Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 60 "Football Chapter 32 part 2"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Sankey
Once again, an excellent, emotional, serious, deep chapter in so many ways. You still have us all on board, holding our interest, definitely. Keep up the good work. No spags.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Once again, an excellent, emotional, serious, deep chapter in so many ways. You still have us all on board, holding our interest, definitely. Keep up the good work. No spags.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
A well written chapter. Everything is in keeping with what you've established before. You are going step by step with the lawyer and you are keeping Gabe's and Kate's relationship at a safe PG level. You've done to show Gabe's love for Kate.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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A well written chapter. Everything is in keeping with what you've established before. You are going step by step with the lawyer and you are keeping Gabe's and Kate's relationship at a safe PG level. You've done to show Gabe's love for Kate.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Your story is moving along very well, and I admire you for writing even with the problem with your wrist. Sounds like all the characters in your story are strong and resilient. Keep the chapters coming.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Your story is moving along very well, and I admire you for writing even with the problem with your wrist. Sounds like all the characters in your story are strong and resilient. Keep the chapters coming.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome
Comment from royowen
This was a fantastic post, their lawyer, Troy, is seeing all the qualities that both Gabriel and Katherine have, and their "togetherness" and perspicacity they posses, he thinks he's got a good case. Things are coming together very well. Footnote: I discovered after I had a procedure done on my leg, I didn't heal as well as when I was young, but I still healed, and well, don't worry. Blessings Roy
Typo ; Crisis (diverted) averted? 2: I think that's my (clue) to leave. Cue?
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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This was a fantastic post, their lawyer, Troy, is seeing all the qualities that both Gabriel and Katherine have, and their "togetherness" and perspicacity they posses, he thinks he's got a good case. Things are coming together very well. Footnote: I discovered after I had a procedure done on my leg, I didn't heal as well as when I was young, but I still healed, and well, don't worry. Blessings Roy
Typo ; Crisis (diverted) averted? 2: I think that's my (clue) to leave. Cue?
Comment Written 07-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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I made the changes. Thank you. I know this old body doesn't heal as well as it used to. I'm tired of not being able to do simple things. It's really starting to get me down.
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You?ll get better.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this was another lovely chapter and finally their love is out in the open. I found a couple of things
we won't and we now he's there." = we won't and we know he's there
"Yes. I'll continue with Mrs. Riley returns." = "Yes. I'll continue when Mrs. Riley returns."
Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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Hi Barbara, this was another lovely chapter and finally their love is out in the open. I found a couple of things
we won't and we now he's there." = we won't and we know he's there
"Yes. I'll continue with Mrs. Riley returns." = "Yes. I'll continue when Mrs. Riley returns."
Ulla:)))
Comment Written 07-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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I have fixed both of those mistakes. Thank you.
Comment from judiverse
Sounds like things are getting wrapped up, if Katherine gets through the custody battle. It looks like she shouldn't have any difficulty winning, but the in-laws may have a surprise in store. Troy quizzes Katherine about what happens with the boys if she is at work or for some reason can't get home. She has great answers for that, and I'm sure that's what will come up at the hearing. Great characterization in this. I'm curious as to how the in-laws will respond at the hearing. You give us a sense of how Katherine's feeling about all she's been going through. judi
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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Sounds like things are getting wrapped up, if Katherine gets through the custody battle. It looks like she shouldn't have any difficulty winning, but the in-laws may have a surprise in store. Troy quizzes Katherine about what happens with the boys if she is at work or for some reason can't get home. She has great answers for that, and I'm sure that's what will come up at the hearing. Great characterization in this. I'm curious as to how the in-laws will respond at the hearing. You give us a sense of how Katherine's feeling about all she's been going through. judi
Comment Written 07-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from nomi338
I absolutely love the way you expose and deal with the vulnerability of Gabriel and Katherine. These two main characters come across as fully fleshed out human beings. They have their weaknesses, their doubts and their strengths as well. This makes them characters that readers can relate to and care about. Great job of writing.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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I absolutely love the way you expose and deal with the vulnerability of Gabriel and Katherine. These two main characters come across as fully fleshed out human beings. They have their weaknesses, their doubts and their strengths as well. This makes them characters that readers can relate to and care about. Great job of writing.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Romance Fiction, Football Chapter 32, Part 2, in the book Football - A Novel, speaks Troy Elder meets with the family; well said, well done; thanks for sharing, happy reviewing this; God Bless You, my good writer, post more, fast for precious time, dear, Worship Month November. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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This Romance Fiction, Football Chapter 32, Part 2, in the book Football - A Novel, speaks Troy Elder meets with the family; well said, well done; thanks for sharing, happy reviewing this; God Bless You, my good writer, post more, fast for precious time, dear, Worship Month November. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 07-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wonderful. Impeccably credible in all respects!
