The Return
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Comment from Shirley McLain
Love this story, and it keeps me transfixed all the way to the last word. It sounds like she might have a problem with him realizing that she's not who she says she is. Great job. Happy Easter and enjoy the rest of your day. Shirley
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Love this story, and it keeps me transfixed all the way to the last word. It sounds like she might have a problem with him realizing that she's not who she says she is. Great job. Happy Easter and enjoy the rest of your day. Shirley
Comment Written 17-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Thanks, Shirley! I'm delighted you enjoyed this part. It will be interesting to see if he does guess, but he's forgotten about his time in the future, so we'll have to see how Margot handles it. Thanks so much for the sixth star, my friend. I hope you'll be posting soon. Warm hugs, Sandra xxx
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Just posted :)
Comment from Judy Lawless
You keep the excitement so real, Sandra. You've done an excellent job of showing Margot's feelings and making us feel her yearnings for Miles. I like the three-ring description too. Can't wait for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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You keep the excitement so real, Sandra. You've done an excellent job of showing Margot's feelings and making us feel her yearnings for Miles. I like the three-ring description too. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Judy for this really lovely review! I'm glad you liked the ring description, I didn't know about the three ring custom. It's interesting what we learn on Google. Thank you so much for the golden sixth star as well! I really appreciated both. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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You?re most welcome, Sandra, I really enjoy reading this story.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed another chapter as it was equally well written. I respond positively to the descriptive adjectives used throughout, really paints a picture and kept me engaged throughout. I appreciate the posting of the end of Chapter 15.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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I enjoyed another chapter as it was equally well written. I respond positively to the descriptive adjectives used throughout, really paints a picture and kept me engaged throughout. I appreciate the posting of the end of Chapter 15.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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What a lovely review, Kitty, I'm so pleased you are still enjoying my story. I hope you had a lovely Easter? Warm hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Annette R.
Well that last line will certainly keep the reader waiting for chapter 17. Great idea to begin with last of chapter 15. I would like to see a larger font. Margot has a challenge coming but the reader is more interested in what happened to Meg and Lord Brandon.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Well that last line will certainly keep the reader waiting for chapter 17. Great idea to begin with last of chapter 15. I would like to see a larger font. Margot has a challenge coming but the reader is more interested in what happened to Meg and Lord Brandon.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Thank you for reading this part, Annette, and your lovely review. I'm so pleased you are enjoying the story. Warm hugs. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Cindy Warren
I think Margot is going to have a hard time giving up Miles and returning to her own time. She's as much in love with him as Meg is. How could she not be? In a way, they're the same person.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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I think Margot is going to have a hard time giving up Miles and returning to her own time. She's as much in love with him as Meg is. How could she not be? In a way, they're the same person.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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It will be hard when it comes to it. Margot really has it bad for Miles, and yes, you're right, they are the same people, but from different times. Margot really does have a problem. Thank you so much, Cindy, for this lovely review. I'm so pleased you are still enjoying the story. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A very good chapter, Sandra, that gives insight into the complicated arrangement of Margot being Meg.
-I didn't stop to think about that side of it until this chapter.
-It is a good thing she has Bessie to help her along and give her confidence.
-It has to be awkward knowing you are from a different time period, and are not really the one that was intended for Miles.
-You do a good job of showing that without telling it.
-It is an intimate scene that two people in love would share, but Margot knows she is not really the intended.
-The love that Miles has for his Meg is done well, and he isn't going to let anything interfere with it.
-The scene with the ring was lovely, and the ring sounds stunning.
-Bessie gives good advice at the end about Margot needing to be strong,
but it is understandable, it is also awkward for her, and her thoughts reveal that at the end.
-Very well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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-A very good chapter, Sandra, that gives insight into the complicated arrangement of Margot being Meg.
-I didn't stop to think about that side of it until this chapter.
-It is a good thing she has Bessie to help her along and give her confidence.
-It has to be awkward knowing you are from a different time period, and are not really the one that was intended for Miles.
-You do a good job of showing that without telling it.
