The Heir Apparent
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "A Late Night Talk"A family learns their father is a serial killer
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Comment from InterestingRon
Hi Smurphy
I admire the way you are using each chapter to build up the personalities of the characters. The Mother is now emerging large, and the relationship between the two brothers is becoming clearer. The involvement with the press is fascinating.
Another great chapter.
Ron
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Hi Smurphy
I admire the way you are using each chapter to build up the personalities of the characters. The Mother is now emerging large, and the relationship between the two brothers is becoming clearer. The involvement with the press is fascinating.
Another great chapter.
Ron
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Tahnk you for your generous and enthusiastic review. I am thrilled you like this story.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
bout time they made a statement to the press. This is a great story Smurph with great characters and a wonderful plot line. Don't know where you come up with these ideas but they are winners to me! xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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bout time they made a statement to the press. This is a great story Smurph with great characters and a wonderful plot line. Don't know where you come up with these ideas but they are winners to me! xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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|Thanks so much. I am pleased you continue to enjoy this.
Comment from Tellis
I enjoyed this excellent and well written chapter and I don't know what they can say to the public to make them change their minds.
Tellis
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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I enjoyed this excellent and well written chapter and I don't know what they can say to the public to make them change their minds.
Tellis
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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I am so pleased you liked this one.
Comment from Helen Tan
A clean chapter and though I've not read previous chapters, I had no problems reading. Well written, Sasha. =D
and the FBI has a special department called Behavioral Science that specializes in serial killers.
This is one are I've always been interested in. But I think no matter how much we research and find these patterns, there will always be one who breaks the mould.
They are natural chameleons.
This is the scary part - many serial killers look and act like your friendly next door neighbour. In a way, this "normal" trait allows them to lure so many victims.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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A clean chapter and though I've not read previous chapters, I had no problems reading. Well written, Sasha. =D
and the FBI has a special department called Behavioral Science that specializes in serial killers.
This is one are I've always been interested in. But I think no matter how much we research and find these patterns, there will always be one who breaks the mould.
They are natural chameleons.
This is the scary part - many serial killers look and act like your friendly next door neighbour. In a way, this "normal" trait allows them to lure so many victims.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Sadly, that's why they get away with it for so long. No on suspect them. I am pleased you liked this chapter.
Comment from marcellawachtel
Very good chapter, this one. You have gone deeper into the relationship between the brothers, and rounded out the mother's personality a little more. The story is still, as from the start, very gripping.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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Very good chapter, this one. You have gone deeper into the relationship between the brothers, and rounded out the mother's personality a little more. The story is still, as from the start, very gripping.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2011
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I am so pleased you are enjoying this...if that is the right word to use.
Comment from whitteron
I like the way you are going very methodically through each stage for each of these victims/characters. Hey, Ted Bundy lived 1/2 block from me near the U and was killing girls with long dark hair parted in the middle--me. He actually tried to pick up a friend of mine outside of a shopping mall, offering to help her carry her packages. She said she got a creepy feeling, even though he was so good looking. I like the background info you added. I personally love criminal psychology, but there are those that don't read all of that gore like I do so this is a good section to set the basics in place.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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I like the way you are going very methodically through each stage for each of these victims/characters. Hey, Ted Bundy lived 1/2 block from me near the U and was killing girls with long dark hair parted in the middle--me. He actually tried to pick up a friend of mine outside of a shopping mall, offering to help her carry her packages. She said she got a creepy feeling, even though he was so good looking. I like the background info you added. I personally love criminal psychology, but there are those that don't read all of that gore like I do so this is a good section to set the basics in place.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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I am definitely not much for the blood and gore but do love the psychological side of what makes a killer tick. Glad you like how this is progressing.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Sasha. Now Mom is talking sense, and actually James too. But I think to Mom, James is still a child to be protected from the birds of prey, the press. Good progress of the story so far...
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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Hi, Sasha. Now Mom is talking sense, and actually James too. But I think to Mom, James is still a child to be protected from the birds of prey, the press. Good progress of the story so far...
Comment Written 05-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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Thanks so much. Yes, James may be smart but he is still a young boy with not much experience socially. Glad you like this so far.
Comment from words
I am always so glad to see your name in my PMs ... and, I am completely addicted to James' story.
For the first time, his mother seems completely together and is making rational decisions ... I wonder how long this will last.
Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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I am always so glad to see your name in my PMs ... and, I am completely addicted to James' story.
For the first time, his mother seems completely together and is making rational decisions ... I wonder how long this will last.
Well done.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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She's going to have her good days and bad days, but hopefully will continue to progress. Glad you like this so far.
Comment from vickib
Enjoyed this chapter where everyone is on the move, things are happening and stuff is getting sorted out a little more. I like mom more and more she is stepping up and being a stronger person. I'm familiar with all those serial killers, oh haha not in person, from watching shows about them, I too wonder what makes them do what they do, fascinates me, so that conversation between the boys was cool and interesting. You did some homework on that. LOL your ending with aunt and uncle showing up at the door with suitcases. Now that really leads to the next chapter. XO Vicki
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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Enjoyed this chapter where everyone is on the move, things are happening and stuff is getting sorted out a little more. I like mom more and more she is stepping up and being a stronger person. I'm familiar with all those serial killers, oh haha not in person, from watching shows about them, I too wonder what makes them do what they do, fascinates me, so that conversation between the boys was cool and interesting. You did some homework on that. LOL your ending with aunt and uncle showing up at the door with suitcases. Now that really leads to the next chapter. XO Vicki
Comment Written 05-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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Yes, I needed to do something to break the tension. Mom needs a shoulder to lean on and Sis is the one for her. Glad you liked this one.
Comment from Joan E.
I remembered this chapter but not the school boy, Smithy, example--in any event, I think it's a realistic passage in the conversation between the brothers, and you did a great job of differentiating the deviant behaviors. I think you are right that this chapter needs to be continuous, and you broke the tension well with the arrival of the relatives.
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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I remembered this chapter but not the school boy, Smithy, example--in any event, I think it's a realistic passage in the conversation between the brothers, and you did a great job of differentiating the deviant behaviors. I think you are right that this chapter needs to be continuous, and you broke the tension well with the arrival of the relatives.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2011
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I didn't make too many changes to this chapter. The major changes are yet to come. Glad you still enjoyed this one.
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It's hard to remember all the details, but I can't forget having been impressed with the "expert" details in this chapter in the first version. I'm looking forward to the major changes to come, and I'm sure I'll admire them. Happy weekend- Joan
