CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 131 "Poker Nights"A collection of poetry
31 total reviews
Comment from starman
A powerful nonet, sixteez. Lools like you have a real flair for poetic art. Once again, very impressive. I like reading your work.
:)s
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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A powerful nonet, sixteez. Lools like you have a real flair for poetic art. Once again, very impressive. I like reading your work.
:)s
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Starman, what a compliment! I really appreciate that. Thanks so much for our great review! Sue
Comment from Poet Gone Mad
lol. This was a funny piece. You did the nonet quite well. You really painted quite the scene. It was lighthearted and fun. I enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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lol. This was a funny piece. You did the nonet quite well. You really painted quite the scene. It was lighthearted and fun. I enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Thanks NDFan! I remember being scared to death of being caught! HA!!! So glad you enjoyed it! Sue
Comment from honeytree
I liked the art work the blended with the words used.
Yes this is how some children get used to smoking which is a crying shame. We know smoking affects our health.
"The sweet smell and taste of cigarettes
appealed to me since I was eight.
Dad would have the guys over
for poker night - Fridays.
And I'd sneak a butt
from an ashtray.
Couldn't wait
to light
it."
The transfer of disease smoking butts that have been in the mouths of others.
Honeytree.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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I liked the art work the blended with the words used.
Yes this is how some children get used to smoking which is a crying shame. We know smoking affects our health.
"The sweet smell and taste of cigarettes
appealed to me since I was eight.
Dad would have the guys over
for poker night - Fridays.
And I'd sneak a butt
from an ashtray.
Couldn't wait
to light
it."
The transfer of disease smoking butts that have been in the mouths of others.
Honeytree.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2008
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Thanks for your review, Honeytree! YUK! Butts! .......Sue
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I am glad you likedthe review.All the best. Honeytree.
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I am glad you Yuk!Butts they can kill our kids or us if we smoke butts or cigarettes . When I was studying for my nursing exams many years ago,I smoked then stopped because of the health hazards. Honeytree.
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I am glad you liked this review. Honeytree
Comment from Hitcher
I hope this is fiction friend, I cannot imagine an eight year old Sue[ha ha] sorry the thought of you Eight makes me laugh, cigarette in hand green face, coughing up a lung or three. I would hope not anyway. I was raised in a none smoking family so didn't get the urge to try until I was in my late teens. I think you did a great job of the Nonet and wish you well.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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I hope this is fiction friend, I cannot imagine an eight year old Sue[ha ha] sorry the thought of you Eight makes me laugh, cigarette in hand green face, coughing up a lung or three. I would hope not anyway. I was raised in a none smoking family so didn't get the urge to try until I was in my late teens. I think you did a great job of the Nonet and wish you well.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Yes, I DID swipe those butts on poker night!!! And I remember being so happy that I could go out and light that thing up!! Bizarre. Not for coolness, but I REALLY liked the taste! So, wrote about it. Thanks for your well-wishes! I'm waiting for your "Pièce de résistance"!! Suc
Comment from tator tot
I enjoyed the format of your poem. The red type and the shape of the poem made your words look like the glowing tip of a cigarette. My husband smokes and I assume that he can relate to your first line," The sweet smell and taste of cigarettes." Good poem. Thanks.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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I enjoyed the format of your poem. The red type and the shape of the poem made your words look like the glowing tip of a cigarette. My husband smokes and I assume that he can relate to your first line," The sweet smell and taste of cigarettes." Good poem. Thanks.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Thanks, Tator Tot! A lot of fun getting the words, the form and telling a "wee" story. Sue
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
this is a very good and clever poem. i love the way you have risen to the challenge and the concept of the poem made me laugh. it reminded me of when i was a teenager myself and thought it looked good to smoke. Now many years later I am hooked on the habbit and realise there is nothing good about being addicted to ciggies
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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this is a very good and clever poem. i love the way you have risen to the challenge and the concept of the poem made me laugh. it reminded me of when i was a teenager myself and thought it looked good to smoke. Now many years later I am hooked on the habbit and realise there is nothing good about being addicted to ciggies
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Goldwell, I'm hearing back from others about their "evil" ways! HA!! Yeah, dang ciggies! Me, too.... When I saw this contest, I sat down to write and had NO idea why this came out...after all these years. Thanks for your real encouraging words and review. Glad you liked it. Sue
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue.
It's brilliant the way you've created the PERFECT shape whilst adhering to the word count; no easy task, I know as I've never managed it. LOL!
This is great fun about an un-PC subject. As I smoke it probably made me laugh (and cough, LOL) more. Lovely read and good luck in the contest. Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Hi, Sue.
It's brilliant the way you've created the PERFECT shape whilst adhering to the word count; no easy task, I know as I've never managed it. LOL!
This is great fun about an un-PC subject. As I smoke it probably made me laugh (and cough, LOL) more. Lovely read and good luck in the contest. Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Very un-PC, Ray! HA!! Hey, it's the truth. Thanks for your review and well-wishes for the contest. Yours, Sue
Comment from Curt Mongold
Love it Sue!
My mom took me to the doctor when I was three because she caught me chewing on the butts of her menthol cigarettes and eating the burnt match heads. He told her I was prbably eating the match heads due to a mineral deficiency, and that the menthol must have tasted good to me! Other than nicotine withdrwal at 3 yrs. of age, I suppose I suffered no ill effects. In othr words, I'm MUCH better now...
LOL!
Great job!
Your cuz,
Curt
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Love it Sue!
My mom took me to the doctor when I was three because she caught me chewing on the butts of her menthol cigarettes and eating the burnt match heads. He told her I was prbably eating the match heads due to a mineral deficiency, and that the menthol must have tasted good to me! Other than nicotine withdrwal at 3 yrs. of age, I suppose I suffered no ill effects. In othr words, I'm MUCH better now...
LOL!
Great job!
Your cuz,
Curt
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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LMBO!!!!! Now THAT is a great story!!! A mineral deficiency! **almost on floor** SULPHUR!!! Oh, my belly hurts! I'm outta here....A big thanks! Sue
Comment from dportwood
You created a sneaky imagery with this.
Nonet style and centered justification gave this a very nice triangular appearance. One of the nicest I've seen so far.
Good job.
Duane
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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You created a sneaky imagery with this.
Nonet style and centered justification gave this a very nice triangular appearance. One of the nicest I've seen so far.
Good job.
Duane
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Duane, so glad you could feel how sly I was! Naughty girl! Thanks for your great comments and review! Sue
Comment from mermaids
you did an excellent job with this, very enjoyable to read and gives a sense of the atmosphere, I see the cigarette smoke and cards.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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you did an excellent job with this, very enjoyable to read and gives a sense of the atmosphere, I see the cigarette smoke and cards.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Mermaids, so cool that you mentioned you could see the smoke and cards! Thanks for your great review. Much appreciated, Sue