-It is an intimate scene that two people in love would share, but Margot knows she is not really the intended.
-The love that Miles has for his Meg is done well, and he isn't going to let anything interfere with it.
-The scene with the ring was lovely, and the ring sounds stunning.
-Bessie gives good advice at the end about Margot needing to be strong,
but it is understandable, it is also awkward for her, and her thoughts reveal that at the end.
-Very well done, my friend.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Thank you so very much, Pam. You've made my day saying I did a good job of showing and not telling!! I checked out the rings on Google, this was one way that a proposal was done, I didn't know that. Mills and Boon don't mention it! Lol. It was quite interesting. Thank you, also, for this golden sixth star, Pam. I loved both review and stars! Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Sandra. I am glad you appreciated my observation. Thanks for sharing about the proposal. I'll have to look up Mills and Boon!
Comment from Ulla
Hi Sandra, this just so intriguing, and I can hardly wait to reading on.
I can certainly understand Margot's trepidation about what is going to happen next.
Will she be able to go through with it, as she's in great danger to lose her heart to the dashing Miles? I love this story. A big hug, Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Hi Sandra, this just so intriguing, and I can hardly wait to reading on.
I can certainly understand Margot's trepidation about what is going to happen next.
Will she be able to go through with it, as she's in great danger to lose her heart to the dashing Miles? I love this story. A big hug, Ulla xxx
Comment Written 17-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Thanks so much, Ulla, for this lovely review and the golden stars! I wouldn't want to be in Margot's shoes, not being in love with a man who loves someone else. This will get harder and harder for her. Have a wonderful Easter, my friend. Love and hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from nancy_e_davis
It's a shame Margot has to struggle with
her own feelings for Miles as she is trying
to help the couple be together again.
It is apparent that Miles loves Meg deeply.
Well done, Sandra. xxx Nancy:)
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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It's a shame Margot has to struggle with
her own feelings for Miles as she is trying
to help the couple be together again.
It is apparent that Miles loves Meg deeply.
Well done, Sandra. xxx Nancy:)
Comment Written 17-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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I know, Margot will be broken hearted when she has to leave Miles. But that is how it must be. She must be very strong in the next chapters. Thank you so very much for the gold sixth star, dear Nancy, and the lovely review.
I hope you are having a lovely Easter with all your family. Graham is still covid positive but I'm negative now, thank goodness. But my word, I'm tired! Love and hugs, my friend. Sandra xxx
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So happy to know you are better. It is rough. I feel the effects of it even now many months later. I am older though and now the Dr. thinks I have a cancer on my lip from a fever blister when I had the virus. I had a biopsy Thursday. No news yet. Happy Easter dear. I pray Graham will recover soon. Hugs Nancy:)
Comment from Begin Again
HAPPY EASTER filled with all God's wonderful blessings, my dear friend.
I send all my love and a basket filled with hugs and kisses.
Of course, this chapter is absolutely wonderful and the story gets better and better all the time. I love it!
Hope your day is a special one.....
Always, Carol
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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HAPPY EASTER filled with all God's wonderful blessings, my dear friend.
I send all my love and a basket filled with hugs and kisses.
Of course, this chapter is absolutely wonderful and the story gets better and better all the time. I love it!
Hope your day is a special one.....
Always, Carol
Comment Written 17-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Carol! Happy Easter to you, too! I hope it will be, how are you?
I'm so pleased you enjoyed this chapter, we are now getting into the area that Margot is dreading, but looking forward to as well. Thank you for the golden nugget dear friend! Love you lots, Sandra xx
Comment from Everleigh L.
I like this style of language. lot of feeling and emotional expression. The dialog make the scene vivid, like beside me. It is full of mystical passion. I can't wait to read more.
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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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I like this style of language. lot of feeling and emotional expression. The dialog make the scene vivid, like beside me. It is full of mystical passion. I can't wait to read more.
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Comment Written 17-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Everleigh, and welcome to Fanstory. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this chapter and look forward to reading your work. Warm hugs, Sandra xx