CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 68 "High and Mighty"A collection of poetry
33 total reviews
Comment from Winslow
Dear Kid,
Haughty is as haughty does and you express it very well here. A structured poem that you write quite well, ending with the theme you set.
Warm regards,
Winslow
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Dear Kid,
Haughty is as haughty does and you express it very well here. A structured poem that you write quite well, ending with the theme you set.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
Comment from Roisin
Great rictameter, Sue. Great subject and message. I love how you've constructed the words and it flows very well.
Warm regards.
Roisin
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Great rictameter, Sue. Great subject and message. I love how you've constructed the words and it flows very well.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
Comment from Hitcher
I try to avoid such anomalies because we just do not seem to be able to inhabit the same space and it doesn't take long for the atmosphere to chill and people become uncomfortable, I'm normally not one of the uncomfortable ones may I add. Excellent word choices to describe the annoying traits of these individuals. They probably find me just as annoying in there minds though!
Your becoming obsessed with these rictameters, you are!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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I try to avoid such anomalies because we just do not seem to be able to inhabit the same space and it doesn't take long for the atmosphere to chill and people become uncomfortable, I'm normally not one of the uncomfortable ones may I add. Excellent word choices to describe the annoying traits of these individuals. They probably find me just as annoying in there minds though!
Your becoming obsessed with these rictameters, you are!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2009
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Pains in the ass, they are. Annoying more than anything. Although, some (especially the youth) can be made to feel very bad. Me? Obsessed? Okay...I give. I will be writing a few more and going to make it a them on human virtues and attributes (the positive side). Thanks for your review, Hitch.... :-) Sue
Comment from NightWriter
"High and Mighty" is a well assembled poem perfectly written. Although the poem looks like a challenge, you make it look easy. Well done!
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"High and Mighty" is a well assembled poem perfectly written. Although the poem looks like a challenge, you make it look easy. Well done!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
Comment from Dreamdancer
Hello my friend,
You really are getting better and better at this form. I thought it would be easy until I tried.... Or I should say when you challenged me... Awesome write my friend and thank you for sharing... Dreamdancer
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Hello my friend,
You really are getting better and better at this form. I thought it would be easy until I tried.... Or I should say when you challenged me... Awesome write my friend and thank you for sharing... Dreamdancer
Comment Written 02-Feb-2009
Comment from VICTIMEYES
very nice idea in your poem of "haughty" once again your defining words do the job well, capturing "High and Mighty" very nicely done.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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very nice idea in your poem of "haughty" once again your defining words do the job well, capturing "High and Mighty" very nicely done.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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Emotional Soldier, thank you very much for your very kind review and compliments. With regards, Sue :-))
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good one, but you used the same word twice, ... that's a no -no :-)
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Definitely a "no-no" except for this rictameter form where it's required. But, thanks for the little reminder just in case I did screw up! Thanks :-))
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not the word haughty ...
"security"
that is a no-no :-)
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not the word haughty ...
i mean "superior"
that is a no-no :-)
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OMG! I DID screw up! Thank you SO much. How can I have such a small poem and not see it? I really appreciate your highlighting that. Consider it gone! Now, the trick is to find the right word. Again...thanks!
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Replaced it with "elevated" - You saved my poem!
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you should also switch elevated with superior
at least i think it's more powerful that way, but who knows, i don't wanna be haughty in my examination :-)
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Ha! I was debating the same thing. Will consider it from your point that it may make it more powerful..... ("geez, how haughty is that guy...the nerve")
Comment from adewpearl
you've certainly nailed that unfortunate character trait - some great word choices condescending rude disdainful - and in fine rictameter form complete with insightful reasons for the behavior!
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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you've certainly nailed that unfortunate character trait - some great word choices condescending rude disdainful - and in fine rictameter form complete with insightful reasons for the behavior!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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I was considering writing a few of these rics on virtues, attributes and even the negatives. Ran into someone like this recently. Could not believe the "haughtiness"...was nauseating. LOL!! Thanks for your review, Brooke. Now...have you thought about your homework assigment? HA! Sue
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yeah, I thought about it and nearly lost my dinner - those things make me nervous - all the rules!!! don't you post it and wait to find out which of the 458 rules someone noticed you broke??? LOL
Comment from Jazh
Wow...do you know some nice people like this? :) It's a great poem - I'm getting used to the Rictameter rhythm. And you've found some very evocative words: 'haughty' disdainful. Good one. :)
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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Wow...do you know some nice people like this? :) It's a great poem - I'm getting used to the Rictameter rhythm. And you've found some very evocative words: 'haughty' disdainful. Good one. :)
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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After 53 years of living, you can bet I've run into them. Would not keep their company for very long, though! LOL!! Thinking of writing several rics on human attributes, values, even the negatives. Not preaching morals, but creates thought on fundamentals of character. Thanks for review. Hey, you weren't the first one this time. What happened?? HA!!! Sue
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Bit of domestic drama here today....somewhat distracted. :)
Comment from The Rivaling Mimic
Great piece. I especially found the finality of it rather appealing. The theme is one that definitely maintains the reader's interest and I have noticed no reason to deduct.
The Rivaling Mimic
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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Great piece. I especially found the finality of it rather appealing. The theme is one that definitely maintains the reader's interest and I have noticed no reason to deduct.
The Rivaling Mimic
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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Rivaling Mimic, thank you very much for your very kind review. With regards, Sue
Comment from EdwardVal
I very well written piece and sadly true. You seemed to have followed the rules well and I found no errors within your piece. I hope to read more of your work soon. Take Care
E'Val
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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I very well written piece and sadly true. You seemed to have followed the rules well and I found no errors within your piece. I hope to read more of your work soon. Take Care
E'Val
Comment Written 01-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2009
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E'Val, always enjoy your reviews. Thank you very much for our generous review and comments. With regards, Sue