CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue.
Though I hate these things, yours is well worth the read. Describes an uncomfortable condition in poetry and detail extremely well. Ta stop the 'grindin' I leave mine in a jar. Do ya mean 'Mixed sweet dreaming'? Maybe 'nixed' is an unfamiliar word ta this numb-skull.
Good luck an best wishes.
ps try a few large whiskies. Doctor Ray ;-) xx
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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Hi, Sue.
Though I hate these things, yours is well worth the read. Describes an uncomfortable condition in poetry and detail extremely well. Ta stop the 'grindin' I leave mine in a jar. Do ya mean 'Mixed sweet dreaming'? Maybe 'nixed' is an unfamiliar word ta this numb-skull.
Good luck an best wishes.
ps try a few large whiskies. Doctor Ray ;-) xx
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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Okay, here goes. I didn't have plans to enter the contest. Not that I don't like acrostics (such as yourself - ha!), but was up at 2:00 this morning and thought, hell with it, I'll write. HA!! That's where it came from. Of course, I'm up late every night, but I've been having insomnia for the past week. Whiskey??? Hangovers are not for me! LOL!! Nixed is like "erased" or "ousted". Glad you liked this even though it's an acrostic! :-)) Sue
Comment from ~Dovey
You have good flow and rhyme scheme throughout this piece. All the technical aspects of an acrostic have been met. Your word choices were good and the picture is a nice compliment to this piece. Good luck in the contest.
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You have good flow and rhyme scheme throughout this piece. All the technical aspects of an acrostic have been met. Your word choices were good and the picture is a nice compliment to this piece. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
Comment from amada
I like your whimsical last phrase, " A yawn appears-just a guise." Ha, ha. very clever indeed. The art work is very appropriate to the theme.
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I like your whimsical last phrase, " A yawn appears-just a guise." Ha, ha. very clever indeed. The art work is very appropriate to the theme.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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amada, thanks for saying which line you liked! And for your great review and compliments. Best to you, Sue
Comment from Minglement
What a great entry for the acrostic contest. You did a good job starting each line with the desired letter without it feelinging contrived. I know because I missed altogether that it was an acrostic til after I read it! Good luck.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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What a great entry for the acrostic contest. You did a good job starting each line with the desired letter without it feelinging contrived. I know because I missed altogether that it was an acrostic til after I read it! Good luck.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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Now, THAT's a compliment and a half! Thanks Marcia! Whipped it up here because it's 2:00 a.m. and I'm an insomniac this week! HA! Thanks for the great review. Always, Sue
Comment from Koba
Well done! A very well constructed acrostic poem. Good rhymes! I occasionally have fitful nights of little sleep. No fun at all! Your words bring out the frustrating feelings very well. Good job!
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Well done! A very well constructed acrostic poem. Good rhymes! I occasionally have fitful nights of little sleep. No fun at all! Your words bring out the frustrating feelings very well. Good job!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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Koba, thanks so much for your great review. And your compliments. Best to you, Sue
Comment from Vladilynn
What that stacker visit you too!!!!!???
You've described him/her well!!!!
Mine never leave me at all...it becoming my shadow lately!! aaahhhh..even before!!!
Thank you for sharing a well written poem!!
love much
Lynn ( ^ _________ ^ )
good luck!!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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What that stacker visit you too!!!!!???
You've described him/her well!!!!
Mine never leave me at all...it becoming my shadow lately!! aaahhhh..even before!!!
Thank you for sharing a well written poem!!
love much
Lynn ( ^ _________ ^ )
good luck!!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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The demon he is!!! Ha! It's now 1:30 a.m. and I'm wide awake. And people ask how I keep writing so much. Well, I am awake all the time! LOL!! Thank God for writing!! Sorry the demon also follow you around. Thanks for your fun and excellent review for this work. :-)) Sue
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Tell me!! me too!!!!!! but by now it's already 1532 in Japan!!! so....mmmmm..I'm sleepy!! I sleep 0445am this morning and woke up 0820!! geeeeesssshh!! my life turning upside down!! will see you later!!
hihaaaaaa!! vampires are all out!!!!
( ^ ____________ < )
Comment from NightWriter
"Insomnia" is a very well written poem. Beautifully written with words that capture the imagination. Who hasn't experienced insomnia. And the harder you try to go to sleep, the harder it gets. Perfect rhythm and rhyming throughout. Bravo!
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"Insomnia" is a very well written poem. Beautifully written with words that capture the imagination. Who hasn't experienced insomnia. And the harder you try to go to sleep, the harder it gets. Perfect rhythm and rhyming throughout. Bravo!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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NightWriter, yes! The harder you try, it becomes much tougher. What's THAT all about?! Ha! Oh, well. It's now 1:45 a.m. and I'm awake. Get terrified of going to bed if I'm not sleepy yet. Maybe next week it'll be gone. Thanks so much for your awesome review! :-)) Sue
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When it happens, I try (key word here, try) to think of anything to take my mind off it, and maybe 10% of the time I succeed, LOL. :)
Comment from jaeladarling
Ugh, I HATE insomnia! Had a bad case of it last week. I stayed up all night, though I tried several times to get to sleep. I ended up staying up all day the next day, though I wasn't tired at all until bedtime.
Anyway, great poem, as usual. :) Cheers!
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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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Ugh, I HATE insomnia! Had a bad case of it last week. I stayed up all night, though I tried several times to get to sleep. I ended up staying up all day the next day, though I wasn't tired at all until bedtime.
Anyway, great poem, as usual. :) Cheers!
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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A wee bit of mania strikes! You must have had a lot on your plate and your mind last week. Glad it's over for you. Last night, I had a fitful sleep, but one thing happened that I always look forward to and that is I dreamed in color. So vivid! Was magnificent. The bluest, bluest sky color that could not be described. Any many other colors. I just love that! Ha! Thanks for your great review. Yours, Sue
Comment from janiesgotagun
Very effective in driving home the suffering caused by insomnia. I suffer from it my self and feel your pain. Your poem had a very clear feeling in such brief description.
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Very effective in driving home the suffering caused by insomnia. I suffer from it my self and feel your pain. Your poem had a very clear feeling in such brief description.
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2009
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I love your name! Sue'sgottagunalso! HA! Thanks so much for this great review. Sorry you suffer from this. It comes and stays awhile with me and then I get a reprieve. Not in a reprieve right now, though. Thanks for sharing your own story. With regards, Sue