The Pier
The Pier holds so many memories.29 total reviews
Comment from JT traveller
A truly enjoyable read. You certainly have a gift for free verse poetry. You breathed life into an inanimate object and described it's character.
Cleverly composed. Compelling.
Congratulations on your fiftieth post. Keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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A truly enjoyable read. You certainly have a gift for free verse poetry. You breathed life into an inanimate object and described it's character.
Cleverly composed. Compelling.
Congratulations on your fiftieth post. Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you liked it and I note you have come a fan. Much appreciated and I hope I can provide a few more enjoyable poems and short stories. I will make sure I visit your profile and your writings.
Keep well and I hope your travels provide some wonderful material for your future works.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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Thankyou Barry for your kind words. Jacqueline
Comment from jake cosmos aller
A powerful and moving poem about the ravages of time and how nothing can withstand the passage of time. Time wears everything down, including an ancient pier.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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A powerful and moving poem about the ravages of time and how nothing can withstand the passage of time. Time wears everything down, including an ancient pier.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Jake,
Thanks very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. I am glad you enjoyed it. Yes time does hold the whip hand so to speak. We should all enjoy our time as much as we can.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Barry Penfold.
Comment from jacquelyn popp
Congratulations on your milestone post. Very nice poem and well written. Good rhyming pattern though yout poem. I enjoyed reading it. Nice pit of I go with your poem. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Congratulations on your milestone post. Very nice poem and well written. Good rhyming pattern though yout poem. I enjoyed reading it. Nice pit of I go with your poem. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Jacquelyn,
Yes 50 posts is a bit surprising. Never thought I would have enough material to pump that many posts out of me. Still it has been an enjoyable ride. Thanks also for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it.
Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem about The sea and piers. Good entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. The rhymes and meter are not forced and they flow well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Excellent poem about The sea and piers. Good entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. The rhymes and meter are not forced and they flow well.
the structure makes sense, it draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it . Piers actually havce a fascinating mini eco-system surrounding them.
Take care and have a great day.
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought the pier to life here with your well chosen words and memories from long ago. I loved your descriptions, the voices and the ghosts, the incessant tide and how the pier can sometimes be a lonely place. You left me with thought of this manmade structure at the seaside that we love to walk on and point to ships and then leave it to its fate out to sea as the waves come crashing. I enjoyed the ride here, good rhymes, a slightly uneven metre in places, but a very enjoyable write, you have a repeated word (with) in the penultimate stanza, congratulations on your 50th post Barry, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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You brought the pier to life here with your well chosen words and memories from long ago. I loved your descriptions, the voices and the ghosts, the incessant tide and how the pier can sometimes be a lonely place. You left me with thought of this manmade structure at the seaside that we love to walk on and point to ships and then leave it to its fate out to sea as the waves come crashing. I enjoyed the ride here, good rhymes, a slightly uneven metre in places, but a very enjoyable write, you have a repeated word (with) in the penultimate stanza, congratulations on your 50th post Barry, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Thanks Dolly. Quite surprised myself getting to the 50. Looks like I have to aim for the big 100 now. Thanks also for picking out the repeated word. Now rectified.
Piers create there own mini ecosystem . To me they are fascinating structures.
Take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from RodG
Barry, congrats on your milestone! I really like this eulogy to the Pier. You make us see it--both now and then. And you evoke pathos for the Speaker who obviously misses it as it symbolizes his youth. One slight flaw: Omit a WITH iin stanza six. Rod
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Barry, congrats on your milestone! I really like this eulogy to the Pier. You make us see it--both now and then. And you evoke pathos for the Speaker who obviously misses it as it symbolizes his youth. One slight flaw: Omit a WITH iin stanza six. Rod
Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Thanks Rod. Didn't think I had 50 posts in me. Now I will have to set my sights on the big 100. Thanks also for picking up the repeated word. Now rectified. Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
Beautiful flow and rhythm.
Not just a poem, but a story as well.
And yes, it does have tales to tell, I think you saw them in its weathered structure.
I especially liked the line, "of countless voices echoing in the pavilion stark and bare."
Wonderful job.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Beautiful flow and rhythm.
Not just a poem, but a story as well.
And yes, it does have tales to tell, I think you saw them in its weathered structure.
I especially liked the line, "of countless voices echoing in the pavilion stark and bare."
Wonderful job.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Rebecca,
Thanks for the six stars. I am always blown away if I receive them. Glad you liked the poem. In fact, it is personally one of my favourites.
Piers, wherever they are, always have their own eco systems which includes the humans who use them.
Take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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It is exciting to get that 6th star!
Comment from Paul McFarland
Congratulations on your fiftieth post, Barry. This is a sad poem. Many of the older structures, up and down the coast, are going to fall prey to the rising water level in the oceans.
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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Congratulations on your fiftieth post, Barry. This is a sad poem. Many of the older structures, up and down the coast, are going to fall prey to the rising water level in the oceans.
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Thanks Paul. Never thought I had 50 posts in me. Now I will have to aim for the big 100. Great that you found the poem to your liking, although sad.
Yes rising sea levels will eventually grab most of them but while they are there I hope people can enjoy them.
I trust you are well. Take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Very nice poem! Rhyming, cadence and flow spot on! A special conglomerant of words which speaks of aging and times past. The natural decay that occurs with age living or otherwise shown in decrepit
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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Very nice poem! Rhyming, cadence and flow spot on! A special conglomerant of words which speaks of aging and times past. The natural decay that occurs with age living or otherwise shown in decrepit
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Lea,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it . Piers create their own eco systems and they are one of my favourite structures.
Please take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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Excellent work nice to know other people are paying attention to our world and surroundings!
