CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from fictionwriter
This sounds like living with someone who is bipolar. It is really hard to live with the hots and colds like that. This poem describes that very well. Great job.
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This sounds like living with someone who is bipolar. It is really hard to live with the hots and colds like that. This poem describes that very well. Great job.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from jeslaf
What makes this good is that I didn't realize it was officially a 'personification of Winter' piece until the author notes...it reads both literally and metaphorically, an achievement. :)
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What makes this good is that I didn't realize it was officially a 'personification of Winter' piece until the author notes...it reads both literally and metaphorically, an achievement. :)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from Alexander E Poet
Excellent This a wonderful poem and beautifully worded, i like how it flow a good job and a remarkable piece of work.great talent. There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one
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Excellent This a wonderful poem and beautifully worded, i like how it flow a good job and a remarkable piece of work.great talent. There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue, and great to see you posting regularly again. I missed your wonderful talent.
Maybe edit 'are' out in 2nd line for better flow?
'Your FRONTS of lows and highs' Brilliand ambiguity in 'weather speak'.
Maybe last line; 'So now I take my flight'
Wonderful personification - you've great talent!
Love, Ray xx
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Hi, Sue, and great to see you posting regularly again. I missed your wonderful talent.
Maybe edit 'are' out in 2nd line for better flow?
'Your FRONTS of lows and highs' Brilliand ambiguity in 'weather speak'.
Maybe last line; 'So now I take my flight'
Wonderful personification - you've great talent!
Love, Ray xx
Comment Written 06-Mar-2009
Comment from glacierbabe
This is great. I am sure it would have been a contender in the contest. It is beautifully written, the rhyme is excellent. The rythm is great. I found the cadence right off and it was a wonderful read. Very well done! :)
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This is great. I am sure it would have been a contender in the contest. It is beautifully written, the rhyme is excellent. The rythm is great. I found the cadence right off and it was a wonderful read. Very well done! :)
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from MJMuraco
Hey, I hate winter too. Your poem is written very well and I could feel the chill as I looked at the photo. Hopefully, soon we will not be dealing with the cold and ice.
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Hey, I hate winter too. Your poem is written very well and I could feel the chill as I looked at the photo. Hopefully, soon we will not be dealing with the cold and ice.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from findingmyroom
Flight from winter is a well-established notion...just ask any snowbird! Beautiful piece, short and adhering to the theme. I'm glad you posted your piece.
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Flight from winter is a well-established notion...just ask any snowbird! Beautiful piece, short and adhering to the theme. I'm glad you posted your piece.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from amada
Oh that cold and heartless Winter. I like your personification, it's great. It made me feel cold. That's very effective writing, my dear.
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Oh that cold and heartless Winter. I like your personification, it's great. It made me feel cold. That's very effective writing, my dear.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from BethShelby
I like this poem a lot. The rhyme flows smoothly moving the poem along. I like the rhythm you have going here and I don't have to read it over and over to get your messages. Perfect picture to display it. Good job.
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I like this poem a lot. The rhyme flows smoothly moving the poem along. I like the rhythm you have going here and I don't have to read it over and over to get your messages. Perfect picture to display it. Good job.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009
Comment from Minglement
This would have been such an excellent entry for the personification of winter contest! Love your fresh use of phraseology. Great job. Thanks for a fun read.
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This would have been such an excellent entry for the personification of winter contest! Love your fresh use of phraseology. Great job. Thanks for a fun read.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2009