - Great line~~!!~~
This rolls off the tongue like a sleepy chuckling river pool:
with the sleepy chuckle
of the summer pool
silvered in lustrous sheen
on a Sunday afternoon
of silken sunbeams.
Read the above aloud three times. Yummy! Fantastic medley of S and L sounds.
Good descriptive:
the raucous neon tumult
of city streets
LOVE THIS LINE:
to the solitude
of the tree-swooned heart
Passionate:
I have touched you
with the sudden bright intensity
of bush-fire flame
hot as the centre of the sun
Tender and apt metaphor:
with the dulcet glow
of lazy moon's bedazzlement
against the velvet curtain of the night.
Nice closing:
I will love you all the ways that love is true.
The imagery is so eloquently portrayed and nicely composed on a cohesive way.
Strong contender, for sure..The combination of visuals and auditory is superb!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Wonderful entry with fine fluid free verse rich in imagery and a tender tone of love. Fine phonetics, as always...especially the alliteration of W and S in the first few lines:
I have wooed you
with the turbulent song
of spring-fed waters
surging in irresistible splendour
Love how the bouncy L sounds make this sound like what it is describing:
to leap in glee from mountain's lip,
a cataract of diamonds, - Great line~~!!~~
This rolls off the tongue like a sleepy chuckling river pool:
with the sleepy chuckle
of the summer pool
silvered in lustrous sheen
on a Sunday afternoon
of silken sunbeams.
Read the above aloud three times. Yummy! Fantastic medley of S and L sounds.
Good descriptive:
the raucous neon tumult
of city streets
LOVE THIS LINE:
to the solitude
of the tree-swooned heart
Passionate:
I have touched you
with the sudden bright intensity
of bush-fire flame
hot as the centre of the sun
Tender and apt metaphor:
with the dulcet glow
of lazy moon's bedazzlement
against the velvet curtain of the night.
Nice closing:
I will love you all the ways that love is true.
The imagery is so eloquently portrayed and nicely composed on a cohesive way.
Strong contender, for sure..The combination of visuals and auditory is superb!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanks, Rama!
I tried reading this aloud myself and it didn't quite come to life as I was hoping, so I am pleased that you have given that aspect the tick of approval.
I was happy with the imagery, although it took a bit of juggling to get that right as well.
Thanks as always for the kind words and sharp eye. And the six - a bonus.
Steve
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:-))))) Most welcome!
Comment from hannahorion
Free verse: Title: All the ways. Comments: This is a well thought out poem showing excellent composition. It has ample examples of poetic devices at work such as imagery "to leap in glee from mountain's lip" and metaphor "a cataract of diamonds," among others as the poem is awash with these techniques. The theme of this poem is summarized in the last line "I will love you all the ways that love is true." and hence the value of the title is known. I thought this to be a particularly beautiful poem and gave it six stars.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Free verse: Title: All the ways. Comments: This is a well thought out poem showing excellent composition. It has ample examples of poetic devices at work such as imagery "to leap in glee from mountain's lip" and metaphor "a cataract of diamonds," among others as the poem is awash with these techniques. The theme of this poem is summarized in the last line "I will love you all the ways that love is true." and hence the value of the title is known. I thought this to be a particularly beautiful poem and gave it six stars.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thank you so much for the great review and the six stars - much appreciated!
I see the danger with a piece like this is to overdo the lush, romantic language.... Hopefully not this time.
Steve
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My pleasure Your poem inspired me to have a go at a love poem myself rather modest in comparison.
Comment from krys123
Steve;
-I enjoyed reading your writing very much in its fluidity which is brought about by your cadence, timing and tempo which house today reading to be fluid, smooth and easy.
Eritrea is quite exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive throughout the writing.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and rated good Lord be with you always in good luck in the contest.
Alex
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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Steve;
-I enjoyed reading your writing very much in its fluidity which is brought about by your cadence, timing and tempo which house today reading to be fluid, smooth and easy.
Eritrea is quite exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive throughout the writing.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and rated good Lord be with you always in good luck in the contest.
Alex
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Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Alex, thanks for your very kind words.
Steve
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You are so sincerely welcome