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Comment from GoWiSt
"Nothing's As It Seems" Honey, it never is.
Well, thanks a whole bunch; I'll never look at corncobs the same ever again--urrghh!
City-sleeker chick in an Amish outfit? Next you know, some cute-ish Amish widower, whose late wife just passed the week before, will be wooing you. And tell him you'll say 'yes' only if he'll get indoor plumbing. Mutual compromise.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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"Nothing's As It Seems" Honey, it never is.
Well, thanks a whole bunch; I'll never look at corncobs the same ever again--urrghh!
City-sleeker chick in an Amish outfit? Next you know, some cute-ish Amish widower, whose late wife just passed the week before, will be wooing you. And tell him you'll say 'yes' only if he'll get indoor plumbing. Mutual compromise.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Aw, damn! There goes the rest of my chapters!! You so obviously have my number GoWiSt!!!
Comment from Steve Foreman
You say this story is fictitious, but it is so well written with authentic dialogue that I truly believed - even from the earlier chapter - that is was a true story that I was reading! Great and entertaining writing!
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You say this story is fictitious, but it is so well written with authentic dialogue that I truly believed - even from the earlier chapter - that is was a true story that I was reading! Great and entertaining writing!
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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That is the ultimate compliment!! Thank you, Steve. xoxo
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Here are my favorite lines:
drenches it in hues to rival a Norman Rockwell lithograph (this tells us about more than the hues, but also the vibe of the Mid-Atlantic states).
gleaming like snub-nosed rocket ships (is there grain or missiles in them there silos?)
A shawl and an apron, but no hat? Don't they wear little white caps on their heads? Can I get a picture of you in those clothes? Please?
Does Gretchen know that you have her squawking? How rude!
Are those gremlins in the paragraph on the Jewish bath, or Jewish gibberish?
I have an idea ... use your corn cob curlers to make a hat!
Don't go ragging on Scrapple - I grew up loving it for breakfast on Sunday mornings. It was a treat:-)
Well, this might be the funniest thing I've read here since last week (when you posted your last installment of life on the farm). Now I have to read Gretchen's account, which is waiting in my inbox.
Thanks for the treat.
xoxoxo
Pam
P.S. I want the picture of you in the pretty blue dress with apron.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Here are my favorite lines:
drenches it in hues to rival a Norman Rockwell lithograph (this tells us about more than the hues, but also the vibe of the Mid-Atlantic states).
gleaming like snub-nosed rocket ships (is there grain or missiles in them there silos?)
A shawl and an apron, but no hat? Don't they wear little white caps on their heads? Can I get a picture of you in those clothes? Please?
Does Gretchen know that you have her squawking? How rude!
Are those gremlins in the paragraph on the Jewish bath, or Jewish gibberish?
I have an idea ... use your corn cob curlers to make a hat!
Don't go ragging on Scrapple - I grew up loving it for breakfast on Sunday mornings. It was a treat:-)
Well, this might be the funniest thing I've read here since last week (when you posted your last installment of life on the farm). Now I have to read Gretchen's account, which is waiting in my inbox.
Thanks for the treat.
xoxoxo
Pam
P.S. I want the picture of you in the pretty blue dress with apron.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Corn cob curlers as a hat makes me think Minnie Pearl. Nope. Won't be getting quite THAT "country."!!
There'll be an Amish cap coming in a later chapter; you have to be patient!! (I know, I know; that is SOOO not your strong suit!)
Jewish girls and scrapple: NOT a good co-mingle, what with the pork and all...
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Duh! Pork! Sometimes I'm slow.
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Well, but you have fancy sandals.
Comment from BethShelby
I love the tale you two are writing. I think the corncob thing is funny. We had an outhouse until I was ten, but bit no corncobs although I knew some claimed to have used them. We used an outdated SearsRoebuck catalog.. The corncobs might have been softer. I've heard you were issued three, two red ones and one white one. You use the red corncob first and then the white. If the white one comes out brown, you're not clean yet. You need the other red one. Did you get that? Did you even know they come in colors depending on the kind of corn you grow? lol
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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I love the tale you two are writing. I think the corncob thing is funny. We had an outhouse until I was ten, but bit no corncobs although I knew some claimed to have used them. We used an outdated SearsRoebuck catalog.. The corncobs might have been softer. I've heard you were issued three, two red ones and one white one. You use the red corncob first and then the white. If the white one comes out brown, you're not clean yet. You need the other red one. Did you get that? Did you even know they come in colors depending on the kind of corn you grow? lol
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Wow! That's corncob knowledge to a far higher ledge of understanding than I ever wanted. OYYYYYYY!!!
Thanks for the really interesting review, though!! It's evoking all KINDS of childhood memories for you!!
xoxox
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Yeah, TMI Thats not a childhood memory, My husband told me that as a joke, once. But you two brought up the corn cobs. I was just kidding aound.
