All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "Red Velvet Moment"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from jadapenn
What a delicious red velvet mixture of ecstacy and terror. You have to be on the spot to experience these contradicting feelings and enjoying every minute of them. Well written and illustrated. Don't wait, baby - just do it! Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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What a delicious red velvet mixture of ecstacy and terror. You have to be on the spot to experience these contradicting feelings and enjoying every minute of them. Well written and illustrated. Don't wait, baby - just do it! Best wishes for the contest. luv jada
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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thx so much, jada! I will!
Comment from smudge
I like this poem. It would probably go very well to music. The rhythm and the rhyme is excellent. Beautiful artwork and exceptionally well presented.
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I like this poem. It would probably go very well to music. The rhythm and the rhyme is excellent. Beautiful artwork and exceptionally well presented.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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thx so much my dear! :) Sharyn
Comment from Dillinger
Awsome. I loved the inner dialogue, the anxiety was very well protrayed, and I enjoyed the pace and pillar style. Way to rhyme too!
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Awsome. I loved the inner dialogue, the anxiety was very well protrayed, and I enjoyed the pace and pillar style. Way to rhyme too!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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thx so much, my dear!
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oh, I forgot to mention, I LOVED...
'takes a breath of red velvet moment' hopefully I got that right. It had visual imagery, made me imagine how it would taste and smell. Very cool
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oh good! I don't know where that came from - it just popped out of my head as I was writing ... and felt good ... glad it did to you too!
Comment from squid152
You always have such colorful presentations. Sounds like a night at the club. I liked the internal rhyme of f**k and upchuck.-Gary
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You always have such colorful presentations. Sounds like a night at the club. I liked the internal rhyme of f**k and upchuck.-Gary
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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wrote it just for you, Gary! though the reverend hasn't called by yet - shouldn't be long!
Comment from Rose Hearth
Absolutely love it! The emotion is palpable and the pillar presentation guides the flow perfectly...tap, tap, tap... you got this vote, baby!
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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Absolutely love it! The emotion is palpable and the pillar presentation guides the flow perfectly...tap, tap, tap... you got this vote, baby!
Comment Written 08-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2012
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yah, Rose! I'll send you a freebie ticket, baby! :)
Comment from Fluffyhead
Love how this is singy songy and whimsical and uplifting all at the same time. This makes wanna get up and cheer and the picture makes me smile
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Love how this is singy songy and whimsical and uplifting all at the same time. This makes wanna get up and cheer and the picture makes me smile
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Bless you, Fluff! You can sing with me ANY time! Cheer away because I'm cheering for you - and a special thank you, my dear, for your great SIX! (I know they're in short supply at the end of the week, so I'm doubly honored) ... now shhhh! time for the show! :)
Comment from McMurry903
This is a very creative entry for this prompt and I love it! You showed strong emotion using an interesting form that flowed well and was a fun read. Great job, I wish you the very best of luck in this contest! Brian :)
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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This is a very creative entry for this prompt and I love it! You showed strong emotion using an interesting form that flowed well and was a fun read. Great job, I wish you the very best of luck in this contest! Brian :)
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thx so much Brian - easy to write this one - been thru it too many times! fun to turn it into something else though!
Comment from HittorX
Bravo! I Loved that! Woot! That flowed so well and I smiled and I felt the tension. That was great, I feel like I was just on a ride! Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Bravo! I Loved that! Woot! That flowed so well and I smiled and I felt the tension. That was great, I feel like I was just on a ride! Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Should I send you a ticket? Bless you! :)
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Yes, Please do! LoL
Comment from Craigitar
Good poem and neat style--I enjoyed it. You seem to have accurately imbued this piece with all the nerves, angst and trepidation that is part of the package of being a performer. Good job and luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Good poem and neat style--I enjoyed it. You seem to have accurately imbued this piece with all the nerves, angst and trepidation that is part of the package of being a performer. Good job and luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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You've got that right! thank you , my dear! :)
Comment from artemis53
My oh my. And who is this again. I swear I can read you like a book. I also did my share of theater work and I know what it's like to take that cleansing breath beneath the spot and just move through like it's nothin' Well done description.
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My oh my. And who is this again. I swear I can read you like a book. I also did my share of theater work and I know what it's like to take that cleansing breath beneath the spot and just move through like it's nothin' Well done description.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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No mystery left in the world, hmm?