CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Little Arlana
For never writing anything before November you have mastered the trade quite beautifully. I think your poem you wrote here speaks for itself.
Your second stanza, second part reminded me of Maya Angelou's "Still I Rise" poem. It is perhaps one of my all time favorites, and your last 2 lines there said firmly and strongly that you will always rise, and you have your own battle cry. Well written.
Keep up the great work, and never stop learning!
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For never writing anything before November you have mastered the trade quite beautifully. I think your poem you wrote here speaks for itself.
Your second stanza, second part reminded me of Maya Angelou's "Still I Rise" poem. It is perhaps one of my all time favorites, and your last 2 lines there said firmly and strongly that you will always rise, and you have your own battle cry. Well written.
Keep up the great work, and never stop learning!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from Donovan
High morale carries many groups over the rough edges and brings along those that may find faltering. I think you have expressed it well in your poem.
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High morale carries many groups over the rough edges and brings along those that may find faltering. I think you have expressed it well in your poem.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from elainec4
Sixteezkid,
Inspiring message! My favorite lines are:
The dark may wax.
The light may wane.
I like the parallel structure, and I love the content. You waste no words in this well-written poem. elaine
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Sixteezkid,
Inspiring message! My favorite lines are:
The dark may wax.
The light may wane.
I like the parallel structure, and I love the content. You waste no words in this well-written poem. elaine
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from pixiemillie
What a lovely post- -we all that that one life and with it comes joys, sorrows, ups, downs, successes and failures, but as this write states- -"the dark may wax, the light may wane"- -having that will to stand up and take each day as it comes with renewed vigor. Your 'battlecry'! Rising and seizing the day no matter the outcome- -you gave it your all and that is what is important.
Love the artwork- -so like the power of the Phoenix- -that will, that strength, that "esprit de corps".
Thank you.
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What a lovely post- -we all that that one life and with it comes joys, sorrows, ups, downs, successes and failures, but as this write states- -"the dark may wax, the light may wane"- -having that will to stand up and take each day as it comes with renewed vigor. Your 'battlecry'! Rising and seizing the day no matter the outcome- -you gave it your all and that is what is important.
Love the artwork- -so like the power of the Phoenix- -that will, that strength, that "esprit de corps".
Thank you.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from Reborn01957
I thought this poem was easy to read, dispite no rhythm & rhyme.
You are good at forming images in the readers mind. This is a rare subject seldom seen.
I noticed you use a period at the end of this poem, but you do not have a period at the end of the word cry at each of your other two stanzas.
Please give this the once over and PM me so I can upgrade this rating, ok?
Godspeed: Rev. Karl.
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I thought this poem was easy to read, dispite no rhythm & rhyme.
You are good at forming images in the readers mind. This is a rare subject seldom seen.
I noticed you use a period at the end of this poem, but you do not have a period at the end of the word cry at each of your other two stanzas.
Please give this the once over and PM me so I can upgrade this rating, ok?
Godspeed: Rev. Karl.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from sibhus
what powerful lines. Agreat piece of writing, loved the images that you created with your words. Inspires in the reader a sense of possibilites and that anything is achievable. Great powerful work.
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what powerful lines. Agreat piece of writing, loved the images that you created with your words. Inspires in the reader a sense of possibilites and that anything is achievable. Great powerful work.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from adewpearl
Sue, it is so good to see a post from you!! I hope you are feeling well.
I love the spirit of determination you voice in this poem, and with such great flow and word choices - I especially like
the dark may wax, the light may wane..
Your poem is beautifully composed and filled with a spirit I've missed hearing from you. :-) Brooke
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Sue, it is so good to see a post from you!! I hope you are feeling well.
I love the spirit of determination you voice in this poem, and with such great flow and word choices - I especially like
the dark may wax, the light may wane..
Your poem is beautifully composed and filled with a spirit I've missed hearing from you. :-) Brooke
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from jmyron
This one would have been a good 4th of July post. Well written, with good imagery and a great story line. A winner in my book. Write on.
John
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This one would have been a good 4th of July post. Well written, with good imagery and a great story line. A winner in my book. Write on.
John
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from rmdelta
Sue,
an excellent piece of writing my dear friend. Terrific descriptives throughout the writing give it realism and personality. Great work, Sue.
Reggie
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Sue,
an excellent piece of writing my dear friend. Terrific descriptives throughout the writing give it realism and personality. Great work, Sue.
Reggie
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009
Comment from Marathonwriter
Hi Sixteezkid,
It's been a while since I've read one of your poems and I forgot how much I enjoy them. This really brought out a desire in me to do my best.
No cease in hope--no lying down
Abundance now...I'm here but once
(These are very strong lines that paint a vivid picture in the readers mind.)
I really wish I had a six left.
Love,
Chris
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Hi Sixteezkid,
It's been a while since I've read one of your poems and I forgot how much I enjoy them. This really brought out a desire in me to do my best.
No cease in hope--no lying down
Abundance now...I'm here but once
(These are very strong lines that paint a vivid picture in the readers mind.)
I really wish I had a six left.
Love,
Chris
Comment Written 08-Jul-2009