Walk In The Dark Forest
Ivan sneaks off the school bus55 total reviews
Comment from Tellis
Young kids shouldn't scare their parents like that. Don't they know it shortens thier life spans by a few years every time, LoL. Great flash fiction.
Tellis
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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Young kids shouldn't scare their parents like that. Don't they know it shortens thier life spans by a few years every time, LoL. Great flash fiction.
Tellis
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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Oh, it is a bitter lesson for the little guy! Thanks for taking time to review this little story, Tellis. Now it's time you posted again. It's been a while. Marie
Comment from tomprato
Glad that this story had a happy ending. Sometimes on FanStory we are not sure. Annie could have become a Big Bad Wolf and eaten up poor Ivan. Or Ivan could have become a Werewolf. You never know in these stories!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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Glad that this story had a happy ending. Sometimes on FanStory we are not sure. Annie could have become a Big Bad Wolf and eaten up poor Ivan. Or Ivan could have become a Werewolf. You never know in these stories!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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I'm glad you have tender feeling for this little tots. Thanks for doing a review. Marie
Comment from wrdtrctr
Interesting piece but so very short. Was there a limit on words? I ask because you point out that you have only 280 here and a bit more might have kept it from being bare bones.
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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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Interesting piece but so very short. Was there a limit on words? I ask because you point out that you have only 280 here and a bit more might have kept it from being bare bones.
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Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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You're right about the quick story. Some kid magazines require just 150 words. Whew! I think they save the room for advertizers. Thanks for the review.
Comment from The Stranger
mom always knows what her little boy is doing, and she was ready when little Ivan decided to "jump" the school bus on his way home
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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mom always knows what her little boy is doing, and she was ready when little Ivan decided to "jump" the school bus on his way home
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2011
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Good conclusion. Thanks for your comments and for doing a review.
Comment from RKagan
I loved the way you use words to paint a picture. Your images are vivid and captivating. This is a well written short piece. good job.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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I loved the way you use words to paint a picture. Your images are vivid and captivating. This is a well written short piece. good job.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Thanks for the compliments. I appreciate the time you've given this little story and for the review.
Comment from Bayberry
What a delightful read...you've captured the tone just right for an adventurous child who suddenly has seconds thoughts about the decision made, and then is rescued by a savvy mom. Very well written. Josie
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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What a delightful read...you've captured the tone just right for an adventurous child who suddenly has seconds thoughts about the decision made, and then is rescued by a savvy mom. Very well written. Josie
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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You are a jewel for capturing the exact pattern of the little story. Thanks so much for your review, Josie.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Alaska,
This is a delightful story and one I enjoyed from the first line to the last. I was afraid Ivan would encounter a monster of some kind but it was just mom...who might take kindly to him sneaking off the bus! Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Hi Alaska,
This is a delightful story and one I enjoyed from the first line to the last. I was afraid Ivan would encounter a monster of some kind but it was just mom...who might take kindly to him sneaking off the bus! Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Many thanks for your kind comments. I appreciate this review so much, Chey.
Comment from Deejharrington
Great children's story with a terrific lesson. After reading it, I wouldn't go off wandering through the woods with wolves and bears, and worse his Mother!!! A great ending.
deb
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Great children's story with a terrific lesson. After reading it, I wouldn't go off wandering through the woods with wolves and bears, and worse his Mother!!! A great ending.
deb
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Deb, your comments are right on target. I appreciate your review of this little story. Many thanks, Marie.
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You're very welcome
deb
Comment from MizKat
Alaskastory - I enjoyed reading your story. It's a good thing what the boy thought was a monster was just his mom. LOL Kat
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Alaskastory - I enjoyed reading your story. It's a good thing what the boy thought was a monster was just his mom. LOL Kat
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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I appreciate your take on this little story. Thanks for doing a review, Kat.
Comment from Darla9
Fun read with great imaginary. Ivan was lucky that it was his mother who found him. I enjoyed your short story, thanks for sharing :)
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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Fun read with great imaginary. Ivan was lucky that it was his mother who found him. I enjoyed your short story, thanks for sharing :)
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2011
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I appreciate your comments and am glad you enjoyed the little story. Thanks for the review.