If we haven't done anything immoral by now, we won't and we [now=>KNOW] he's there."
"Yes. I'll continue [with=>WHEN] Mrs. Riley returns."
I wish I [would've=>HAD] known. I could've prepared."
After all of this is settled, I'll need time to [breath=>BREATHE].
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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Wonderful. Impeccably credible in all respects!
If we haven't done anything immoral by now, we won't and we [now=>KNOW] he's there."
"Yes. I'll continue [with=>WHEN] Mrs. Riley returns."
I wish I [would've=>HAD] known. I could've prepared."
After all of this is settled, I'll need time to [breath=>BREATHE].
Comment Written 07-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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I have made the corrections, thank you, dear friend. Continuing to pray!!!
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Thank you! How are YOU?
Comment from robyn corum
Barb,
Nice job. I like this proactive attitude. It does no good to sit back and allow the Rileys to run roughshod over them - and it also probably makes them feel like they have a bit more power when they are taking actions to take their lives back. Let's hope this works!
This was well-written and realistic. Unfotunately, I can tell that wrist is still giving you a hard time - the following nits are MOST unlike you!
Notes:
1.) If we haven't done anything immoral by now, we won't and we (k)now he's there."
--> but it would also be important to note that you didn't even arrive HOME until late, too. It's not like you were home all that time.
2.) "Yes. I'll continue (when) Mrs. Riley returns."
3.) When she returned, she opened her planner and wrote it.
--> and added the info. Something more there.
4.) "Coach, can Reggie and I go outside(?)"
5.) they'll have to pay all court cost(s), my fee,
6.) I think we can prove, for example(,) that P.I. watching the
7.) Within in minutes, the boys and Gabriel returned as he said,
--> delete 'in'
8.) As long (as) I know you love me, I'll give you as much time as you need."
Due to the extenuating circumstances, I certainly will not deduct stars! *smile* Great job - Thanks!
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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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Barb,
Nice job. I like this proactive attitude. It does no good to sit back and allow the Rileys to run roughshod over them - and it also probably makes them feel like they have a bit more power when they are taking actions to take their lives back. Let's hope this works!
This was well-written and realistic. Unfotunately, I can tell that wrist is still giving you a hard time - the following nits are MOST unlike you!
Notes:
1.) If we haven't done anything immoral by now, we won't and we (k)now he's there."
--> but it would also be important to note that you didn't even arrive HOME until late, too. It's not like you were home all that time.
2.) "Yes. I'll continue (when) Mrs. Riley returns."
3.) When she returned, she opened her planner and wrote it.
--> and added the info. Something more there.
4.) "Coach, can Reggie and I go outside(?)"
5.) they'll have to pay all court cost(s), my fee,
6.) I think we can prove, for example(,) that P.I. watching the
7.) Within in minutes, the boys and Gabriel returned as he said,
--> delete 'in'
8.) As long (as) I know you love me, I'll give you as much time as you need."
Due to the extenuating circumstances, I certainly will not deduct stars! *smile* Great job - Thanks!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2021
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I have mad every correction. This is embarrassing.