CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Bearing Witness"A collection of poetry
38 total reviews
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sue....this is both profound and thought provoking. It seems to come from an emotional place for you. It is well written and evocative....well done....blessings....chey
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Hi Sue....this is both profound and thought provoking. It seems to come from an emotional place for you. It is well written and evocative....well done....blessings....chey
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
Comment from fastdigits
A great selection of art work
to set the mode of your very
fine writing, tinged with sadness
and the need for reassurance that
there is indeed an outside world
and you don't have to be a prisoner
forever in your closed little world.
Well don
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A great selection of art work
to set the mode of your very
fine writing, tinged with sadness
and the need for reassurance that
there is indeed an outside world
and you don't have to be a prisoner
forever in your closed little world.
Well don
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
Comment from Carol D Parker
This could be anyone. It's universal. But you nailed it with just the right words. It was like a peek in the mirror. How did you know me? I think it's terrific.
Delora
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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This could be anyone. It's universal. But you nailed it with just the right words. It was like a peek in the mirror. How did you know me? I think it's terrific.
Delora
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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Yes, we all have that all-important denial mechanism which is so necessary. It's why I put the tag line as "on emotional maintenance". So glad you liked it! Thanks for your very kind review. Sue :-))
Comment from jeslaf
Love the metaphor of the drapes--like how you closed 'em up again at the end. It's generally that way with denial. The artwork, as always, complements the piece. Where did you find it? It's good. :)
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Love the metaphor of the drapes--like how you closed 'em up again at the end. It's generally that way with denial. The artwork, as always, complements the piece. Where did you find it? It's good. :)
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
Comment from Roisin
Wow! How do you come up with these wonderful words of wisdom. What a wonderful metaphor you've penned here. I love the comparison to opening drapes. It's powerful and well structured. YOu say a lot in your few words. Good job.
Hugs
Roisin
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Wow! How do you come up with these wonderful words of wisdom. What a wonderful metaphor you've penned here. I love the comparison to opening drapes. It's powerful and well structured. YOu say a lot in your few words. Good job.
Hugs
Roisin
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
Comment from Joan E.
Once again your title and picture drew me into your poem and your words held me there. Your poem perfectly describes dealing with emotions. Your use of alliteration of "d's," "p's" and "g's" was a delightful bonus.
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Once again your title and picture drew me into your poem and your words held me there. Your poem perfectly describes dealing with emotions. Your use of alliteration of "d's," "p's" and "g's" was a delightful bonus.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
Comment from prodigal
This is an interesting poem. I have revisited old feelings in the past, got a taste of what it was and then buried the feelings again. That is how I took this poem. Well done- Sam
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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This is an interesting poem. I have revisited old feelings in the past, got a taste of what it was and then buried the feelings again. That is how I took this poem. Well done- Sam
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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Denial is a great mechanism in our brain that allows us to tuck things away so we don't have them at the forefront of our minds all the time. We'd go nuts!! Open up the drapes, feel it, then close again. Glad you liked it, Sam - and thanks for your great review. Sue
Comment from Judian James
Not one of my favorites Sue, only because the last line says you're going back into denial. Not the greatest message somehow. Also, you "prove your existence" by a peek out at your pain before going back into denial. I don't see this as you and it isn't particularly good for anyone else either. Sorry. Maybe, I'm off base and didn't interpret it properly, it just seems so weak to me somehow Remember, this is only my impression. It's well written
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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Not one of my favorites Sue, only because the last line says you're going back into denial. Not the greatest message somehow. Also, you "prove your existence" by a peek out at your pain before going back into denial. I don't see this as you and it isn't particularly good for anyone else either. Sorry. Maybe, I'm off base and didn't interpret it properly, it just seems so weak to me somehow Remember, this is only my impression. It's well written
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2009
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Hi Jude, we're all born with the "denial" mechanism or we wouldn't emotionally survive. We tuck things away. And sometimes, a thought can hit us stone-cold and we get a sense of the possible reality of it. Then tuck it away again. It's human. Some people live in such denial as they're not really "in touch" at all. So, "proving existence" is very metaphorical for me knowing that I'm "in touch", haven't lost it, and aware of my denials, as I ponder that reality for a short time, allow myself to feel that pain and shove it back again; a normal human behavior. I'm not sure what you mean by saying it isn't good for anyone else. Hoping it doesn't mean that because this isn't about spring and daffodils, that it shouldn't be written. Say it ain't so! ...Sue
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Never would I think or ever imply that. Surely you know me better than that. I just felt it was so "behind the curtain" that it didn't send a great message for anyone trying to face whatever challenges or heartaches they may be in denial about. Hey, everything we write can't be loved by everybody all the time. I was just being honest. It certainly had nothing to do with how it was written or presented so needless to say, 5 stars and someone gave you an exceptional, so it's all good. I personally, found it lacking. sorry
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is a clever use of
words presented as free verse,
that speak of your emotions
Thank you for sharing.
Margaret.
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This is a clever use of
words presented as free verse,
that speak of your emotions
Thank you for sharing.
Margaret.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
Comment from fictionwriter
What an interesting poem. I read it several time, but I'm not sure what it means. I'll have to ponder it more. It is nice to have to think sometimes. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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What an interesting poem. I read it several time, but I'm not sure what it means. I'll have to ponder it more. It is nice to have to think sometimes. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2009
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enial is a great mechanism in our brain that allows us to tuck things away so we don't have them at the forefront of our minds all the time. We'd go nuts!! Open up the drapes, feel it, then close again. Our natural human ability to cope. Thanks much for your great review. Sue :-)