Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "The Devils Seed"memiors from my life experiences.
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello keimosobi
The devil knows how indeed to plant the seed of temptation and you tell us very well in your rhyming poem how he tempts us -
when you said-
go back Moses with your commandment
you don't know hopeless abandonment
Gert
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Hello keimosobi
The devil knows how indeed to plant the seed of temptation and you tell us very well in your rhyming poem how he tempts us -
when you said-
go back Moses with your commandment
you don't know hopeless abandonment
Gert
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your reply. and the excellent rating.
Comment from Alan K Pease
If she is the Devils seed I might become a subscriber. From your pen name I think you are a fan of the Lone Ranger. The poem is great and describes fate. The rhyming is great
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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If she is the Devils seed I might become a subscriber. From your pen name I think you are a fan of the Lone Ranger. The poem is great and describes fate. The rhyming is great
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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thank you alan
Comment from MumEsGirl
Incredible work here. Very descriptive and flows well.
Excellent flow and rhythm in this poem.
Your choice of artwork enhances the entire work
hugs
kate
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Incredible work here. Very descriptive and flows well.
Excellent flow and rhythm in this poem.
Your choice of artwork enhances the entire work
hugs
kate
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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thanks again kate
Comment from LadyWave
I loved it. I thought it was so evocative, and every line was delivered with great emotion. I especially loved the lines "go back Moses with your commandment, you don't know hopeless abandonment." Very powerful words. Excellently done.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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I loved it. I thought it was so evocative, and every line was delivered with great emotion. I especially loved the lines "go back Moses with your commandment, you don't know hopeless abandonment." Very powerful words. Excellently done.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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thank you for your review and the stars.
Comment from jackpeg
Your main theme seems to be that the writings of Moses and God's angels (if He exists at all and has any) is insufficient to your needs. If you had expressed it better, even if I don't agree with you, I would have rated you higher than a four. It is a good subject but, as a poem, needs a more subtle treatment than a mere dismissal. The first three couplets don't seem to have much meaning. From there on to the end, your meaning is clear, but lacks definition. I hope you find what you are looking for.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Your main theme seems to be that the writings of Moses and God's angels (if He exists at all and has any) is insufficient to your needs. If you had expressed it better, even if I don't agree with you, I would have rated you higher than a four. It is a good subject but, as a poem, needs a more subtle treatment than a mere dismissal. The first three couplets don't seem to have much meaning. From there on to the end, your meaning is clear, but lacks definition. I hope you find what you are looking for.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Im glad everyone else dosent share your opinion LOL. Thank you for taking the time to review my poem.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Keimosobie. This is quite a strongly-worded poem you have created here. I especially like these lines:
"wanting to take what is taken
knowing what is forsaken"
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Hi, Keimosobie. This is quite a strongly-worded poem you have created here. I especially like these lines:
"wanting to take what is taken
knowing what is forsaken"
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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thank you mastery
Comment from gudbjorg
There's a struggle in our hearts between good and bad, lust and love. Real love prefers others happiness before your own, it loves truth. But lust wants things for itself, it takes without considering the other fellow. Well done, good to remind us of the real values of life.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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There's a struggle in our hearts between good and bad, lust and love. Real love prefers others happiness before your own, it loves truth. But lust wants things for itself, it takes without considering the other fellow. Well done, good to remind us of the real values of life.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review
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Glad you liked it.
Comment from Aussie
I think we have all given in to temptation, some more than others, the grass is always greener on the other side, the payment is heavy. I think you wrote this poem extremely well and achieved All Time Best - says it all. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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I think we have all given in to temptation, some more than others, the grass is always greener on the other side, the payment is heavy. I think you wrote this poem extremely well and achieved All Time Best - says it all. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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thank you for your comments and your stars.
Comment from jmyron
The devil sows his seeds, and the fruit that is born is as varied as the people that succumb to the seed. Lust and greed are indeed some of that fruit, but you are right pain is the result of such seed
John
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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The devil sows his seeds, and the fruit that is born is as varied as the people that succumb to the seed. Lust and greed are indeed some of that fruit, but you are right pain is the result of such seed
John
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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thank you for the kind review and the stars.
Comment from chells36
Well firstly the picture is just terrific I just love that sexy dress the devil would approve LOL pardon the pun
The poem is very eloquent in it fire and brimstone methodology
well written with a great flow
thanks xx
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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Well firstly the picture is just terrific I just love that sexy dress the devil would approve LOL pardon the pun
The poem is very eloquent in it fire and brimstone methodology
well written with a great flow
thanks xx
Comment Written 19-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2010
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thank you for the kind review and the stars.