Comment from jim lawler

Excellent

This makes for easy understandable reading and it held my interest I didn't see any typos and it needs no revision. your description was excellent; you paint a picturesque portrait; Good luck with it and your future writings. Jim

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2014

Thank you so much, Jim. It must be difficult, though, getting into the middle of a novel. Hope you come back for what you enjoy of the descriptive writing and stick around for the adventure that's just around the bend.

Comment from JackiO

Excellent

get the stretcher and to secrete - Secret?

and the cook and helpers did their share - With the cooks and helpers doing their share?

Enjoying immensely!


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 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2014

Thank you for your suggestion for restructuring that sentence. This will be part of my final edit after the post drops off. According to Merriam Webster "to secrete: to deposit or conceal in a hiding place." But I had to admit to going to the dictionary and checking.

reply by JackiO on 27-Oct-2014

That word boggled my mind a tad... but thanks for clarifying! I enjoy your writing.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Jay,

Well, it has to be a relief the two dead men aren't Doxtrex's men.

Arms crumbling is not good. Glnot has his hand at work, we just don't know how yet.

Good chapter.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)


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 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2014

Thanks, Jax... as usual. I'm so privileged to have you reading my novel and enjoying it. After everything else is stripped away, it's all about entertainment, isn't it? Bless you.

reply by Jacqueline M Franklin on 27-Oct-2014

You are so right. If folks didn't enjoy my work, their just wouldn't be as much joy in it.

Take care, kiddo....
Cheers & Blessings