Comment from allborn66

Excellent

This is a powerful poem. The form enhances the piece. You communicate the theme well. The word choice is quite vivid. Barbara

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Thank you so much.

Comment from mumsyone

Excellent

I like the positive attitude you display in your Rondeau, although I try to discourage the use of words like "thee" in present-day writing. Good poem over all.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014

Yeah I know, many people discourage that in modern day writing but it was needed here. As The Light will always be deserving of thee. Archaic language is so beautiful, I think anyway. Thanks for the understanding review and the 5, really appreciate it.

Comment from tmor3735

Excellent

Dawn,very nice Rondeau and thanks for the lesson on this type of poem writing.I can relate with your work here, from the despair, to depression,and onto serenity. My own writings have helped me along the way.what You wrote here has been special...tom

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014

Then it has achieved its job. Depression is a powerful foe, hard to break free from and I think something that stays with us, we just have to maintain a stranglehold on it. Thank you so much for your kind words.

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

I very much liked this poem and the photo you picked is absolutely perfect. I can identify with your words and truly loved the final stanza. Warm regards, AT =/

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014

OH thanks so much. Really appreciate you taking the time to read and review.

Comment from Kenneth Schaal

Excellent

This is a great Rondeau, and despite the archaic 'Thee' I sense the authenticity of the verse. Perfect meter, rhyme and for overall. Kenny

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014

Thanks so much for the understanding words of review. I was talking to a friend of mine this morning about thee's and thy's. He said we should make a pact to remove them from all future endeavors. I couldn't promise to do so but said I'd try. Thanks again.

reply by Kenneth Schaal on 16-Jan-2014

archaic words come to service easily and we all use them when we're learning meter and forms. Watch out for the irregular verbs 'did' and 'do' also. There are times though when a thee or thou is just a perfect fit. It sounds OK in your verse because of the classic language you otherwise use throughout.

Comment from TOMORAL

Excellent

This is a lovely Rondeau. Hope I spelled that right. I am still learning forms of poetry on this wonderful sight. I loved your words in this one. Farewell despair, love is here. Excellent writing.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014

Thanks so very much and yes you did spell that right. I love the Rondeau, they have such a musical feel about them. You should give one a go.

Comment from CrystieCookie999

Excellent

I like this; it's full of poetic affirmations. It also seems to personify despair/hate as a cold enemy. I like the line:
Instilled with hope, my spirit's free.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014

Yeah, they are enemies for sure. Thanks so much for the great review. Glad you liked that line, it's what kicks the butt of depression.

Comment from Darkhorse555

Excellent

wow loved the way these words drew in the mind I see the fruit-filled living tree And taste the gift serenity.very beautifully crafted excellent piece

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014

Thank you so much, can't ask for a better review. As a writer we want our words to come to life.

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

I love the rondeau form of poetry. Yours is delightful. I'm pleased to see you overcame depression. I get depressed when poets wallow in self pity. I love your repeating line! Nice touch in the last line. Terrific iambic tetrameter.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014

Thanks for the lovely review. I try not to do the self-pity thing but sometimes....LOL Thanks for the friend request as well. Hope you have a blessed day.

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

I'm glad you were able to cure your depression. This poem is so full of joy it's a real pleasure to read. Keep up the good work, and best of luck to you.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2014

Not sure one ever really cures depression, it is something one stays on top of, or hopes to anyway. Thanks for the time to read and review.