Shepherd
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "I Shall"poems inspired by Psalm 23
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Comment from fafa
Your poem speaks almost as a blessing is a beautiful prayer to the creator that all shouldreread followed, I like very important your poem greetings and blessings
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Your poem speaks almost as a blessing is a beautiful prayer to the creator that all shouldreread followed, I like very important your poem greetings and blessings
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much Fafa. I appreciate your kind remarks.
Comment from risktaker
I agree. I relate. I love the message and the choice of words. All praises to God and His capacity to love all of us in spite of our weakness. I love the picture, it is a depiction of the creative ability of God. What a blessing to be alive and aware of our spiritual connection to God.
Thank you for this well-written poem.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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I agree. I relate. I love the message and the choice of words. All praises to God and His capacity to love all of us in spite of our weakness. I love the picture, it is a depiction of the creative ability of God. What a blessing to be alive and aware of our spiritual connection to God.
Thank you for this well-written poem.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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What an encouraging review. Thank you so much for the six stars and more especially for the insights and encouragement you offer. I appreciate it.
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You are welcomed.
Comment from Nosha17
That was a lovely spiritual poem written with great sincerity. Your rhymes worked well and you made good use of language to convey your message. Good illustration and enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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That was a lovely spiritual poem written with great sincerity. Your rhymes worked well and you made good use of language to convey your message. Good illustration and enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Faye. I appreciate your gracious analysis and encouraging remarks. I am so pleased that you liked it. Debi
Comment from Ben Colder
3 steps of being saved. I am saved, I will be saved, I know I am saved. Then we walk in the knowledge that we are. Blessing to you. Well done poet.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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3 steps of being saved. I am saved, I will be saved, I know I am saved. Then we walk in the knowledge that we are. Blessing to you. Well done poet.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2014
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Thank you for sharing your insights, Ben. I am happy you liked it. I appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from JB Lynn
For those who are familiar with the Bible, I think the line "The One who calms the seething sea" will have special meaning for them if they remember when Jesus reached his hand out to calm the storm. Nice parallel, by the way, with the follow-up line "Still reaches out to comfort me". This whole section worked perfectly.
"By glories flowing forth from God" - Hm, I get that you're going for a set number of syllables, but putting "flowing forth from" all together unfortunately turns this line into a bit of a tongue twister, and could potentially lose a reader - especially because it's so early in the poem and is then repeated later on. Could you maybe play around with this some more? See if there's another word you could insert instead of "forth" (I think that's the most problematic word).
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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For those who are familiar with the Bible, I think the line "The One who calms the seething sea" will have special meaning for them if they remember when Jesus reached his hand out to calm the storm. Nice parallel, by the way, with the follow-up line "Still reaches out to comfort me". This whole section worked perfectly.
"By glories flowing forth from God" - Hm, I get that you're going for a set number of syllables, but putting "flowing forth from" all together unfortunately turns this line into a bit of a tongue twister, and could potentially lose a reader - especially because it's so early in the poem and is then repeated later on. Could you maybe play around with this some more? See if there's another word you could insert instead of "forth" (I think that's the most problematic word).
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Thanks for stopping by. I appreciate the suggestions and encouragement.
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I changed it to "coming forth" my tongue seemed to get tied up on the transistor between "glories" and "flowing".