All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "No Sound"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Jade Lawson
Hi, I love the picture and the way this poem is presented. It sounds really well, I liked the rhythm and rhyming... It flows really well.
It also has a great imagery and good descriptive words.
I liked it.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Hi, I love the picture and the way this poem is presented. It sounds really well, I liked the rhythm and rhyming... It flows really well.
It also has a great imagery and good descriptive words.
I liked it.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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thx Angel! :)
Comment from 9999pool
A spiritual poem perhaps about God looking over all of us amid the gold hole and the shards of stars. Silence and he knows what's going on with us. A short nice katie-21, cheers.
Hugs
Ritchie.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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A spiritual poem perhaps about God looking over all of us amid the gold hole and the shards of stars. Silence and he knows what's going on with us. A short nice katie-21, cheers.
Hugs
Ritchie.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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short 'n sweet Ritchie! :)))S
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Good, LOL. I am checking out the other poems of yours and see if I can detect a sixers in them soon so please bear with me - you see, Mr. Ritchie is a very 'busybody' man, LOL.
Have a great Sunday and cheerio, Ritchie.
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I have a couple of cheeky ones in there I think you'll like dear! :)
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Great! Can't wait to check out the cheeky and witty ones which you are excellent at. I will throw in the towel if I find them, :)) Ritchie.
Comment from Lulube
What a simple but very unique style of writing. I've seen most poems styled in this manner not to rhyme. This is not the case in your poem because it has rhymes that are easy to say to rhyme the same way. you know!!!
Your vision was easy to see with the descriptive words and the placement of these words.
I enjoyed this relaxed poem.
lulube
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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What a simple but very unique style of writing. I've seen most poems styled in this manner not to rhyme. This is not the case in your poem because it has rhymes that are easy to say to rhyme the same way. you know!!!
Your vision was easy to see with the descriptive words and the placement of these words.
I enjoyed this relaxed poem.
lulube
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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I always enjoy playing around with some rhyming Lu, even in free verse.
Blessings,
Sharyn
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ya, they seem right or they don't
lulube
Comment from Gungalo
star shards
spiral
round
earth sleeps
shhh ...
no sound
God's
looking
down
Not that it matters for poetry's sake, but isn't God always looking down? It's a very creative write and that makes the difference.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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star shards
spiral
round
earth sleeps
shhh ...
no sound
God's
looking
down
Not that it matters for poetry's sake, but isn't God always looking down? It's a very creative write and that makes the difference.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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well, he's supposed to be omnipresent, which means there could be options ...
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LOL girl.
Comment from Opal H.
Ooh... I love the way you've made this gold and black. Nice description of the sky as if filled with activity versus silent earth.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Ooh... I love the way you've made this gold and black. Nice description of the sky as if filled with activity versus silent earth.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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thx Opal - something short for fun! :))S
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
A perfect picture poem presentation. An artistic master piece, I would say. This is a keeper. Thanks so much for sharing. Your friend, Bob
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A perfect picture poem presentation. An artistic master piece, I would say. This is a keeper. Thanks so much for sharing. Your friend, Bob
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Bless you for your lovely six on this one Bob! Sometimes, simplicity is best, yes? :)Sharyn
Comment from jgirlie152
Very nice, Visionary. Besides a poet, you have a very artistic nature. I enjoyed this poem and the layout.
Tres bien.
Joan
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Very nice, Visionary. Besides a poet, you have a very artistic nature. I enjoyed this poem and the layout.
Tres bien.
Joan
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Mais merci jg! :)))Sharyn
Comment from Laurent Andre Menot
Beautiful poetry very well written.
I like the atmosphere you create about the universe and cosmic spirituality.
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Beautiful poetry very well written.
I like the atmosphere you create about the universe and cosmic spirituality.
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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thx so much Laurent! :)Sharyn
Comment from Kiki12
Beautiful presentation, lovely imagery and alliteration. As I read to the end, I realized I was actually whispering in my head LOL That's an effective write !
I absolutely love this:
"star shards spiral round"- just perfect
Kiki
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Beautiful presentation, lovely imagery and alliteration. As I read to the end, I realized I was actually whispering in my head LOL That's an effective write !
I absolutely love this:
"star shards spiral round"- just perfect
Kiki
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Bless you Kiki! :)Sharyn
Comment from Sararb
Very nice I love the format of this poem, and the gold against the black is so breathtaking. You have described the moon against the night sky pefectly. Sararb :)
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Very nice I love the format of this poem, and the gold against the black is so breathtaking. You have described the moon against the night sky pefectly. Sararb :)
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Glad you enjoyed this one Sararb! :)Sharyn