Comment from Sharkey

Excellent

This flows very well, I am finding that I really enjoy reading this particular type of poetry, it is very good. Well written and I didn't catch any errors.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2010

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2010

thanks

Comment from duchessofdrumborg

Excellent

'I.. Waiting' asks a rhetorical question which I doubt anyone is able to answer. As this situation is self-afflicted, it is in my opinion a case of "cop it sweet and don't bleat". It was a pleasure to both read and review a work of this caliber.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2010

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2010

thanks

Comment from Earthwriter

Excellent

very nicely done albeit a very dark and sinister piece of writing i thought you did an awesome job i like it when people hold to a theme

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2010

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2010

thanks

Comment from LadyWave

Excellent

I enjoyed this poem and thought it was very unique. I thought it flowed very well. I especially liked the line - "When your faith starts to wilt, soften and moil"

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010

Thanks i like that one too.

Comment from Ailo

Excellent

A very grim poem :) Such a restricting form of poetry, yet you did a fine job of striking fear through faith. Kind of an apocalyptic poem...or at least those are the key words I picked up on....seeing it through a religious aspect. Nice job :)

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010

Thank you.

Comment from Ann Smith

Excellent

This is an interesting format and one that lends itself to the warning. The repeating lines are made stronger because of the rhythm and flow. I didn't realize until recently that some of the oil is actually dinosaur bones. There's only so many fossils down there, so it will run out some time. Only God knows when. ann

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010

Thanks for the review.

reply by Ann Smith on 08-Sep-2010

You are welcome.

Comment from rosah

Excellent

love the refrain in this, stir the pot, it's going to boil, excellent artwork chosen, to frame this well thought out poem, thank you for sharing, blessings.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010

Thank you Rosa for your kind review.

Comment from juliaSjames

Excellent

I don't know much about villanelle poetry beyond what is written in your author notes. But the recurrent lines, and the strong rhythmic meter work together very well to emphasize your ominous warning. Great macabre image of the Grim Reaper. Your refrain reminds me strongly of the three witches in Macbeth..."Double, double, toil and trouble/ Fire burn, and cauldron bubble" is what they mutter as they stir the pot.

Great atmospheric poetry. Some of the lines read as incantations or even prophecies.

I think there's some spag in the last stanza, should read "All of your kings that are so royal". I also suggest that you delete "all" in the following line so it reads: "Will beg for mercy under my scythe."

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010

Thanks for the correction and the suggestion. much appriciated. Thanks.

Comment from FredCollingwood

Excellent

Of course the earth isn't going to run out of oil duting our lifetime or our childrens, but everyone might be better off if it did. Great poem.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010

I'm not so sure. Thanks for the review and the stars.

Comment from fictionwriter

Excellent

I won't mind when the earth is out of oil, because life will go back to the simpler times. Then all the high and mighties will be just like everyone else. Great job.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2010

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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010

Thanks. It will be ok if we prepare.