Weeding my Life
little rhyme, please read author notes35 total reviews
Comment from Awatef
I felt sad at the beginning of your poem. Not far from where I sometimes stand. Thank you for a better ending emphasize more on the positive aspect though.
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reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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I felt sad at the beginning of your poem. Not far from where I sometimes stand. Thank you for a better ending emphasize more on the positive aspect though.
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Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Thanks Awatef, I appreciate your kind comments, I am just wondering why you give such a low rating? We are supposed to give a reason, what we don't like about the poem, if we give less than five stars.
But I do appreciate your comments.
Love
Pupa
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Just to make you happy I'll give you 5 stars. I hope its not too late.
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Haha,you are sweet. But...they are still 4, never mind, I am happy to get a review from you.
Comment from dragonpoet
I like the artwork. It matches the confusion in the words.
It is flowing on the most part but a couple of lines seem too long.
I think you need the word not after will in the last stanza.
Also You could just say "I see pieces of myself scattered on the ground" and just "the good and the bad.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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I like the artwork. It matches the confusion in the words.
It is flowing on the most part but a couple of lines seem too long.
I think you need the word not after will in the last stanza.
Also You could just say "I see pieces of myself scattered on the ground" and just "the good and the bad.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Thanks dragonpoet, I appreciate your kind comments and supportive suggestions. To the first one, I have 'no' at the beginning to the line.
Love
Pupa
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You're welcome. I must of missed it, I'm sorry.
dragonpoet
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No problem at all.
Comment from NadineM
Pupa,
This is a very expressive poem, sharing how hard it is to pick up the pieces of your life when you've been so stressed and weighed down with worries and pain. Sometimes doing it in small steps takes longer but you feel stronger and more confident when you're put back together. And it sure feels good knowing you did it yourself!
If you're feeling down, please remember your friends here care about you.
Thanks for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Pupa,
This is a very expressive poem, sharing how hard it is to pick up the pieces of your life when you've been so stressed and weighed down with worries and pain. Sometimes doing it in small steps takes longer but you feel stronger and more confident when you're put back together. And it sure feels good knowing you did it yourself!
If you're feeling down, please remember your friends here care about you.
Thanks for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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I am glad you liked my poem, Nadine.
Thank you for your comments and support, I know I can count on you as a friend, a great one!
Love
Pupa
Comment from Leigh Ann
"But when I can't use my already strained muscles,
I take a look at my scattered self lying on the ground,
select good parts to work out a new chart."
I'm so touched by this poem. That stanza is my favorite because it just sums up my past year. So many things fell apart for me in 2009. I was right there looking at my scattered pieces when 2010 arrived, and I did work out a new chart for this year. So far its getting better every day.
You touched me with this piece. Thanks so much. Leigh
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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"But when I can't use my already strained muscles,
I take a look at my scattered self lying on the ground,
select good parts to work out a new chart."
I'm so touched by this poem. That stanza is my favorite because it just sums up my past year. So many things fell apart for me in 2009. I was right there looking at my scattered pieces when 2010 arrived, and I did work out a new chart for this year. So far its getting better every day.
You touched me with this piece. Thanks so much. Leigh
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 11-May-2010
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Leigh, I am so happy that you could relate to my poem that much and am so glad you are feeling better now.
Thanks a million for such a most generous rating.
Love
Pupa
Comment from boberto
Hey, Pup: Don't you know that you can hurt your back pulling weeds. It's hard on the fingers too. So, I order you to do nothing in the garden but smell the roses. Same as I have been advising for a couple of years. You desrve it.
Luv.
Rob
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Hey, Pup: Don't you know that you can hurt your back pulling weeds. It's hard on the fingers too. So, I order you to do nothing in the garden but smell the roses. Same as I have been advising for a couple of years. You desrve it.
Luv.
Rob
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Thanks for your kind comments,Rob. How can I smell the roses when they are not around, but maybe if I make an effort and look for them, I would find them!LOL
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Grow your own-I do. Or maybe you are looking so hard, you're looking right over them.
luv,
Rob
Comment from jack silver
this poem was excellently written. I enjoyed reading and look forward to getting into the next one you send in. this poem was really good how it got you to look at your self and rise above it. glad to have read it!
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Jack
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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this poem was excellently written. I enjoyed reading and look forward to getting into the next one you send in. this poem was really good how it got you to look at your self and rise above it. glad to have read it!
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Jack
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Thanks Jack, I am glad you liked my poem and appreciate your kind comments.
Love
Pupa
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no probs
Comment from fastdigits
A cleverly and unique diagnosis of
life, crafted in poignant words
of feelings when one feels so let
down, and then the realization that
it is up to you to have the sunshine
come in, weed out those feelings that
are bringing shade to your beautiful
garden.
Poetically and stylishly presented.
A tale that deserved six, but alas
for some reason, I only have five.
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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A cleverly and unique diagnosis of
life, crafted in poignant words
of feelings when one feels so let
down, and then the realization that
it is up to you to have the sunshine
come in, weed out those feelings that
are bringing shade to your beautiful
garden.
Poetically and stylishly presented.
A tale that deserved six, but alas
for some reason, I only have five.
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Thanks fastdigits, glad you liked my poem
Love
Pupa
Comment from Oatmeal
PUPA,
The theme was very nice. The flow was smooth. Well chosen words, colorful arrangement and wonderfully decorated thoughts.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. It was very clean.
I am looking forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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PUPA,
The theme was very nice. The flow was smooth. Well chosen words, colorful arrangement and wonderfully decorated thoughts.
I saw no SPAG and no typos. It was very clean.
I am looking forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Thanks Oatmeal, glad you liked my poem.
Love
Pupa
Comment from harleyangelbrat
This is a very well written poem. I like that you rhyme after each stanza. It has an unusual flow, which I also like. It is expressive which makes for a great read. I enjoyed reading this very much. Excellent read, God bless you!
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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This is a very well written poem. I like that you rhyme after each stanza. It has an unusual flow, which I also like. It is expressive which makes for a great read. I enjoyed reading this very much. Excellent read, God bless you!
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Thanks so much, harley, I am glad you liked my poem and appreciate your kind comments.
Love
Pupa
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You are very welcome. I hope you have a blessed day. Marilyn
Comment from mermaids
I like the creative rhyme scheme here. This poem ahs a certain beat to it and most of us can relate to feeling down and then working our way back up.
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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I like the creative rhyme scheme here. This poem ahs a certain beat to it and most of us can relate to feeling down and then working our way back up.
Comment Written 09-May-2010
reply by the author on 12-May-2010
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Thanks mermaid, I appreciate your positive and encouraging comments and am glad you liked my poem.
Love
Pupa