Act of Endurance
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Comment from apky
Your poem is written in a very "colourful kaleidoscope" that lends it much deserved drama. The world has been turned upside down by those who play God and use the 99% as pack animals who are disposable and exchangeable. And after a hard day's toiling the 1% force you to buy the fruits of your labout from them to feed yourself and your family, and give you TV programmes that keep you dumb but consuming...
Thanks for this well thought out poem.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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Your poem is written in a very "colourful kaleidoscope" that lends it much deserved drama. The world has been turned upside down by those who play God and use the 99% as pack animals who are disposable and exchangeable. And after a hard day's toiling the 1% force you to buy the fruits of your labout from them to feed yourself and your family, and give you TV programmes that keep you dumb but consuming...
Thanks for this well thought out poem.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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Well spoken, wouldn't expect anymore in the perception of hell. Yet, in us is a greater essence. Glad aspects of this write was found pleasing. Thanking you for your appreciated response.
Comment from Pamusart
The message here is clear. Love the artwork too. It seems that all of us are fodder for our rulers. Disposable cigs in a wheel, easily replaced with another cog. Business even thinks this way about employees responsible for creating their intellectual proprietary work even though each did not know what any of the others did and were experts in what they knew. And, nobody besides them knew anything. Even in that scenario, companies think the cogs are interchangeable. I have no respect for corporate America. Greedy and crooked they are. They buy politicians who will maintain their lifestyles. Guess who pays? The 99%. Well written. Clear message. In a way, we all work for the wealthy, the ruling class. Your verse is written in a cascading way which adds drama to the piece.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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The message here is clear. Love the artwork too. It seems that all of us are fodder for our rulers. Disposable cigs in a wheel, easily replaced with another cog. Business even thinks this way about employees responsible for creating their intellectual proprietary work even though each did not know what any of the others did and were experts in what they knew. And, nobody besides them knew anything. Even in that scenario, companies think the cogs are interchangeable. I have no respect for corporate America. Greedy and crooked they are. They buy politicians who will maintain their lifestyles. Guess who pays? The 99%. Well written. Clear message. In a way, we all work for the wealthy, the ruling class. Your verse is written in a cascading way which adds drama to the piece.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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I agree, a victim of a bogus pretense of justice by fellow family members. The system works, its the functioning parts that corrupts its better given services. Glad aspects presented were touching to you. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting comments.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
One's spiritual health is vital. You have expressed your thoughts well in this poem. It is obviously about the building of the pyramids, most likely with Hebrew labor. I think there are universal statements in your writing also. 'Hearts put in a stern time line cast, (timeline)
lives shot darts to rulers over us,
summed up we're replaceable parts.
I noticed no errors.'
Good job, Ana.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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One's spiritual health is vital. You have expressed your thoughts well in this poem. It is obviously about the building of the pyramids, most likely with Hebrew labor. I think there are universal statements in your writing also. 'Hearts put in a stern time line cast, (timeline)
lives shot darts to rulers over us,
summed up we're replaceable parts.
I noticed no errors.'
Good job, Ana.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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Good shout. I will revise its statement. Thanking you for your generous rate and splendid views about this write.
Comment from ann marie mazz
good morning
unfortunately I have not read the other chapters
only this entry before us here
you have written of life and daily events
wonderful wordplay and composition
you ended the entry on a great touch with the pyramid
that aspect was a nice thought and style
thank you for sharing
enjoy the morning
ann marie
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2015
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good morning
unfortunately I have not read the other chapters
only this entry before us here
you have written of life and daily events
wonderful wordplay and composition
you ended the entry on a great touch with the pyramid
that aspect was a nice thought and style
thank you for sharing
enjoy the morning
ann marie
Comment Written 01-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2015
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Good morn to you as well I'm glad you found interests in this work and thank you for all this sunshines you radiate
Comment from JourneyHolm
A good rant for sure. To be a cog in a greater machine might not be all that bad if we didn't have such well developed minds. Ants don't seem to mind. Alas, I find that my independence of such tyranny is more important than any future that might behold humanity. It is an insanity to think I will give up my free will. Will I? I might...
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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A good rant for sure. To be a cog in a greater machine might not be all that bad if we didn't have such well developed minds. Ants don't seem to mind. Alas, I find that my independence of such tyranny is more important than any future that might behold humanity. It is an insanity to think I will give up my free will. Will I? I might...
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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And yet the bible state we are slaves and have compromise good for bad, I think we have already made choice Thank you for wonderful comments
Comment from lalajovanoski
You are such an amazing poet! I truly enjoyed reading this as you are so very talented! Thank you so very much for sharing this as I truly enjoyed reading
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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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You are such an amazing poet! I truly enjoyed reading this as you are so very talented! Thank you so very much for sharing this as I truly enjoyed reading
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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I thank you for your comment, I need to be hit like that too to see this talent