CSP: A Collection of Poems
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37 total reviews
Comment from jshep
That rare gem of peace and silence are hard to find in those years of kids running around. I do remember. Your time will come, and then it will be the empty nest syndrome. The quiest driving you crazy. Great presentation and flow and rhyme. Love the structure you used with this poem. No nits, just a pleasure to read and brought a smile as mothers can relate to this gem. Joyce
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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That rare gem of peace and silence are hard to find in those years of kids running around. I do remember. Your time will come, and then it will be the empty nest syndrome. The quiest driving you crazy. Great presentation and flow and rhyme. Love the structure you used with this poem. No nits, just a pleasure to read and brought a smile as mothers can relate to this gem. Joyce
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Joyce, bringing a smile is the best compliment of all! So glad you enjoyed this piece. I still have a daughter at home, and do miss all the ruckus from the others. Thank you for your very kind review. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from PUPA
What a well written poem with a soft tone and the longing for those moments of peace one needs every now and then.
Egypt? You are always welcome my friend! The vast desert does give total silence and peace.
Perfect rhyme and rhythm througout.
A very smooth and most injoyable read. Thank you.
Love
Pupa
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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What a well written poem with a soft tone and the longing for those moments of peace one needs every now and then.
Egypt? You are always welcome my friend! The vast desert does give total silence and peace.
Perfect rhyme and rhythm througout.
A very smooth and most injoyable read. Thank you.
Love
Pupa
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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AH, Pupa....yes, the desert. I still have my trip to Egypt on my mind. Will always be with me. Thank you for your most lovely review and compliments. With warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Alexander E Poet
Wonderful poem very well done ,a powerful voice in this piece of poetry, lovely expression, the flow works together with the words well. There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Wonderful poem very well done ,a powerful voice in this piece of poetry, lovely expression, the flow works together with the words well. There were no errors. No typo's and nothing to change as far as i can see. I look forward to your next one.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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BRQQLYN, thank you so much for your very kind compliments on this work. So glad you enjoyed it. And for your great review. Always appreciated, Sue :-))
Comment from Judian James
Very nice Sue. I use this rhyme scheme when I write my various songs. I love it. You delivered an excellent message in a lovely, lilting piece. The ending verse is really good.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Very nice Sue. I use this rhyme scheme when I write my various songs. I love it. You delivered an excellent message in a lovely, lilting piece. The ending verse is really good.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Jude, I really love this rhyme scheme. Felt so right with this piece. Your compliments are so appreciated. So glad you liked it. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from EdwardVal
Another wonderful piece and you followed the meter well. However as i've stated to you before about exact rhyme the ends must be the same and some styles/ formats require it. Here you follow it perfectly in AAA/CCC/DDD/EEE but your B's and non-exact. Just thought i'd poin it out and hope it helps for the future. Take care and great piece.
E'Val
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Another wonderful piece and you followed the meter well. However as i've stated to you before about exact rhyme the ends must be the same and some styles/ formats require it. Here you follow it perfectly in AAA/CCC/DDD/EEE but your B's and non-exact. Just thought i'd poin it out and hope it helps for the future. Take care and great piece.
E'Val
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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E'Val, thank you for your lovely review and compliments. Am very glad you enjoyed this work. Always appreciated, Sue
Comment from Domino
This is just the right length fa me, Chris. An easy an interestin write with a message in the last line specially. Rhyme scheme is VERY effective and flow, despite some short statements is great an in meter.
Top stuff! Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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This is just the right length fa me, Chris. An easy an interestin write with a message in the last line specially. Rhyme scheme is VERY effective and flow, despite some short statements is great an in meter.
Top stuff! Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Ray, thanks so much! So glad you liked this work. Appreciate your remarks on the rhyme and meter and your top review! Yours, Sue
Comment from Roisin
Wonderful, Sue. I love this one. It's rhyme and rhythm is great. I love the rhyme scheme - might try one of those myself. And, boy, can I relate to your words! Sometimes I crave those little moments where I don't have to think of anything and can just relax (they're few and far between in my house with four little ones). I really enjoyed this poem.
Warm regards.
Roisin
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Wonderful, Sue. I love this one. It's rhyme and rhythm is great. I love the rhyme scheme - might try one of those myself. And, boy, can I relate to your words! Sometimes I crave those little moments where I don't have to think of anything and can just relax (they're few and far between in my house with four little ones). I really enjoyed this poem.
Warm regards.
Roisin
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Yes, I know your hands and mind are full! Quick, while they are all away, grab that chair and disappear somewhere else - Ha!! Thank you so much for all your lovely compliments on this poem and for your great review. With warm regards, Sue
Comment from Hitcher
Wouldn't we all friend, wouldn't we all! I loved the impressive meter and rhyme scheme adopted, definitely helped to enhance the quality of the read. I just climbed to the top of a mountain today Sue[true] Mt Ruapehu, took the cable car as high as we could and then walked the rest of the way[about an hour and a half] there is still large patches of snow, the sky was a beautiful blue and we could see FOREVER! Thought I'd share!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Wouldn't we all friend, wouldn't we all! I loved the impressive meter and rhyme scheme adopted, definitely helped to enhance the quality of the read. I just climbed to the top of a mountain today Sue[true] Mt Ruapehu, took the cable car as high as we could and then walked the rest of the way[about an hour and a half] there is still large patches of snow, the sky was a beautiful blue and we could see FOREVER! Thought I'd share!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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**jealous** - **jealous** LOL!!! BECAUSE, I have been to the top of Mt. Ruapehu and it is magnificent!! Thanks for sharing that because it brought back such a memory that I hadn't thought of in awhile. Ahhhh! So glad you had a great day with the family like that!! You live in a fine part of the world, my friend. Thanks so much for your very kind review. Your friend, Sue
Comment from Minglement
This is a lovely sentiment beautifully expressed. Wouldn't we all treasure a moment or so like that. And they are too rare, and as you say, that's why they're so precious. Great presentation. Beautifully done.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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This is a lovely sentiment beautifully expressed. Wouldn't we all treasure a moment or so like that. And they are too rare, and as you say, that's why they're so precious. Great presentation. Beautifully done.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Minglement, Thank you so much for your lovely compliments. I feel so honored that you gave this work your highest review. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem. From the heart...Sue
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You're so welcome, Sue. I really loved it. Take care, Marcia
Comment from NightWriter
Wow! "These Rare Gems" is a gem of its own. Beautifully written and perfectly told. The rhyming and rhythm are so perfect that the poem reads perfectly smooth. Well done. Here's to finding that quiet time! For me it's usually 2AM, that's where I find my gem.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Wow! "These Rare Gems" is a gem of its own. Beautifully written and perfectly told. The rhyming and rhythm are so perfect that the poem reads perfectly smooth. Well done. Here's to finding that quiet time! For me it's usually 2AM, that's where I find my gem.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Ha!! Yes! 2:00 a.m. - What a great time to be able to hear absolutely nothing. Good for you! Thanks so much for your very kind review and compliments. Always appreciated, Sue :-))