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Letters to my granddaughters

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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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This image is so delightful I can't take my eyes off little Charolette! And the confidence she seems to ooze in that little piece of dialogue reveals a very confident, self-assured young lady. I think she'll be writing letters to you soon, Barbara:)) Debbie

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2023


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Comment from Wendy G
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What a lovely story! She's a sweet, capable and confident little girl, and I am sure she will achieve whatever she sets her heart on doing. So is she Charlotte or Charolette? I had thought the former from other letters. Beautifully written.
Wendy

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
    Thank you for the support. For some reason, I always mess up her name, it's Charlotte. GRRR. Fingers for some reason mess it up. It happens all the time. I've made the corrections.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
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Such a fine write you have here. Nothing could be more loving and more beautiful Then a small child and grandmother together. It's obvious there is great love there. As I see, your patience and willingness to spend time and do things with her.
I see no issues with grammar aesthetics sentence structure or subject matter. I find submission and wish you best luck have an awesome evening!

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2023


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Comment from LJbutterfly
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This is the first letter I've read, and I think this is a brilliant idea. When the girls are older, they will cherish your writing. Charolette might not remember she said she would let you know what animals she wanted to help. When she's older, she will appreciate reading your letters. They are like written photographs.

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Comment from judiverse
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This is charming. The five-year-old is considering all her options. I loved her answer when you asked her about what animals she wanted to help. She realizes you can't hold her to what she says at age five. It's interesting that she's so intent at studying whatever she's found in the microscope. Cute picture. This is an excellent series, and I know it'll be enjoyed in the future. judi

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2023


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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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This is nice that you are writing these for your family.
You might not think it now, but they will appreciate it later. What we always have had we tend to take for granted. You may have already done this, but you want to dedicate your books to each one in turn.
Karen

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
    I will have an individual for each child, and they'll be different, because each of these young girls are different.
reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 13-Oct-2023
    You misunderstood, I mean the other books you write, dedicate a book apiece to your grandkids.
Comment from Paul McFarland
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That is a great picture, Barb. Nice piece. I did spot a couple of things you might want to change. In line twelve, there should not be " 's ". In line nineteen "me" should be "I".

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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
    I think I've made the corrections. I'm not sure I found the 's. If it's the one I found, I believe it should be there, because the sister owns the antics. Thank you for the kind support. I appreciate all help.
reply by Paul McFarland on 13-Oct-2023
    You had written "patience's", but I see that it is correct now.
Comment from damommy
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What a fantastic little girl! I can see how intelligent she is. She will follow her dreams and be very successful at whatever she does. I wish her all the best.

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Comment from royowen
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The one thing about kids, if they have no fear of you and trust you they will never lie, Jesus said, Such is the kingdom of Heaven. I love children so much, I play the worship songs and sing them to the 3-7 year olds, bless them Barbara, beautifully written, what a bright little poppet she is. Well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 13-Oct-2023


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    Thank you for the kind support.
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    Most welcome Barbara
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
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Last sentence in first paragraph: look at "patience's"

In the next paragraph, I would put a period after "when you got older", and change last quote to "I want TO help animals". You do it again in Charlotte's next sentence, so maybe you are trying to mimic the way she talks?

Her response to you was precious (geez, Grandma, she's only five, lol!). I think she's going to be just find when she grows up.

That picture is so cute - a researcher for sure:-)

Thanks for sharing your grandchildren with us.

xo
Pam




 Comment Written 13-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
    I appreciate the help and made the corrections. Thank you for the support.