The moon creature
Everything gets hungry.29 total reviews
Comment from Ulla
This was a fantasy poem if I've ever read one. At times, I was not quite sure what I was reading, but the pour astronauts were in mortal danger. Good luck in the contest
Ulla :)))
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This was a fantasy poem if I've ever read one. At times, I was not quite sure what I was reading, but the pour astronauts were in mortal danger. Good luck in the contest
Ulla :)))
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Is this a trip to the moon? A visit to see if there are a creatures there. This is an inventive write inspired by the picture of the moon, an unusual interpretation here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Is this a trip to the moon? A visit to see if there are a creatures there. This is an inventive write inspired by the picture of the moon, an unusual interpretation here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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I take that as a compliment. Thank you for reading.
Comment from Katiemae1977
What a strange and wonderfully creative story. An excellent entry for the moon prompt contest. This reminds me a bit of Dr Seusse's writing.
I throughly enjoyed and good luck in the contest
Katiemae1977
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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What a strange and wonderfully creative story. An excellent entry for the moon prompt contest. This reminds me a bit of Dr Seusse's writing.
I throughly enjoyed and good luck in the contest
Katiemae1977
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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That is quite the compliment. Thank you reading.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
loved this dark tale about finding out too late that there is life on the moon and the moon creatures are hungry like these lines the best
What a strange group of creatures,
And such tasty features,
From where do they hail?
Did they leave Lick a trail?
Let's ask that blue ball and find out!
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loved this dark tale about finding out too late that there is life on the moon and the moon creatures are hungry like these lines the best
What a strange group of creatures,
And such tasty features,
From where do they hail?
Did they leave Lick a trail?
Let's ask that blue ball and find out!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
Comment from mermaids
This is an excellent sci-fi poem that reminds me of the alien movies. You have also created a unique tale about the moon. Love the line "a quick spot of tea." As a tea drinker I can relate to this moon creature drinking his tea. Excellent poetic form and use of words.
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This is an excellent sci-fi poem that reminds me of the alien movies. You have also created a unique tale about the moon. Love the line "a quick spot of tea." As a tea drinker I can relate to this moon creature drinking his tea. Excellent poetic form and use of words.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is an imaginative journey that takes us to a fantastical moon with a mysterious creature! I loved it! The playful rhymes and lively rhythm make it a delight to read. The ending wraps up the adventure with a charming touch of curiosity. It's a fun, engaging piece that captures a sense of wonder and whimsy!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Your poem is an imaginative journey that takes us to a fantastical moon with a mysterious creature! I loved it! The playful rhymes and lively rhythm make it a delight to read. The ending wraps up the adventure with a charming touch of curiosity. It's a fun, engaging piece that captures a sense of wonder and whimsy!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Michael, thank you for the kind words and feedback. I wanted to take the reader to a familiar setting with a certain surprise that melts into fear at the prospect of having Lick come to Earth. The arhythmic feel is balanced against the peculiar word choices, never letting the reader catch their breath, even momentarily. I chose to go with a disordered order type of flow. I am happy to see that the whimsy isn't lost. Check out The other space creature named Sandersonbleacher if you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Caperton Tissot
Very humorous. Love the fantasy. One line I find cumbersome: "the Opportunity Sea." How about just "Opportunity Sea" for better rhythm. Love the line about next time trying trout. Fun poem
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Very humorous. Love the fantasy. One line I find cumbersome: "the Opportunity Sea." How about just "Opportunity Sea" for better rhythm. Love the line about next time trying trout. Fun poem
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2024
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Excellent question! The Opportunity Sea, followed by the quick spot of tea, made it seem to me that Lick was perhaps flying or traveling in some unorthodox manner. Had I just said Opportunity Sea, it seemed more arbitrary so I added the syllable in an attempt to convey flight of some kind.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading your poem. You have a great imaginative
Thr poem was very descriptive and well written. Good luck in tge contes. Very good writing
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I enjoyed reading your poem. You have a great imaginative
Thr poem was very descriptive and well written. Good luck in tge contes. Very good writing
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Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
Comment from papa55mike
Yes, those were the creamy-filled kind, delicious. I've read several stories about the dark side of the moon and this one goes with them. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Yes, those were the creamy-filled kind, delicious. I've read several stories about the dark side of the moon and this one goes with them. What a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
