CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 137 "Surf's Up!"A collection of poetry
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Comment from malachi1206
Or SSPFSP :) I enjoyed this poem although I didn't get the concept of "punning" and I haven't tried this form before but hey I grew up by the beach and I can relate to this upbeat poem you have written here excellent malachi1206
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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Or SSPFSP :) I enjoyed this poem although I didn't get the concept of "punning" and I haven't tried this form before but hey I grew up by the beach and I can relate to this upbeat poem you have written here excellent malachi1206
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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SSPFSP - ha!! The beach is like "freedom", isn't it? Thanks so much for reading and glad you enjoyed. With regards, Sue
Comment from jamar2
Not my thing this one, you have followed the contest rules, but it does nothing for me personaly, it would be much more creative if you tried another subject, ie. getting away from writing about the family. to much self indulgance here, not enough creativity, and no humour.
jamar.
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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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Not my thing this one, you have followed the contest rules, but it does nothing for me personaly, it would be much more creative if you tried another subject, ie. getting away from writing about the family. to much self indulgance here, not enough creativity, and no humour.
jamar.
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Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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Me thinks your critique is not within the realms of "critiquing".
I get 3 stars and gladly accept them when the review has coherent content. You say I followed the rules. This is the essence of the poem.
From there, you need to be a bit more precise on your critique. Because saying it's not your 'thing' and I should change the subject is not cool. And then to go on and say it has no humour (who said it was supposed to be funny?) is your presumption. But, what goes beyond the pale here is when you said, it is self-indulgent.
Like I said, I've been given 3 stars and do not get upset in the least, as I am here to learn. But this critique is only bashing. It is not constructive criticism. Turn down the negative volume and perhaps I could respect your review.
Sue
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ok, by now you should have read my last message as I have just read yours, the part where you say I mentioned it had no humour? I maent TRY some humour, you know that stuff that makes people laugh? or is my English not good enough to understand,
as for being self indulgant, that basicly means stop banging on about the samr old thing all the time, and try reviewing to learn more, you write something and EXSPECT people to jump all over your work, just to massage your dam ego, write now that I have turned down the negative volume and pumped up the posative, do you understand now, you want to learn then learn, get out there with some more competative work thats original, and if it does well then you can be proud of yourself.
jamar.
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I rest my case yet again. Negative, negative, negative.
Have no clue as to where you are coming from and thank goodness for that, because I sure would NOT want to relate to it.
You try to pigeon-hole someone into what they write about? You have the audacity and arrogance to do that? Forgive me that I've only just started to write!!!
You have a bitterness that is between each one of your lines and I do not know why, but that is irrelevant. I just don't want to see it again.
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you wont see it again, you can go and hide in your tepid little world, you obviously are not willing to learn anything let alone TAKE critque on the chin when face with the reality of it.
jamar.
Comment from Domino
Hi, Sue.
This is a very playful and enjoyable approach to a strange genre challenge. Cute tongue-twister that I thoroughly enjoyed. Best wishes and good luck, Ray xx
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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Hi, Sue.
This is a very playful and enjoyable approach to a strange genre challenge. Cute tongue-twister that I thoroughly enjoyed. Best wishes and good luck, Ray xx
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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Hi Ray, thanks for reading! Glad you enjoyed this little piece. And thanks for your great review. With kindest regards, Sue
Comment from rama devi
Adorable artwork and poem to match (and vice versa). I am not sure if I liked all the end rhymes being the same...it makes it just a bit awkward to read -like a tongue twister. But it is clever and cute too, so I am not suggesting a change.
I did not notice a single spot of spag.
Best of luck to you.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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Adorable artwork and poem to match (and vice versa). I am not sure if I liked all the end rhymes being the same...it makes it just a bit awkward to read -like a tongue twister. But it is clever and cute too, so I am not suggesting a change.
I did not notice a single spot of spag.
Best of luck to you.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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Hi Rama, It is a cute piece of artwork, isn't it?! Thank you for your review and specific comments. Always appreciated. With regards, Sue
Comment from raimie
Oh, I love the koala bears. What a great poem, full of fun- no pun- intended, LOL. A great contest entry, more than qualifies and meets the guidelines, great job.
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Oh, I love the koala bears. What a great poem, full of fun- no pun- intended, LOL. A great contest entry, more than qualifies and meets the guidelines, great job.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from SunlitWhisper
Stunning Tyburn poetry and the statement is well penned. Good luck with you entry.
These are "I think" rather enjoyable to read.
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Stunning Tyburn poetry and the statement is well penned. Good luck with you entry.
These are "I think" rather enjoyable to read.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
Comment from cherry_rose
What fun! I love the way you wrote this and the colors and pictures add to the upbeat mood. Very nice job with the Tyburn Poetry format.
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What fun! I love the way you wrote this and the colors and pictures add to the upbeat mood. Very nice job with the Tyburn Poetry format.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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Thought it was time for me to inject a bit of 'fun' in one of my pieces! Thanks so much for your very generous review and kind comments. With regards, Sue
Comment from JoAnna Lee
Really cute!!! Great pic to enhance, too. You met the requirements by the announcement. Bravo! Now check what a true Tyburn Poem is... which MOST of us missed.
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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Really cute!!! Great pic to enhance, too. You met the requirements by the announcement. Bravo! Now check what a true Tyburn Poem is... which MOST of us missed.
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
Comment Written 03-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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What?? Did I miss something? A 'true" Tyburn? Please don't keep me in suspense!!!
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Good Morning!
A Tyburn poem is
a six line poem, consisting of 2,2,2,2,9,9 syllables.
Lines 1 and 2 are repeated in syllable position 5,6,7,8 of line 5,
and syllables 3 and 4 are repeated in syllable positions 5,6,7,8 of line 6. Lines 1 - 4 rhyme.
Lines 5 and 6 rhyme.
Lines 1 - 4 should be adjectives.
There is usually no punctuation.
Most of us missed the adjective thing...
and some even missed the positions in the 5th and 6th lines.
I think there was maybe only one of us that followed correctly,
but all of us followed as to the "rules" in the PROMPT, so I'm going to TRY to vote according to the prompt, but one really sticks out as being proper to the form. LOL
This wasn't an easy form of poetry as to the prompt...
I'm really going to have to try one correctly sometime in the future.
Have a great day,
Donna
Comment from Lois Delaney
Another great piece of work, dear you. Some have all the talent. Smiles. Blessings to you as you keep writing and winning. Hugs to you dear one.
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Another great piece of work, dear you. Some have all the talent. Smiles. Blessings to you as you keep writing and winning. Hugs to you dear one.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2008
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Cher, you are the sweetest! Thank you for this great review! And your lovely comments. Warmest regards, Sue
Comment from Hitcher
I do like these Tyburn poems I have to admit and I do like yours Sue you paint a great picture with your chosen words and you managed to stick to the correct format so well done. Good luck
You inspired me to enter! No really! You did.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2008
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I do like these Tyburn poems I have to admit and I do like yours Sue you paint a great picture with your chosen words and you managed to stick to the correct format so well done. Good luck
You inspired me to enter! No really! You did.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2008
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Well, that is so cool! I am very glad to hear that because you wrote something SO special!! I'm turning this thank you into another review on your piece! HA!!! Luv ya, Hitch!!! You're the best!