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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "He Leads Me"poems inspired by Psalm 23
35 total reviews
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
What a sweet sonnet about the love of our Lord, and how he is there for us regardless of our unbelief and mistakes.
I liked the reference to Peter walking on the water, and how he doubted, as do we all, and sank, but that the Lord was still there to rescue him.
The poem was great and you stuck well to form.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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What a sweet sonnet about the love of our Lord, and how he is there for us regardless of our unbelief and mistakes.
I liked the reference to Peter walking on the water, and how he doubted, as do we all, and sank, but that the Lord was still there to rescue him.
The poem was great and you stuck well to form.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the gracious comments. It is one of my favorite stories. I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhyming in excellent Italian sonnet format
good use of enjambment
to keep thought flowing from line to line
good touches of alliteration like in dawn/deny
and pay the price
strong emotional appeal in this well-written poem of faith in good Italian sonnet form
Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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solid rhyming in excellent Italian sonnet format
good use of enjambment
to keep thought flowing from line to line
good touches of alliteration like in dawn/deny
and pay the price
strong emotional appeal in this well-written poem of faith in good Italian sonnet form
Brooke
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Hi Brooke,
Sorry for the delay in responding. Life has been crazy, lately.
I was so excited to see that you wrote it was in excellent Italian sonnet form. This is a challenging form for me so I appreciate the encouraging remarks. Thank you.
Comment from thee-name
Excellent Italian Sonnet. Lines rhymed good to your spiritual writing.
He leads me through the shadows of the night
with light that makes both storm and sorrow flea.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Excellent Italian Sonnet. Lines rhymed good to your spiritual writing.
He leads me through the shadows of the night
with light that makes both storm and sorrow flea.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Hank your for the kind words and encouragement.
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thank you!
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very nice poem. I like the flowery wave of the hand language and the use of proper English in the poem. The green background gives the poem a field and meadow feel. Thank you for sharing,
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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This is a very nice poem. I like the flowery wave of the hand language and the use of proper English in the poem. The green background gives the poem a field and meadow feel. Thank you for sharing,
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the gracious comments. I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is a very nice Italian Sonnet wj with a message to keep the faith, that He will not desert us in our time of need...
Fear not for he is with us always. Even to the end of the earth. Well done. :<) Nancy
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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This is a very nice Italian Sonnet wj with a message to keep the faith, that He will not desert us in our time of need...
Fear not for he is with us always. Even to the end of the earth. Well done. :<) Nancy
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Nancy. This is a form I keep trying because it is harder for me. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Debi,
You did a terrific job with this Italian sonnet.
Your lines flow nicely and you chose your rhymes well. I also love the presentation - that's an extraordinary illustration and your white text on green background makes the whole thing pop off the page.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Hi Debi,
You did a terrific job with this Italian sonnet.
Your lines flow nicely and you chose your rhymes well. I also love the presentation - that's an extraordinary illustration and your white text on green background makes the whole thing pop off the page.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the gracious review, Lou. I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from Dean Kuch
That is one of my favorite verses in all of Biblical scripture, Debi. Peter must have been beside himself as Jesus's revelation came true, and he did indeed deny Him three times.
Your rhyming, message and cadence in this entire poem was outstanding, it's message, very uplifting and inspirational.
Well done!~Dean
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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That is one of my favorite verses in all of Biblical scripture, Debi. Peter must have been beside himself as Jesus's revelation came true, and he did indeed deny Him three times.
Your rhyming, message and cadence in this entire poem was outstanding, it's message, very uplifting and inspirational.
Well done!~Dean
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Dean.
My heart goes out to Peter in the moment. It is one of the most poignant in the scriptures for me.
Thank you for the kind comments about the writing. I am pleased that you enjoyed the message.
Debi
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Yes, it is for me too. I couldn't imagine.
You are more than welcome, Debi.
~Dean :)
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
debi - this is a superb Italian sonnet. I am not an expert on this form, but with the help of your author notes, I have just read a perfect Italian Sonnet. The content flows beautifully, no sign of contrivance to get your message across and still abide by the rhyme scheme. The only alteration, and this is just an opinion and not a criticism - perhaps 'Ye of little faith' - we use this phrase often and is so familiar. Beautiful work. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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debi - this is a superb Italian sonnet. I am not an expert on this form, but with the help of your author notes, I have just read a perfect Italian Sonnet. The content flows beautifully, no sign of contrivance to get your message across and still abide by the rhyme scheme. The only alteration, and this is just an opinion and not a criticism - perhaps 'Ye of little faith' - we use this phrase often and is so familiar. Beautiful work. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Dorothy. I appreciate the comment about the wording. I originally had "ye of little faith" and wasn't sure it fit with the more modern language I used in the rest of the poem. As soon as I read your comment I changed it back. I prefer it as well. I guess I just needed a little confirmation and you gave it. I appreciate the gracious comments about the writing and the form. Thank you! You made my day.
Debi
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate, this is great little piece on Christ's word that he will be faithful to us even after Peter refused to believe. It is very well written and a highlight for me today. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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G'day mate, this is great little piece on Christ's word that he will be faithful to us even after Peter refused to believe. It is very well written and a highlight for me today. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Fez. I am delighted with your comment that it was a highlight for you. It is so encouraging.
Debi
Comment from royowen
What a comforting thought to know that God allows me to make mistakes, you're right in saying that when Peter cried out to Jesus, "Lord save me" Jesus Said, "why did you doubt, and not believe". Jesus knows we are dust, He makes up the sortfall! Well written, the narrative is smooth and flows nicely "off the tongue" in abbccdda then ababab. good job, my favourite subject. well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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What a comforting thought to know that God allows me to make mistakes, you're right in saying that when Peter cried out to Jesus, "Lord save me" Jesus Said, "why did you doubt, and not believe". Jesus knows we are dust, He makes up the sortfall! Well written, the narrative is smooth and flows nicely "off the tongue" in abbccdda then ababab. good job, my favourite subject. well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Roy. I appreciate your insights and encouragement.
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Most welcome.