Miranda's Trouble In Paradise
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Comment from Lea Tonin1
Break ups suck no matter how you slice it or what color you paint it, it still sucks all around.
Yes, those are the gamut of emotions. Before you get back to being original again. So you're break up that you've written here? It makes your character super real. Because it's what happens in everyday life when people cry. Details make your story believable. You're a fine way of writing, crisp, clear, and concise. You do not need switch and you get it straight. I think that's good too, it's great submission how you enjoyed it very much. That's the block to you and have a great night!
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
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Break ups suck no matter how you slice it or what color you paint it, it still sucks all around.
Yes, those are the gamut of emotions. Before you get back to being original again. So you're break up that you've written here? It makes your character super real. Because it's what happens in everyday life when people cry. Details make your story believable. You're a fine way of writing, crisp, clear, and concise. You do not need switch and you get it straight. I think that's good too, it's great submission how you enjoyed it very much. That's the block to you and have a great night!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much. I truly appreciate your comments. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Miranda needs a good shaking. When is she gonna see that everything Mitch does is because he loves her. Mr. Starling is an interesting character. I thought he was a little weird previously. Seems like Miranda is noticing that also. One booboo: Rita says. (Her) smile fades . . .
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
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Miranda needs a good shaking. When is she gonna see that everything Mitch does is because he loves her. Mr. Starling is an interesting character. I thought he was a little weird previously. Seems like Miranda is noticing that also. One booboo: Rita says. (Her) smile fades . . .
Comment Written 27-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
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Thanks fir this spag catch. I agree, Miranda needs to stop bowing to her pride. Gretchen
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oh, you little writing wizard, you...leave me hanging like that right at the end. You shameless, awful wench!
Another really great chapter. But if you don't get Mitch and Miranda back together REEEEEEEEEEEALLY soon, I'm going to bring my fiery redheaded self right to your Kitty Hawk front porch and lump you. Seriously. You get them made up post haste, Young Lady!! Do you hear me?
Good intrigue and good showing that Miranda ISN'T made of galvanized steel after all!!
xoxox
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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
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Oh, you little writing wizard, you...leave me hanging like that right at the end. You shameless, awful wench!
Another really great chapter. But if you don't get Mitch and Miranda back together REEEEEEEEEEEALLY soon, I'm going to bring my fiery redheaded self right to your Kitty Hawk front porch and lump you. Seriously. You get them made up post haste, Young Lady!! Do you hear me?
Good intrigue and good showing that Miranda ISN'T made of galvanized steel after all!!
xoxox
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
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Miranda would welcome a visit from you, Rachelle. Lol. So would I. But Miranda is hard headed. I didn't think she'd pull back as far as she did. Gretchen
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Yeah, that was a shocker. I'm not convinced Mitch thinks they've "broken up." He was hurt, but I got the feeling he'd retreated and was going to go lick his wounds, not that he'd "left for good."
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is very interesting. Your story , includes subjects like auras, which readers will find interesting. Possibly you could add a link describing auras in your Author Note which would give your readers more insight into what they are reading in your story. My mom used to tell me to keep my bright aura around me and that helped me. Excellent writing.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
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This is very interesting. Your story , includes subjects like auras, which readers will find interesting. Possibly you could add a link describing auras in your Author Note which would give your readers more insight into what they are reading in your story. My mom used to tell me to keep my bright aura around me and that helped me. Excellent writing.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
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Comment Written 27-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
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Thanks so much. I'm so happy you enjoyed this. Gretchen