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The problem of creating a non-addictive painkiller

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Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Skype sex? Hmm. Maybe in tasteful moderation.
Our academic schedules were quite dissimilar, for he was to be a business major ... - Is this the way you speak, or did using the conjunction 'for' just seem like the literary thing to type?
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 Comment Written 05-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
    I don't really use it myself when I talk, but I like to occasionally throw it in for variety. I tend to overuse "as" and I get tired of always using "because" or "since." "For" is definitely more literary, so I use it sparingly, but Brian is widely read and has probably heard it himself in all the classics he has read, so he occasionally gets a little literary in his narration.

    I won't be going into any detail in the Skype calls--just a few references to it.