Comment from MJMuraco

Excellent

Sue, this is different! I have never read a poem like it. You are really sharp to be able to follow such a distinct pattern. Really awesome and I enjoyed reading it.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2009

Comment from joan marie

Excellent

It is like what I have heard and read called Skeltonic form. You read faster and faster until you finally kind of explode with the meaning of the work at the end. Good job. joan marie

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2009

Comment from jaeladarling

Excellent

Ouch, this thing made my eyes bleed! LOL Interesting form; I've never seen it before. You have written it well, that's for sure. Can't say it's my favorite form, though! Good job with this one. :)

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009

I keep on trying out these new types every chance I get. Only way to learn what you like or don't like. I can see your eyes bleeding now! Get the Visine out! HA!!! Thanks for your review. Sue :-))

Comment from Domino

Excellent

Hi, Sue, I only wrote one of these before, but as it was such fun I've also reserved a spot. Idea just allows one's brain to go off on a tangent (not that that's unusualf for me). 'Thrive with drive' Love it!
'Passion pursues purpose' - wow!
I reckon this is no ramble, but a vert skilful and well thought out write. Top rate and gotta do well.
Love, Ray xx

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2009

Comment from Jazh

Excellent

Wow...this is a new one for me. I keep learning about different forms of poetry here, when I used to think there were only two: rhyming and non-rhyming! This is a very interesting poem, with a great feeling of movement. Your images are good - the only one I had trouble with was "Righteous Lebanon cedar". But that's probably just me. Good luck with the contest. :)

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2009

Re: Lebanon cedar - Psalms 92:12 - don't ask me why I thought of it! I don't know Psalms that much....just something that came from the brain from 40 years ago maybe. HA! Went on a whirl writing this...was great fun. Tweaked it only a bit. That's what I really enjoyed about writing it. Thanks much for your review! Sue

Comment from prodigal

Excellent

I have done this before, not knowing it was a blitz poem. I enjoyed this. Did you write them in rapid succession or did you think them out? This was very creative. Great job- Sam

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2009

Comment from jdrhye

Excellent

Thank you for the explanation of style, you have done a good job of articulating the rapidity of the flow and the word phrases. Not my cup of tea, but no point deducting for individual choice. As far as the style and the rhythm I think you hit the target. Best regards.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2009

Comment from jeslaf

Excellent

LOVED this, Sue. Really did. So much to mine in those short spurts you spit out there...so many stories behind BIG truths. Wow. :)

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2009

Comment from NightWriter

Excellent

Yikes! "Time Runs" is fast and riveting. A true blitz. Very creative and challenging, and put together well. Fast flow, breathtaking and done well. Good job!

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2009

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

(Catching my breath)...LOL

Loved this;

Future soon yesterday
Future malleable

and the entire last section stands out for me;

Tears are sacred
Tears relinquish pain
Pain for gain
Pain threshold
Threshold beginnings
Threshold of intensity
Intensity battles apathy
Intensity frees passion
Passion desires sustenance
Passion pursues purpose
Purpose of life untold
Purpose ignites flame
Flame white hot
Flame runs
Runs unquenched
Runs deep
Deep
Unquenched


Fabulous blitz work and great artwork choice to enhance the presentation. Color choice too.

No spags.

Bravo for trying something new. I have yet to try one of these and do not feel brave enough yet~

:)

Love, rd

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2009