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Oh, that makes me feel way better about your life!! hahahaha.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice progress.
...though I I worry - oops
...mikvah... - Quite a few Gremlins snuck their way past the guardians.
So you went in in your 'swim dress' but had to take it off anyway to get into the blue tent. Why not... you know, since it had to come off anyway? Or didn't you want FanStorians to have 'visuals'? (smiley face here)
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Nice progress.
...though I I worry - oops
...mikvah... - Quite a few Gremlins snuck their way past the guardians.
So you went in in your 'swim dress' but had to take it off anyway to get into the blue tent. Why not... you know, since it had to come off anyway? Or didn't you want FanStorians to have 'visuals'? (smiley face here)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thank you; the gremlins have now been banished.
I DEFINITELY did not want FanStorians having visuals!! Oy, Wayne!!! hahaha.
Thanks for the nice review, as always. So very appreciated. xo
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a hilarious chapter. When you were given corn cobs, I thought they were for use in the outhouse. But I couldn't think of a use for the strips of fabric. When you used the corn cobs as curlers, I was relived, until Helene disappointed me by pointing at the outhouse. I enjoyed your detailed descriptions that made me feel I was there. (Glad I wasn't) I look forward to how you handle the next unexpected thing.
not another living soul, save for these people who rescued us, for miles. (Did you mean... not another living soul for miles, save for....)?
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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This is a hilarious chapter. When you were given corn cobs, I thought they were for use in the outhouse. But I couldn't think of a use for the strips of fabric. When you used the corn cobs as curlers, I was relived, until Helene disappointed me by pointing at the outhouse. I enjoyed your detailed descriptions that made me feel I was there. (Glad I wasn't) I look forward to how you handle the next unexpected thing.
not another living soul, save for these people who rescued us, for miles. (Did you mean... not another living soul for miles, save for....)?
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Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Hahaha. That damn Helene went and ruined our lovely Norman Rockwell tableau!!
Thanks for the eagle-eye catch with the misplaced "for miles." I have it changed now.
I love having you on this journey with us! Thanks for the terrific review. xoxox
Comment from GWHARGIS
Honestly, I can change the stripping part to have me asking why you are getting in fully clothed. You could change it to the rain still coming down during the beginning. I'll add that we join Ezra and boys outside to help with chicken. How about that?
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Honestly, I can change the stripping part to have me asking why you are getting in fully clothed. You could change it to the rain still coming down during the beginning. I'll add that we join Ezra and boys outside to help with chicken. How about that?
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Okay; perfect.
Comment from pome lover
well, another 6. That is hysterical! But you are too canny not to have known "front and back." However I'm trying to picture your expression. Am still laughing. That really would make a fabulous picture.
So, Gretchen is the straight man. I wonder how she portrays the two of you. As you can see, I haven't read hers, yet.
Well, I bet those Amish folk will be laughing for a good while. You probably made their day. (I know this is just your character, but I keep thinking it's you.) anyway, more fun and games! Terrific.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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well, another 6. That is hysterical! But you are too canny not to have known "front and back." However I'm trying to picture your expression. Am still laughing. That really would make a fabulous picture.
So, Gretchen is the straight man. I wonder how she portrays the two of you. As you can see, I haven't read hers, yet.
Well, I bet those Amish folk will be laughing for a good while. You probably made their day. (I know this is just your character, but I keep thinking it's you.) anyway, more fun and games! Terrific.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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What?! Two sixes in one day? I am obviously very spoiled. Thank you for such extra-wonderful generosity, Katharine. I appreciate it very, very much. Ditto for this lovely review. I'll look forward to reading the one you leave for Gretchen. xoxox
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Again, you have me laughing out loud. I can't help it. You and Gretchen are doing a wonderful job with this story.
For the BACK part!" shouts Ezra in exasperation and, bending in half, (missing beginning quotation marks.)
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Again, you have me laughing out loud. I can't help it. You and Gretchen are doing a wonderful job with this story.
For the BACK part!" shouts Ezra in exasperation and, bending in half, (missing beginning quotation marks.)
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Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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We really appreciate you being on the journey with us, Barbara. Thanks for this warm and wonderful review. xoxox
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You have to be resourceful when you are away from home Rachelle and certainly thought outside the box here and I think Gretchen was a bit shocked to. Another fine chapter in your tale of life away from home and this is beginning to sound like quite the adventure, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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You have to be resourceful when you are away from home Rachelle and certainly thought outside the box here and I think Gretchen was a bit shocked to. Another fine chapter in your tale of life away from home and this is beginning to sound like quite the adventure, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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That's right, Dolly!! Life is all about being adaptable!! Gretchen's version is quite hilarious, I thought, too.
Thanks for staying on the adventure with us!! xoxox
