Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

well, it certainly is perfect limerick form - read aloud there isn't a hitch!! And it is most funny and aimed right for the target audience who will do the voting, you clever woman!! LOL

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008

Cheeky, I am!! Ha! I do believe Curt will be getting a huge MALE vote! HA!!!! Talk about a "target" audience lol. Thanks for your review, Brooke...as always, Sue

reply by adewpearl on 10-Dec-2008

yes, I know - the males will vote for those boobs alone without having to read the damned poem, short as it is! :-)

reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008

HA!!!! Ain't it the TRUTH!! We DO know them more than they know us....LOL!

Comment from jshep

Excellent

I am laughing so you did good, S. Cracked up at the last line with 'satori'. I had never even heard of that before I came on this site. Have truly learned a lot and as your poem says, we need are daily fix. Very cute and thanks again for organizing contest. Joyce

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008

When I recently came to this site, I thought I was going to "dabble" in poetry. Didn't know I was going to become an addict. Have learned so much here. I didn't know what a satori was, either!! Not until all the very cool people in here helped out. So glad you liked it. (Yeah, seems everyone is enjoying this bit of fun!) :-) Sue

Comment from Brian S. Pratt

Excellent

What a great poem. I really liked your word choice and it read well.

No spag or other corrections to suggest.

Good Job.


Brian S. Pratt
fantasy author

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008

Thanks for reading, Brian. And for your great review and comments! :-) Sue

Comment from Domino

Excellent

Hi, Suee.
Just one suggestion which, IMHO improves the last line's flow, which stutters at the moment;
Oh, my, I've just penned a satori.'
Very original and clever to incorporate a haiku, poetry site and limerick all in one. Brilliant.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray xx

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008

Dang it! Good call, Ray. I was trying to find just that "stutter". But, can't change it now. And wish I could throw in the "kigo" that Curt thought of. Ha! :-)

Comment from skye

Excellent

You got it just right -- clever and cute and a bit of tongue in cheek. This is a fun contest. Everyone is writing such original and clever verses.
Very well done. Good luck

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008

Thanks, Skye! Yes, everyone is having a great time with being so clever! Glad you enjoyed. :-) Sue

Comment from Curt Mongold

Excellent

LOL!
And I thought you could stand on your own without the props cuz!
We all need a little mind soothing, ego building boost once in awhile, so here's to you and your satori!
P.S.,
if you added a kigo, this could be a haiku/limerick hybrid!
Sincerely,
Curt

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008

great suggestion there, cuz! (excuse me while I sneak into the back door there and just slide that kigo in there.. shhhhhh!)

Comment from rmdelta

Excellent

sue,

ok, ya got me. when it comes to poetry like this, I'm as lost as a pool ball in a rabbit hole. I cannot understand them, my mind just cannot reach that high. It's hopeless for me Sue. So, I'll just sneak the .20 off the table and slink away.

REggie

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 Comment Written 10-Dec-2008

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008

Reggie, I'm going to SMACK you on the hands! Shoo!!!! Bugger off!!!! LMBO!!!