Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Annabel"A collection of my children's poems
93 total reviews
Comment from nomi338
This poem is simply delightful. It was so much fun to read that I could not get the grin off my face for quite a few moments after I had finished reading it. I am going to definitely make a copy of it and save it so that I can re-read it often. As I earlier stated it is simply delightful. The words are breezy and light, the mood playful. You set the perfect tone for a poem of this type. I knew right away that this poem was going to be a delight to read and I was not disappointed. Great job!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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This poem is simply delightful. It was so much fun to read that I could not get the grin off my face for quite a few moments after I had finished reading it. I am going to definitely make a copy of it and save it so that I can re-read it often. As I earlier stated it is simply delightful. The words are breezy and light, the mood playful. You set the perfect tone for a poem of this type. I knew right away that this poem was going to be a delight to read and I was not disappointed. Great job!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the enthusiastic review and the six stars - I appreciate it when readers tell me I have made them smile.
Unfortunately, all the best reviews for this came after the voting was completed.
Steve
Comment from sunvell
Perfect rhyme and meter. It has a musical quality that children would love to hear and recite. Even for an adult, it would be a dream to read aloud.
Clever writing!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Perfect rhyme and meter. It has a musical quality that children would love to hear and recite. Even for an adult, it would be a dream to read aloud.
Clever writing!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thanks for the kind words and the six stars - much appreciated.
Have you really been a member since 2006 and only just started writing??!
Steve
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I'm a freelance writer when I'm off FanStory. My work, which is mostly in the business communication and content writing space, keeps me busy. Between that and family time, I post only when I get the time to log in or when I'm between projects. :)
Comment from Meena Jawahrani
You have done a great job with contest prompt.
Cute, vibrant and colorful poem. I too feel like joing the fun with Anna and you.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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You have done a great job with contest prompt.
Cute, vibrant and colorful poem. I too feel like joing the fun with Anna and you.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Thanks, meena. have a good day.
Steve
Comment from TDLRasmar
Very cute. I think most every kid would enjoy reading this one. If you haven't already I would seriously think of trying to have this one published. I'm really a noob at all this but it did seem to me to be a perfect poem for a child under 10.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Very cute. I think most every kid would enjoy reading this one. If you haven't already I would seriously think of trying to have this one published. I'm really a noob at all this but it did seem to me to be a perfect poem for a child under 10.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thanks for the kind words - one day I will agther my best efforts together for publication (hopefully!)
Steve
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Steve
It is nearly impossible to wrangle a sixth star outta me, but you done it!! This is a fantastic children's poem, and your fourth line in each stanza stands out wonderfully
Bear
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Hey there Steve
It is nearly impossible to wrangle a sixth star outta me, but you done it!! This is a fantastic children's poem, and your fourth line in each stanza stands out wonderfully
Bear
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the high praise and that rare as hens' teeth sixth star. Not enough magic to snaffle the prize, but I grew quite attached to my spoilt but not bratty Annabel.
Steve
Comment from Thatguypk
This is a great, vibrant and colourful poem. It has a strong natural flow, rhyme and rhythm, but above all else, it is highly entertaining, and I would imagine that children would really enjoy reading it. I was hoping the little brat was going to explode at the end. It was very kind of you to let her live so long! :-) Very enjoyable, thank you.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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This is a great, vibrant and colourful poem. It has a strong natural flow, rhyme and rhythm, but above all else, it is highly entertaining, and I would imagine that children would really enjoy reading it. I was hoping the little brat was going to explode at the end. It was very kind of you to let her live so long! :-) Very enjoyable, thank you.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thank you - you see, she wasn't really a brat, so I felt like giving her a long and incredibly pampered existence.
Steve
Comment from Curly Girly
BRILLIANT! You honestly did this so well. It is superb. No corrections needed here. I love the rhythm, rhyme and flow. The story line is strong and true with a suitable ending. Bravo! CG
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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BRILLIANT! You honestly did this so well. It is superb. No corrections needed here. I love the rhythm, rhyme and flow. The story line is strong and true with a suitable ending. Bravo! CG
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thank you, CG - I appreciate the enthusiastic review and the six stars. The contest is done and dusted with no glory for Annabel, unfortunately - but then she did get all the cake!
Steve
Comment from nancy_e_davis
It's a really cute poem and I am sure kids will just love it. Good rhythm and rhyme and the little airplane is cute too. Good luck in the contest Nancy
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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It's a really cute poem and I am sure kids will just love it. Good rhythm and rhyme and the little airplane is cute too. Good luck in the contest Nancy
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thank you - contest is done and dusted with no glory for Annabel, unfortunately - but then she did get all the cake!
Steve
Comment from Sally Carter
Oh Steve, you are so good at this kind of poem. So many people seem to think that if a poem is funny and for children, quality can be sacrificed, but not you.
A brilliant name for your main character, some super internal rhymes, and great images. You conjured up a mental image of one of those awful children from Charlie and the Chocolate Factory.
Not sure how the voting went on this, but hope it does or did well for you. Sorry, I just don't seem to be able to keep up at the moment.
Best wishes
Sally.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Oh Steve, you are so good at this kind of poem. So many people seem to think that if a poem is funny and for children, quality can be sacrificed, but not you.
A brilliant name for your main character, some super internal rhymes, and great images. You conjured up a mental image of one of those awful children from Charlie and the Chocolate Factory.
Not sure how the voting went on this, but hope it does or did well for you. Sorry, I just don't seem to be able to keep up at the moment.
Best wishes
Sally.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thank you - contest is done and dusted with no glory for Annabel, unfortunately - but then she did get all the cake!
No need to apologize for having a life outside FS - one day I will get to listen to that radio show of yours...
Steve
Comment from Hitcher
A fun little offering for the contest mate, what were her parents thinking, they bought her a plane and flew her to Spain and forgot to ask me and you, I'm blue. Good luck :)
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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A fun little offering for the contest mate, what were her parents thinking, they bought her a plane and flew her to Spain and forgot to ask me and you, I'm blue. Good luck :)
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2012
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Thanks for the rhyming review - I am blue too, Annabel, no prize for you.
Steve