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Comment from Paul McFarland
That's a great dialogue piece, Wendy. I did see that one coming. Usually I don't, but it didn't take away the message. Do not judge, but if you do, make sure you know all the facts.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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That's a great dialogue piece, Wendy. I did see that one coming. Usually I don't, but it didn't take away the message. Do not judge, but if you do, make sure you know all the facts.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thanks Paul. Glad you liked it - but I?m disappointed with my writing that you saw the ending before the end. Lol.
Wendy
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I might not have seen it if had been written by someone else. I think I'm getting to know you.
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Yes, true. Let?s hope the voting committee doesn?t know me!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Somehow or another I had the ending figured out (somewhat) within the first few lines, though I did think the other man was the father. I suspect this happens in real life regularly.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Somehow or another I had the ending figured out (somewhat) within the first few lines, though I did think the other man was the father. I suspect this happens in real life regularly.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Ah, then you didn?t quite have the ending figured. Lol. Thanks for reviewing, Tom. I appreciate it.
Wendy
Comment from Karyn2
Nice one Wendy! How easily this sort of thing can happen in any setting and yet well meaning people particularly in church settings are notorious for jumping the gun without all the facts!! A funny read and excellent situation for the dialogue contest!!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Nice one Wendy! How easily this sort of thing can happen in any setting and yet well meaning people particularly in church settings are notorious for jumping the gun without all the facts!! A funny read and excellent situation for the dialogue contest!!
Comment Written 28-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much Karyn! Yes, we all need to be very careful not to make assumptions or judgments. I appreciate your review.
Wendy
Comment from jmdg1954
Good story.
Looks to be a simple open and shut case of Suzy jumping to conclusions before knowing all the facts.
Nicely crafted for a dialogue only entry. You created it easy to follow.
Best of luck in the contest.
John
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Good story.
Looks to be a simple open and shut case of Suzy jumping to conclusions before knowing all the facts.
Nicely crafted for a dialogue only entry. You created it easy to follow.
Best of luck in the contest.
John
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thank you John! A super review, and I am glad you enjoyed the story. Thanks too for the good wishes.
Wendy
Comment from Spitfire
What a surprise ending! You had me going there with this sharp dialogue of an observant wife telling his husband, the pastor, what she suspects. I'm glad he set her straight. Great entry. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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What a surprise ending! You had me going there with this sharp dialogue of an observant wife telling his husband, the pastor, what she suspects. I'm glad he set her straight. Great entry. Best of luck.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thank you very much - I am glad you enjoyed it and got the surprise only at the very end. Thanks too for your good wishes, always appreciated.
Wendy
Comment from GWHARGIS
Hahaha. That is funny. Someone told my oldest son that I was a cougar coming to see him at work. He laughed so hard and said " dude, that's my mom." People do make all kinds of assumptions. Sometimes fiction is better than the truth it seems. Great dialogue only story. Gretchen
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Hahaha. That is funny. Someone told my oldest son that I was a cougar coming to see him at work. He laughed so hard and said " dude, that's my mom." People do make all kinds of assumptions. Sometimes fiction is better than the truth it seems. Great dialogue only story. Gretchen
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Yes, people jump to conclusions too quickly. My son always loved babies, always wanted to be a Dad, and adored his nephew. He now has three darling girls. Thanks for a super review, much appreciated.
Love your story too!
Wendy
Comment from lyenochka
I recognized Bella's name and immediately knew you were talking about her closeness to her brother. I'm sorry that the pastor's wife would think such a terrible thing about Bella! I'm glad she was set straight.
Great job with your dialogue-only story and you kept the suspense up until the final revelation at the end! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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I recognized Bella's name and immediately knew you were talking about her closeness to her brother. I'm sorry that the pastor's wife would think such a terrible thing about Bella! I'm glad she was set straight.
Great job with your dialogue-only story and you kept the suspense up until the final revelation at the end! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2022
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Thanks Helen, for your astute review. I have changed her name to Isabella, in case anyone else guesses before the end of the story. (And of course Bella is not my daughter?s real name, but I do use it for her in stories, because it gives her privacy, and I just do like the name.) They all now have a good laugh about it, and are great friends, but the pastor?s wife is still embarrassed about her assumption. My daughter said the other day that she was still shocked that anyone would think that of her!
Wendy
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I'm glad to hear that they are friends now. Great story to do in just dialogue!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I wondered where this story was going, Wendy. Sometimes, as in this story, the whole picture is not always obvious. You told the story well through dialogue, and it was a realistic conversation. Good luck in the contest. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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I wondered where this story was going, Wendy. Sometimes, as in this story, the whole picture is not always obvious. You told the story well through dialogue, and it was a realistic conversation. Good luck in the contest. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much Valda. I am glad the dialogue worked and waa realistic. I appreciate your kind review and good wishes.
Wendy
Comment from Zinnia48
Fun read! You had me hooked until the very end. I didn't know where you were going, and had to laugh when we got there. The dialogue pulled me along. Thank you! Zinnia
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Fun read! You had me hooked until the very end. I didn't know where you were going, and had to laugh when we got there. The dialogue pulled me along. Thank you! Zinnia
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thank you Zinnia, a super review, and I am glad you enjoyed it. They all became great friends and laughed about it later.
Wendy
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well then. There you go! Everything is not always as it appears.
Stick 'that' in your pipe and smoke it.
Nicely written. Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Well then. There you go! Everything is not always as it appears.
Stick 'that' in your pipe and smoke it.
Nicely written. Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2022
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Thanks Wayne. Great review. They all became great friends, and laughed about it later.
Wendy
