CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Betrayal"A collection of poetry
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Comment from NightWriter
"Betrayal" is indeed the ultimate pain. Wonderfully written, creative and perfect as a Pleiades poem goes. Smooth rhythm throughout. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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"Betrayal" is indeed the ultimate pain. Wonderfully written, creative and perfect as a Pleiades poem goes. Smooth rhythm throughout. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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NightWriter, really glad you liked this one. First time I tried this format. Thanks much for your very generous review. Sue :-))
Comment from MaureenC
Betrayal stings as it
Brings hurt to no measure;
These words brings to life the hurt of betrayal. This a very well constructed piece following the requirements of the contest.
Well done
Mauseyc
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Betrayal stings as it
Brings hurt to no measure;
These words brings to life the hurt of betrayal. This a very well constructed piece following the requirements of the contest.
Well done
Mauseyc
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Mauseyc, your compliments are very much appreciated. Thank you for your generous review! Sue :-))
Comment from Joan E.
I think this is the first Pleiades I've encountered--intriguing particularly since I enjoy alliteration so much. Your poem certainly captures the sense and pain of betrayal. Once again the picture you chose represents your theme quite well.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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I think this is the first Pleiades I've encountered--intriguing particularly since I enjoy alliteration so much. Your poem certainly captures the sense and pain of betrayal. Once again the picture you chose represents your theme quite well.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Hi Joan...it's my first, also. You know me...always trying out a new form in the contests. Was a fun challenge. Thanks for your comments and great review! Sue :-))
Comment from Hitcher
Hey! I'm in this contest, you weren't in it when I signed up, what's going on???? Ha ha, sorry just messing with ya mate.Excllent offering Sue, have you done a Pleiades before? You are brilliant at these structured poems and again you prove it with relative ease friend, definitely a contender, which makes me nervous, ha ha...NOT! I'll bring a bit of heat to combat bitter cold wind of betrayal and see how we go! Very nice my friend, gives me something to aim for, a couple of tweaks and I'll be ready!
GOOD LUCK!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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Hey! I'm in this contest, you weren't in it when I signed up, what's going on???? Ha ha, sorry just messing with ya mate.Excllent offering Sue, have you done a Pleiades before? You are brilliant at these structured poems and again you prove it with relative ease friend, definitely a contender, which makes me nervous, ha ha...NOT! I'll bring a bit of heat to combat bitter cold wind of betrayal and see how we go! Very nice my friend, gives me something to aim for, a couple of tweaks and I'll be ready!
GOOD LUCK!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009
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I'm off to go read yours now. I'm sure it
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I'm off to go read yours now. I'm sure it's about some hot seductress! Ha! A much more interesting subject than betrayal!! See ya in the race! HA! Thanks for your great review, friend. Suc
Comment from jack silver
this here was a really goodly written poem. I enjoyed reading through it and look forward to reading the next thing you send in. Oh, and I didn't see anything you needed to work on either.
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this here was a really goodly written poem. I enjoyed reading through it and look forward to reading the next thing you send in. Oh, and I didn't see anything you needed to work on either.
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Jack
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from dportwood
You have here a good contest entry which follows the requirements and characteristics of the pleiades style. Good job and good luck.
Duane
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You have here a good contest entry which follows the requirements and characteristics of the pleiades style. Good job and good luck.
Duane
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from amada
You use haunting words, and I can feel them because I have been there. You express it all so well, "Brings hurt to no measure," oh what a grandiose phrase.
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You use haunting words, and I can feel them because I have been there. You express it all so well, "Brings hurt to no measure," oh what a grandiose phrase.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from c_lucas
A very well written poem. I like the fact that every line starts with the same letter. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
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A very well written poem. I like the fact that every line starts with the same letter. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
Comment from Judian James
Oh, a hard one to read but really good. "Beyond words--it crosses Borders of ill intent, Burdens meant for the core"
Great word choices to make your point. excellent
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Oh, a hard one to read but really good. "Beyond words--it crosses Borders of ill intent, Burdens meant for the core"
Great word choices to make your point. excellent
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009
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Jude, I'd never seen this form before. Thought I'd give it a try. So glad you liked it and thanks for your compliments! Sue :-)
Comment from joan marie
This sounds like a fun contest. So many letters to chose from. The B in this case worked out wonderfully and the artwork compliments your words. Good Luck, joan marie
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This sounds like a fun contest. So many letters to chose from. The B in this case worked out wonderfully and the artwork compliments your words. Good Luck, joan marie
Comment Written 26-Mar-2009