Tyrannical time
A pantoum poem.39 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
I have never tried to do anything in this form, but you have done it well, and somehow it seems to suit your theme, with the questions about time's tyranny. Well written, it's an interesting and thoughtful one.
Wendy
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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I have never tried to do anything in this form, but you have done it well, and somehow it seems to suit your theme, with the questions about time's tyranny. Well written, it's an interesting and thoughtful one.
Wendy
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks Wendy, for these wonderful comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from karenina
One of my very favorite forms! (Though I can attribute many a grey hair to getting the lines just right.) You've stotched this rhyme scheme with the skill of a poet tailor!! Seamless and eloquent!
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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One of my very favorite forms! (Though I can attribute many a grey hair to getting the lines just right.) You've stotched this rhyme scheme with the skill of a poet tailor!! Seamless and eloquent!
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Karen, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
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Blessings!
Comment from Heather Burroughs
This is an incredible poem. I've never tried to write one like this but may give it a whirl. You did a wonderful job!
Thank you for sharing. Many blessings to you.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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This is an incredible poem. I've never tried to write one like this but may give it a whirl. You did a wonderful job!
Thank you for sharing. Many blessings to you.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Heather, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from Dawn Munro
Well, Roy, I am floored. I didn't think you could replace some of my favorite poems of yours, but you have done it. This is sublime, and asks a question I'm sure many people are asking... And yet, you do not name names, so I'll just apply it to more than one tyrant (sadly).
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Well, Roy, I am floored. I didn't think you could replace some of my favorite poems of yours, but you have done it. This is sublime, and asks a question I'm sure many people are asking... And yet, you do not name names, so I'll just apply it to more than one tyrant (sadly).
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Dawn, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from sue133
Gosh, I have not heard of this poetry style but you certainly pull it off. Your poem is so clever with excellent imagery. It flowed beautifully. Time...one of those 'pernicious' things, as you point out, which has been written about forever but never solved.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Gosh, I have not heard of this poetry style but you certainly pull it off. Your poem is so clever with excellent imagery. It flowed beautifully. Time...one of those 'pernicious' things, as you point out, which has been written about forever but never solved.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Sue, for these excellent comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from lyenochka
Well said in your pantoum, Roy! This is a form I avoid but you used it well to meditate on the effects of time on us mortal beings. But praise to the Lord for conquering all sin, and death, and time's effects for us!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Well said in your pantoum, Roy! This is a form I avoid but you used it well to meditate on the effects of time on us mortal beings. But praise to the Lord for conquering all sin, and death, and time's effects for us!
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Helen, for these fantastic comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Why? Because man is greedy and only sees what he wants to see. You did a great job with your pantoum--not an easy style to write using its rules. Your words flow smoothly with true meaning and great imagery. Your words are well thought out and express your thoughts and feelings well on this subject.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Why? Because man is greedy and only sees what he wants to see. You did a great job with your pantoum--not an easy style to write using its rules. Your words flow smoothly with true meaning and great imagery. Your words are well thought out and express your thoughts and feelings well on this subject.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Jan, for these fantastic comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from Janet Foor
You do an amazing job writing poems with repeating lines and this pantoum poem is no exception.
The repeating lines make perfect sense and you also have a powerful message. Excellent artwork to compliment your work. Well done my friend.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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You do an amazing job writing poems with repeating lines and this pantoum poem is no exception.
The repeating lines make perfect sense and you also have a powerful message. Excellent artwork to compliment your work. Well done my friend.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Janet, for these fantastic comments and a super review, blessings Roy
Comment from aryr
This was an amazing Pantoum, Roy. The picture of the open book which blended into the sea scape was fantastic. I really enjoyed your words because they ask so many questions, valid questions. Very well done, greatly enjoyed. Blessings.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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This was an amazing Pantoum, Roy. The picture of the open book which blended into the sea scape was fantastic. I really enjoyed your words because they ask so many questions, valid questions. Very well done, greatly enjoyed. Blessings.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Alie, for these fantastic comments and a super review, blessings Roy
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You are so welcome, Roy, blessings.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Your poem is fantastic. I love the change between hard and soft sounds that creates an impression of altered speeds of the movement of time (I'm very sensitive to imagery of boredom where time drags and excessive demands where it races). Where I had problems was with the explanation - it's a horrifically complex poem to construct it seems to me! (but I will try one day)
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Your poem is fantastic. I love the change between hard and soft sounds that creates an impression of altered speeds of the movement of time (I'm very sensitive to imagery of boredom where time drags and excessive demands where it races). Where I had problems was with the explanation - it's a horrifically complex poem to construct it seems to me! (but I will try one day)
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much Kate, for these fantastic comments and a super review, blessings Roy
