All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "When Will I Learn?"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Sararb
This is hilarious. Such an imagination you have to create. I can just picture you filling pails of bath water to water plants, and lawns. That would take some backbreaking work, and then after all that work God opens up the sky with a flood of rain. I loved it! Sararb :)
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This is hilarious. Such an imagination you have to create. I can just picture you filling pails of bath water to water plants, and lawns. That would take some backbreaking work, and then after all that work God opens up the sky with a flood of rain. I loved it! Sararb :)
Comment Written 13-May-2013
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oh yes - it happens! and I fall for it every time! :)))S
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
Repetition is a great way to learn some things. Nature has its own ways and seldom fails to get the job done. It also gave you something to write about in a very fine manner. I enjoyed the read. Thank you for sharing. Your friend, Bob
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Repetition is a great way to learn some things. Nature has its own ways and seldom fails to get the job done. It also gave you something to write about in a very fine manner. I enjoyed the read. Thank you for sharing. Your friend, Bob
Comment Written 13-May-2013
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I'll get the message eventually Bob, I hope! :)Sharyn
Comment from MissMerri
I think this is profound! You use a natural, every-day situation, describing it in elegant words and vivid images, then make such a magnificent point with your illustration. It reminded me of a great preacher's Sunday sermon. I really enjoyed the language used in this poem. I was impressed with your skill, but I especially loved the point you were making and how you made it. Just lovely! It speaks volumes.
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I think this is profound! You use a natural, every-day situation, describing it in elegant words and vivid images, then make such a magnificent point with your illustration. It reminded me of a great preacher's Sunday sermon. I really enjoyed the language used in this poem. I was impressed with your skill, but I especially loved the point you were making and how you made it. Just lovely! It speaks volumes.
Comment Written 13-May-2013
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oh how lovely for you to award a six for this one MM! I'm so delighted you 'got' the subtleties' of this little piece my dear! Bless you!
:)Sharyn
Comment from ravenblack
just don't trust so much that you would start building an ark. " God looks down/ and with a mighty chuckle..." like your "God the prankster". so much more refreshing than a humorless, stern obey-all-the-commandments-and-brush-your-teeth" scolding parent. I hope we have your problem this year as we had a summer nearly devoid of rain.
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just don't trust so much that you would start building an ark. " God looks down/ and with a mighty chuckle..." like your "God the prankster". so much more refreshing than a humorless, stern obey-all-the-commandments-and-brush-your-teeth" scolding parent. I hope we have your problem this year as we had a summer nearly devoid of rain.
Comment Written 13-May-2013
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Well we get 150" of rain a year here rb - problem is ... sometimes if falls all at once! :)
Comment from Pili Pubul
Very well expressed poem about the desperation of seeing your garden go
due to weather. I still did not learned to trust even the weather reports, the fail miserable very often LOL. Love the style, the way you arrange it ads interest. Love the picture after the reading, felt relived. Hugs. Pili
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Very well expressed poem about the desperation of seeing your garden go
due to weather. I still did not learned to trust even the weather reports, the fail miserable very often LOL. Love the style, the way you arrange it ads interest. Love the picture after the reading, felt relived. Hugs. Pili
Comment Written 13-May-2013
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bless you Pili! :)Sharyn
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Thank you... Hugs. Pili
Comment from Louise Michelle
Well, Sharyn, I gotta give this person credit for being such a positive thinker. Definitely trying to turn lemons into lemonade.
The ending reminded me of something a pastor once said: God has a sense of humor. I'm just glad your character isn't living in the days of the dust bowl. Those poor people trusted for 10 years.
Nicely done,
Lou
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Well, Sharyn, I gotta give this person credit for being such a positive thinker. Definitely trying to turn lemons into lemonade.
The ending reminded me of something a pastor once said: God has a sense of humor. I'm just glad your character isn't living in the days of the dust bowl. Those poor people trusted for 10 years.
Nicely done,
Lou
Comment Written 13-May-2013
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Yes, I saw a film about the dust bowl days Lou - it must have been a nightmare. Same happens in Australia!
Comment from robina1978
A lovely free verse. I think you must live far away from me. But our ground was far to dry as well. Rain came now and colder temperatures with it. I am sure one time you will learn to trust.
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A lovely free verse. I think you must live far away from me. But our ground was far to dry as well. Rain came now and colder temperatures with it. I am sure one time you will learn to trust.
Comment Written 13-May-2013
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Thank you so much Ine! We live in Hawaii - we get 150" of rain a year where I am, but sometimes it all falls at once!
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Oh, I did not know you live in Hawaii as well and welcome, Ine
Comment from Scarbrems
Dry, parched land? Hmmm, don't see that over here terribly often. What a great work this is, with strong imagery
"watching clouds gather and play
slowly wisp at the top of folded valleys
mist and tease in breezy shadows then
dissipate
before each burned morning"
It's hard to have faith these days, as the weather is definitely on the change. Once again, great write
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Dry, parched land? Hmmm, don't see that over here terribly often. What a great work this is, with strong imagery
"watching clouds gather and play
slowly wisp at the top of folded valleys
mist and tease in breezy shadows then
dissipate
before each burned morning"
It's hard to have faith these days, as the weather is definitely on the change. Once again, great write
Comment Written 13-May-2013
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I'm sure you don't dear - we get 150" of rain a year where I am, but sometimes it all falls at once! :)S
Comment from Taffspride
A perfect message, When will we learn?
Your poem flows so well and paints a vivid tale of the dry parched summers that we have experienced of late. This year however the summer rains have arrived early.
Great write Sharyn
Thanks for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
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A perfect message, When will we learn?
Your poem flows so well and paints a vivid tale of the dry parched summers that we have experienced of late. This year however the summer rains have arrived early.
Great write Sharyn
Thanks for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 13-May-2013
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Thank you so much Ann - we've been dry for 6 weeks but the sky broke upon 3 days ago (finally), thank goodness! Where do you live?
:)S
Comment from wordsareus
I love the tone of this poem and the strong message. You use a lot of vivid imagery and personification within your poem.
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I love the tone of this poem and the strong message. You use a lot of vivid imagery and personification within your poem.
Comment Written 13-May-2013
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I'm swimming out to my car as we speak! :))))