Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Twisted Faces in hiding places."memiors from my life experiences.
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Comment from telespectral
Most interesting poem. It has a story line that keeps the reader questioning exactly what happened. Intense but very well written. Good pick of pictures also.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Most interesting poem. It has a story line that keeps the reader questioning exactly what happened. Intense but very well written. Good pick of pictures also.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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yes I sory if i frustrated my readers. Its the mystery that conjurs the imagination.
Comment from katz meow
Such a mysterious writing, and you leave so many unanswered questions, evidently for only the author to know. Your Villanelle style poem is beautiful in both rhyme and meter, and has a smooth flow. An excellent write...katz meow
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Such a mysterious writing, and you leave so many unanswered questions, evidently for only the author to know. Your Villanelle style poem is beautiful in both rhyme and meter, and has a smooth flow. An excellent write...katz meow
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you and I've read your work and I like it. Thanks for the review.
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Well thank you, and your welcome.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello keimosobie,
May I make a suggestion not that I don't understand how a
Villanelle is composed.
I'm impressed by yours.
The thing is don't you think you should put in your authors notes of how a Villanelle is formed.
Nice meeting a another good poet here on Fanstory.
Gert
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Hello keimosobie,
May I make a suggestion not that I don't understand how a
Villanelle is composed.
I'm impressed by yours.
The thing is don't you think you should put in your authors notes of how a Villanelle is formed.
Nice meeting a another good poet here on Fanstory.
Gert
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Ok I put it in the Authors notes for you. thanks for the stars.
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You are welcome
I'm sure it will help
Gert
Comment from Ronni
A lot of suspense and mystery as to what incident
perpetuated these reflections and images so dark and
foreboding. Real or imagined, mystery lasts to the
very end with no discernable grasp of the reality
at play or some invisible demons creating a surreal
imprisonment. Unusual write. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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A lot of suspense and mystery as to what incident
perpetuated these reflections and images so dark and
foreboding. Real or imagined, mystery lasts to the
very end with no discernable grasp of the reality
at play or some invisible demons creating a surreal
imprisonment. Unusual write. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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thanks it was inspired by my favorite poet. Thanks for the stars and im glad you liked it. you did like it correct?
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absolutely did like it! Still not sure
what the 'incident' was involved, but
the presentation was thorough and indeed
suspenseful. New at reading your posts,
so if I am not quite on mark, will perhaps
get better at it by reading more of your
writings.
Comment from Jenn Starr
This is cool. As a songwriter, I could easily put this to music, it's very lyrical, not just the rythm but the words, the way you continue the theme in every stanza. Do you play and/or write music? If you do, this should be a song! ;)
Take care my friend
JennStarr*
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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This is cool. As a songwriter, I could easily put this to music, it's very lyrical, not just the rythm but the words, the way you continue the theme in every stanza. Do you play and/or write music? If you do, this should be a song! ;)
Take care my friend
JennStarr*
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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No but its supposed to be put to music the french designed it that way.
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The french designed it that way??? Sorry you lost me there! ;D lol - maybe I'm forgetting something
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The french designed the form of the villenelle to bet set to music back in the 1700's
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Ahhhh, ok, thanks for the history lesson! I love it! So you're a musician I take it? What do you play?
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im not a musician. i like music though.
Comment from FredCollingwood
What a great poem.
A child has thoughts he easily replaces.
This is true only for conscious thoughts. All are stored in one's subconscious mind and affect forever.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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What a great poem.
A child has thoughts he easily replaces.
This is true only for conscious thoughts. All are stored in one's subconscious mind and affect forever.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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yes indeed. thank you and your quote was the first for this line. I have had six lines quoted from this poem and they are all diffrent isnt that cool.
Comment from kerrikat
I love the images this poem conveys. I really like the line that reads "Reality's paces tie imagination's laces"
Some times reality intrudes into my imagination...I live in my mind more and more these days. I like it better there. :) Peace&Love,Kerri
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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I love the images this poem conveys. I really like the line that reads "Reality's paces tie imagination's laces"
Some times reality intrudes into my imagination...I live in my mind more and more these days. I like it better there. :) Peace&Love,Kerri
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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thank you im glad you liked it. thanks for the stars.
Comment from afternoonlight
This poem eludes to a terrible incident that cannot be undone. The happening is not clearly stated by the form and repitition evoke an emotion of regret and fear, and a tense unknowing.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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This poem eludes to a terrible incident that cannot be undone. The happening is not clearly stated by the form and repitition evoke an emotion of regret and fear, and a tense unknowing.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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thank you for the review and the stars.
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thank you for the review and the stars.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi keimosobie,
This is a remarkable poem and one I enjoyed reading more than once. I wonder if it came to because of work in a psychiatric hospital. I like the villanelle poetry form and this one makes me want to write one. Your word selection is very successful and the rhyme is musical. A great dark poem....chey
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Hi keimosobie,
This is a remarkable poem and one I enjoyed reading more than once. I wonder if it came to because of work in a psychiatric hospital. I like the villanelle poetry form and this one makes me want to write one. Your word selection is very successful and the rhyme is musical. A great dark poem....chey
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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go ahead and give it a try its not an easy one. see where the poem takes you. thanks for the great review
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go ahead and give it a try its not an easy one. see where the poem takes you. thanks for the great review
Comment from c_lucas
Quite often we have to hide our motives. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Quite often we have to hide our motives. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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thanks for understanding and the good review.
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You're welcome.