Sunday Love
Contest Prompt -- use these words free verse37 total reviews
Comment from words
Wonderful!!!!
Your description of the television is dead on:the golden-voices trying
to sell the wrong style
of life to the unwary.
Setting a trap to make
more things mean life
will be better than this...
better than a heart full
of family.
Very well done!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Wonderful!!!!
Your description of the television is dead on:the golden-voices trying
to sell the wrong style
of life to the unwary.
Setting a trap to make
more things mean life
will be better than this...
better than a heart full
of family.
Very well done!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.
Comment from sherrygreywolf
RERATED - change looks good, Skye. Meets the requirements now and I can give it the 5 it deserves!
good luck - sherry
Afternoon Skye - As usual, you've written a beautiful piece. Unfortunately, I was forced to give it four stars, rather than the five I feel it deserves. Though you used the word "songs", the contest requires the word "sing", and though you sing songs, they are not the same thing. Other than that, it was excellent.
If you figure out a way to rework it to include the required word or if I misunderstood the requirements, please let me know and I'll be sure and change the rating to a 5.
sorry - sherry
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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RERATED - change looks good, Skye. Meets the requirements now and I can give it the 5 it deserves!
good luck - sherry
Afternoon Skye - As usual, you've written a beautiful piece. Unfortunately, I was forced to give it four stars, rather than the five I feel it deserves. Though you used the word "songs", the contest requires the word "sing", and though you sing songs, they are not the same thing. Other than that, it was excellent.
If you figure out a way to rework it to include the required word or if I misunderstood the requirements, please let me know and I'll be sure and change the rating to a 5.
sorry - sherry
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Changed it. You might want to see if it is better... LOL
Thanks for the heads up and the kind words.
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Got ya covered, Skye. The change works well and the poem now meets the requirements. I've re-rated to the five it deserves.
have a great week - sherry
Comment from Carol D Parker
This is excellent. It's so heart-warming. The picture you paint is so vivid. It's a sad but true message you send. But it's good to know that you understand that a heart full of family is what life is all about and you're sharing that knowledgre with readers. Your words you picked skipped my attention, because the poem is so well written. Excellent work.
Delora
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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This is excellent. It's so heart-warming. The picture you paint is so vivid. It's a sad but true message you send. But it's good to know that you understand that a heart full of family is what life is all about and you're sharing that knowledgre with readers. Your words you picked skipped my attention, because the poem is so well written. Excellent work.
Delora
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.
Comment from SherryHo
I remember us doing this with our children. What I wouldn't give for the simpler times.
Lovely sentiments, well written in a smooth melodic pattern, and used all the words. Well done!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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I remember us doing this with our children. What I wouldn't give for the simpler times.
Lovely sentiments, well written in a smooth melodic pattern, and used all the words. Well done!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.
Comment from Pacinogal
Hi Skye,
Your post is a great contender for this contest.
It is love all over. I liked: "feelings of love mesh with
pattycake". Great job.
Kindly,
Kathy
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Hi Skye,
Your post is a great contender for this contest.
It is love all over. I liked: "feelings of love mesh with
pattycake". Great job.
Kindly,
Kathy
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.
You're very welcome Skye...it was well deserved.
Warmly,
Kathy
Comment from Judian James
charming and poignant at the same time. Oh, I remember the days so well when the children would wake us and climb into bed for a little bit of wrestling and tickling! I did trip over this little bit: "to make more things mean life" is there another way to convey this perhaps?
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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charming and poignant at the same time. Oh, I remember the days so well when the children would wake us and climb into bed for a little bit of wrestling and tickling! I did trip over this little bit: "to make more things mean life" is there another way to convey this perhaps?
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Changed it... maybe you could see if it is improved....
Thanks for the great review and kind comments.
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How about just "saying more things must be better than this" or something similar.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Not an easy task with the
given words - but you've done
well -- has a nice smooth
flow to the words -- a light-
hearted piece.
Good luck with the contest, Skye.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Not an easy task with the
given words - but you've done
well -- has a nice smooth
flow to the words -- a light-
hearted piece.
Good luck with the contest, Skye.
Margaret.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.
Comment from Virago
Fine solution to the challenge. A lovely homage to family love. I espially like the contrast to the life offered by the tv commercials.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Fine solution to the challenge. A lovely homage to family love. I espially like the contrast to the life offered by the tv commercials.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.
Comment from PUPA
Hi Skye,
This is very well written, natural, no word is forced and the meaning and message of this witty poem is loud and clear.
Good luck.
Love
Pupa
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Hi Skye,
This is very well written, natural, no word is forced and the meaning and message of this witty poem is loud and clear.
Good luck.
Love
Pupa
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.
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Congratulations skye, your cute meaningful poem deserved to win.Pupa
Comment from stormwolf2
A nicely written little poem that I can relate to. My Father always said that TV was the ruin of family traditions as we knew them. It was much better when a family sat down and interacted with each other.
Well written and was smooth to the tongue.
Well done!
Best wishes,
Malcolm
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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A nicely written little poem that I can relate to. My Father always said that TV was the ruin of family traditions as we knew them. It was much better when a family sat down and interacted with each other.
Well written and was smooth to the tongue.
Well done!
Best wishes,
Malcolm
Comment Written 26-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2009
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He was so right....
Thank you so much for this uplifting and very kind review.
I am very glad you liked it.