Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice artwork and presentation, Melissa.
-You have used your few words well with a good topic.
-Effective use of poetic devices,
imagery, comparison, and alliteration.
-I didn't know this detail about pears.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024

Thanks for the heads up on the typo Pam. I'll edit it now! Hugs, my friend.

Melissa

reply by Pam (respa) on 11-Sep-2024

You are very welcome, Melissa.

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This is an excellent one-line poem. Congratulations on your Haiku win. It was great. I'm not a raw pear fan because the texture is a little grainy, but I love canned pears with cottage cheese and cherry on top.

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 Comment Written 11-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024

Thank you Beth. I must say that I am a fresh pear girl myself :). They are soooo good! Thanks again.

Melissa

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

I have never really understood why, but your eight words are definitely true. You could have used strawberries as well. Once again, I've never really understood why.
Love language is a nice way of saying that pears are an aphrodisiac.
Well done in just eight words.

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 Comment Written 11-Sep-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2024

Hi Debbie. Thanks. I am especially fond of a ripe pear. I usually close my eyes and just savor the moment :). Strawberries are yummy too as you said.

Hugs!

Melissa

reply by Debbie Pope on 11-Sep-2024

I need to do more savoring. Then my imagery would improve I am sure.