Comment from tfawcus

Exceptional

A play in which the stage directions are as poetic as the words of the actors. An absolute treat. Invidious to pick and peck at parts of this splendid whole, but to 'drone a humdrum bramble of mundanities' was something I was delighted to see absorbed in the porous sponge of memory. It particularly appealed to me both for its truth and for the way in which it rolls from the tongue.

 Comment Written 16-May-2021

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reply by the author on 17-May-2021

Ohhhhh, your praise makes my ears prick up, Tony. When one of the best poets on FanStory talks about my words rolling off the tongue, you make me realize I love flattery after all. Thank you so much for the six as well!

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald

Exceptional

SSSSSStupendous! A lyrical tour de force--startling phrasing--stunning imagery. I don't fully get the backstory, but I trust more will be revealed. Looking forward to scene two! Cheerssssss. LIZ



Brilliant: drone a humdrum bramble of mundanities.

Jay: The lines I think you're=>YOUR brain is searching for

 Comment Written 16-May-2021

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reply by the author on 16-May-2021

Thanks, Liz for the catch. What an embarrassing lapse of attention.

I'm glad you enjoyed it. And a SIX! Goodness!

reply by Elizabeth Emerald on 16-May-2021

I never make tpyos.