Ancient Art of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "I Am, You Are"A compilation of poems
35 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
A very clever poem, carefully blended that tugs at the senses of the reader. I particularly liked the words:
[you are] the tease of time's cryptic temper
a wonderful image. kay
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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A very clever poem, carefully blended that tugs at the senses of the reader. I particularly liked the words:
[you are] the tease of time's cryptic temper
a wonderful image. kay
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Thank you Kay! i'm so glad you liked it! For your kind review and your insight I am always grateful. I hope your day is the best!
Comment from shelley kaye
wow this was great - i love how you compared yourself to the fall and your love to the winter... coming together in the spring... for a new summer...
one suggestion: maybe try the black background and a whitish font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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wow this was great - i love how you compared yourself to the fall and your love to the winter... coming together in the spring... for a new summer...
one suggestion: maybe try the black background and a whitish font? just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2023
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Thank you Shirley I will great idea I thank you for your awesome review. I'm so glad you liked it. I hope you have a great day and thanks again for your time!
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fyi - you need to check the font colour - it's black on black
just wanted to let you know
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Ok ty!
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Beautiful poem and excellent use of metaphor. The describe words were colorful and set a picture in my mind as I read. The image and words matched, perfectly. :))
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Beautiful poem and excellent use of metaphor. The describe words were colorful and set a picture in my mind as I read. The image and words matched, perfectly. :))
Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Thank you again! So pleased you like it! I am humbled. For your time and kind words are always welcome! Thx again!
Comment from lyenochka
At first, I wondered if this was about two different people and the differences of their personalities. But it does also fit your description about those transitional times between seasons which are neither one nor the other. My favorite line was "We are wakers and sleepers of the in-between."
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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At first, I wondered if this was about two different people and the differences of their personalities. But it does also fit your description about those transitional times between seasons which are neither one nor the other. My favorite line was "We are wakers and sleepers of the in-between."
Comment Written 09-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2023
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Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! For your time,, review and kind comments, I thank you! Have a great night!
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your poetic use of words arranged to form dynamic images makes your free form poetry flow as easily as rhymed verses. I especially like your use of I, You, and We. "We are the bridge of blended suns rising." Beautiful. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Your poetic use of words arranged to form dynamic images makes your free form poetry flow as easily as rhymed verses. I especially like your use of I, You, and We. "We are the bridge of blended suns rising." Beautiful. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Oh wow thank you so much again very kind of you to say. I understand it's a very happy for your review and for your time and your insight thank you again. Have a no some day!
Comment from James Etheridge1
I love the transition of the seasons. Living in North Georgia, we are fortunate to experience all four seasons. As a young man, I hated the winter. I longed for the coming spring and summer. And, though I loved fall, the thought of the coming winter was always in the back of my mind. Over time that has all changed. I love all of the seasons and have even learned to embrace the beauty of the dead of winter. I have learned that at this stage of life, each new season is a gift. Great work! - J.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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I love the transition of the seasons. Living in North Georgia, we are fortunate to experience all four seasons. As a young man, I hated the winter. I longed for the coming spring and summer. And, though I loved fall, the thought of the coming winter was always in the back of my mind. Over time that has all changed. I love all of the seasons and have even learned to embrace the beauty of the dead of winter. I have learned that at this stage of life, each new season is a gift. Great work! - J.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your review for your kind comments. I really appreciate it I also thank you so much for your time for your wonderful review. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem I hope you have an awesome day thanks again!
Comment from Julie Lau
Congratulations, Lea, on a beautiful poem about the seasons. If you are interested in correcting a couple of little points in punctuation, here they are:
1) add a hyphen to in-between
2) an apostrophe to time's cryptic temper.
All the best in the contest, Julie L
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Congratulations, Lea, on a beautiful poem about the seasons. If you are interested in correcting a couple of little points in punctuation, here they are:
1) add a hyphen to in-between
2) an apostrophe to time's cryptic temper.
All the best in the contest, Julie L
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you Julie! Completely interested! I'm glad you like it! Thank you for your review and time! Have a great day!
Comment from Sarah Das Gupta
Great picture which illustrates the text very well! The free verse works well here. You have achieved a lyrical rhythmic quality. You just need to check the apostrophes as in 'winter's'.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Great picture which illustrates the text very well! The free verse works well here. You have achieved a lyrical rhythmic quality. You just need to check the apostrophes as in 'winter's'.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Hi Sarah thabk you I will and thank you for your kind review! Your comments, time and insight all welcome here ty!
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All best wishes!
Comment from Ginda Simpson
This poem is lyrical in nature, rich in imagery. It reads like a hymn to the changing season. Beautiful. If I may suggest you change the background color to something light, for ease on the eyes. It is difficult to read as is, and may cause readers to skip reviewing. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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This poem is lyrical in nature, rich in imagery. It reads like a hymn to the changing season. Beautiful. If I may suggest you change the background color to something light, for ease on the eyes. It is difficult to read as is, and may cause readers to skip reviewing. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2023
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Thank you Ginda, I will do so. Thank you so much for your kind review. I'm greatly appreciate it and for your comments. I take them all with the greatest respect and are welcome here and I thank you for that dude. I'll go ahead and make that change. I hope you have a great day
Comment from sunnilicious
Plenty analogies for one poem. Well thought out. Clearly written. Many nice visual imageries created. You have many alliterations. These two stood out to me: silent-shriek and silver-scent. I'm thinking melting metals or a December candle in birch or something.
Alright, good work :)
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Plenty analogies for one poem. Well thought out. Clearly written. Many nice visual imageries created. You have many alliterations. These two stood out to me: silent-shriek and silver-scent. I'm thinking melting metals or a December candle in birch or something.
Alright, good work :)
Comment Written 06-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for your Review and your time and your kind comments! I appreciate all of it. The melting silver scent would be the snow melting away to create a change in seasons. I'm very glad you like it. I appreciate your time as well. Thank you so much again have a great night!
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Thank you so much for your Review and your time and your kind comments! I appreciate all of it. The melting silver scent would be the snow melting away to create a change in seasons. I'm very glad you like it. I appreciate your time as well. Thank you so much again have a great night!
