CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Break This Heart"A collection of poetry
85 total reviews
Comment from skye
You have captured the emptiness that we often feel, when there is nothing inside.
Break into my feelings.... let me experience something.
Strong poem with good rhymes and meter.
Very well done, with interesting and unique artwork.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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You have captured the emptiness that we often feel, when there is nothing inside.
Break into my feelings.... let me experience something.
Strong poem with good rhymes and meter.
Very well done, with interesting and unique artwork.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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Skye, yes...you put it very well - "let me experience something". A numb place is not where we want to be. Thanks so much for your great review. With regards, Sue
Comment from ulster3
Hi Sixteez.
I'm so glad to be well again and reading this great stuff on line. This is an exceptional work where the speaker, who claims little or no emotion, evokes high emotion in the reader. A very insightful work.
Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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Hi Sixteez.
I'm so glad to be well again and reading this great stuff on line. This is an exceptional work where the speaker, who claims little or no emotion, evokes high emotion in the reader. A very insightful work.
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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Rebecca, wow, I never thought of it like that - in those terms. A numb writer evoking emotion in the reader.... Thank you so very much for your close read and great review. With warmest regards, Sue
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Hi Sue.
It would not be the first time a poet created another layer to the work in an unconscious way. It had to be there in your head somewhere ... just not a formulated thought. That's why one great poet (forget which one) said "the poet is entitled to whatever the reader finds in his work".
Hugs. :)
Comment from chaswriter
Sue - It is a sad, difficult time when love burns out and cold ashes just lay there. Love the rhymes and the fluidity of the read. Nicely done. Charlie
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Sue - It is a sad, difficult time when love burns out and cold ashes just lay there. Love the rhymes and the fluidity of the read. Nicely done. Charlie
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
Comment from Arkine
Wow, I'm not exactly sure how to take this poem. A love growing cold perhaps? The speaker wants to hurt to know that they still care? That's a terrible point to be at, I've been there, once. I hope to never be there again. Great job on this!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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Wow, I'm not exactly sure how to take this poem. A love growing cold perhaps? The speaker wants to hurt to know that they still care? That's a terrible point to be at, I've been there, once. I hope to never be there again. Great job on this!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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More like the stresses of life which can be overwhelming at times and can rob us of passion (of any sort). Can put one in limbo or a feeling of numbness. Most definitely not a pleasant place to be. Thanks so much for your very kind review. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
interesting and fitting artwork makes this a good presentation; astute capture of the pain all of us experience at least once in a lifetime; well written; not a thing to correct!
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interesting and fitting artwork makes this a good presentation; astute capture of the pain all of us experience at least once in a lifetime; well written; not a thing to correct!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
Comment from mark tree
Sixteezkid, nicely written post. I think I understand what you're saying, about wanting to feel misery to know you're alive, yet to me that's a strange desire. I've been down bit never that far down. But somethings to think about.
marcus....
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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Sixteezkid, nicely written post. I think I understand what you're saying, about wanting to feel misery to know you're alive, yet to me that's a strange desire. I've been down bit never that far down. But somethings to think about.
marcus....
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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More like being in limbo. Loss of passion for a lot of things can occur with the stresses of life. Not a very pleasant place to be. Thanks so much for your very kind review. Sue
Comment from JoAnna Lee
Nicely done, Sue. I think sometimes we are frightened of loving or caring again... afraid of being hurt, but this too is so real; wanting that pain to knoe one is stil capable of feeling. Good job!
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
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Nicely done, Sue. I think sometimes we are frightened of loving or caring again... afraid of being hurt, but this too is so real; wanting that pain to knoe one is stil capable of feeling. Good job!
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
Comment from malachi1206
nice classical write loved the rhyme scheme I keep studying and someday I'll achieve your level in this :) an excellent write with universal appeal malachi1206
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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nice classical write loved the rhyme scheme I keep studying and someday I'll achieve your level in this :) an excellent write with universal appeal malachi1206
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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malachi, what an awesome review! It's like a 10-star rating! Thanks so much for your great comments and compliments. Means everything. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from fictionwriter
How very sad. I would rather feel the love and let it stay. What a sad state of affairs wishing for someone to break your heart. Great job.
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How very sad. I would rather feel the love and let it stay. What a sad state of affairs wishing for someone to break your heart. Great job.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
Comment from phild
"Aching for love's misery", wow, what a great start! This gave me the feeling of being on an emotional lover's rollercoaster. Excellent job of writing.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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"Aching for love's misery", wow, what a great start! This gave me the feeling of being on an emotional lover's rollercoaster. Excellent job of writing.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2009
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Yeah, what a rollercoaster, indeed! Thanks for saying how much you liked the opening line. And for your great review. With warmest regards, Sue