Comment from NightWriter

Excellent

"Betrayal" is indeed the ultimate pain. Wonderfully written, creative and perfect as a Pleiades poem goes. Smooth rhythm throughout. Well done.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009

NightWriter, really glad you liked this one. First time I tried this format. Thanks much for your very generous review. Sue :-))

Comment from MaureenC

Excellent

Betrayal stings as it
Brings hurt to no measure;
These words brings to life the hurt of betrayal. This a very well constructed piece following the requirements of the contest.

Well done
Mauseyc

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009

Mauseyc, your compliments are very much appreciated. Thank you for your generous review! Sue :-))

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I think this is the first Pleiades I've encountered--intriguing particularly since I enjoy alliteration so much. Your poem certainly captures the sense and pain of betrayal. Once again the picture you chose represents your theme quite well.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009

Hi Joan...it's my first, also. You know me...always trying out a new form in the contests. Was a fun challenge. Thanks for your comments and great review! Sue :-))

Comment from Hitcher

Excellent

Hey! I'm in this contest, you weren't in it when I signed up, what's going on???? Ha ha, sorry just messing with ya mate.Excllent offering Sue, have you done a Pleiades before? You are brilliant at these structured poems and again you prove it with relative ease friend, definitely a contender, which makes me nervous, ha ha...NOT! I'll bring a bit of heat to combat bitter cold wind of betrayal and see how we go! Very nice my friend, gives me something to aim for, a couple of tweaks and I'll be ready!
GOOD LUCK!

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009

I'm off to go read yours now. I'm sure it

reply by the author on 27-Mar-2009

I'm off to go read yours now. I'm sure it's about some hot seductress! Ha! A much more interesting subject than betrayal!! See ya in the race! HA! Thanks for your great review, friend. Suc

Comment from jack silver

Excellent

this here was a really goodly written poem. I enjoyed reading through it and look forward to reading the next thing you send in. Oh, and I didn't see anything you needed to work on either.

From
Jack

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2009

Comment from dportwood

Excellent

You have here a good contest entry which follows the requirements and characteristics of the pleiades style. Good job and good luck.

Duane

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2009

Comment from amada

Excellent

You use haunting words, and I can feel them because I have been there. You express it all so well, "Brings hurt to no measure," oh what a grandiose phrase.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2009

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

A very well written poem. I like the fact that every line starts with the same letter. Very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2009

Comment from Judian James

Excellent

Oh, a hard one to read but really good. "Beyond words--it crosses Borders of ill intent, Burdens meant for the core"
Great word choices to make your point. excellent

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2009

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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2009

Jude, I'd never seen this form before. Thought I'd give it a try. So glad you liked it and thanks for your compliments! Sue :-)

Comment from joan marie

Excellent

This sounds like a fun contest. So many letters to chose from. The B in this case worked out wonderfully and the artwork compliments your words. Good Luck, joan marie

 Comment Written 26-Mar-2009