When Love Was Taken
An Acrostic- Loop Poem26 total reviews
Comment from Therese Caron
A wonderful, well written poem about the grief of a relationship ending. It could also involve the death of a person, but I feel more than it's about a break up and a very painful one. Acrostic loop is amazing, and you did a wonderful job of following the pattern. Nothing is forced or cluttered while you tried to keep the acrostic clear, which you did. Your images Is also amazing. Thanks for sharing this fabulous work of art!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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A wonderful, well written poem about the grief of a relationship ending. It could also involve the death of a person, but I feel more than it's about a break up and a very painful one. Acrostic loop is amazing, and you did a wonderful job of following the pattern. Nothing is forced or cluttered while you tried to keep the acrostic clear, which you did. Your images Is also amazing. Thanks for sharing this fabulous work of art!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much, this was a personal write, your understanding is much appreciated****kahpot
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Been there.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your combo loop/acrostic poem. Your lines flow smoothly with great meaning and imagery. I like the formatting of the beginning of each line in bold for the acrostic. You ending word on one line and the following line using the same word is amazing how both fit together. This poem has great spiritual and understanding of life written in it. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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You did a great job with your combo loop/acrostic poem. Your lines flow smoothly with great meaning and imagery. I like the formatting of the beginning of each line in bold for the acrostic. You ending word on one line and the following line using the same word is amazing how both fit together. This poem has great spiritual and understanding of life written in it. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2020
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Thank you my friend, your comments and encouragement are very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Kahpot. First I will say that the picture is fascinating. The poem describes a very sad time. The writing style is excellent and is a well constructed acrostic and loop. I don't know if I've seen the combination before but it works well here..
Well done.
Robert
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Hello Kahpot. First I will say that the picture is fascinating. The poem describes a very sad time. The writing style is excellent and is a well constructed acrostic and loop. I don't know if I've seen the combination before but it works well here..
Well done.
Robert
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you Robert, it was (is) a sad time, like the time, I chose this form as it was challenging, much appreciated****kahpot
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You're welcome
Comment from royowen
Of course we can take this to the embodiment of love itself when the Lord of Love was sacrificed then love was removed, and I guess God's plan was we as a people to display that love in multiplicity. A beautifully written swap quatrain my friend, and yes, the murder of love is the reason of all ills, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Of course we can take this to the embodiment of love itself when the Lord of Love was sacrificed then love was removed, and I guess God's plan was we as a people to display that love in multiplicity. A beautifully written swap quatrain my friend, and yes, the murder of love is the reason of all ills, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank Roy, this was a challenging write, and I am very glad you liked it, much appreciated****kahpot
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Good job, looked easy
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I have read several poems written in this style, but yours is the first that actually flows seamlessly from one line to the next. This would have been an excellent contest entry. Most of the poems in this style I have read have been in contests. You would have won them all.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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I have read several poems written in this style, but yours is the first that actually flows seamlessly from one line to the next. This would have been an excellent contest entry. Most of the poems in this style I have read have been in contests. You would have won them all.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you for this wonderful review and the inspiration it gives, some works just don't seem to fit all prompts requirements, as always very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
A beautifully formed Acrostic Loop poem. The form is perfect and the content very meaningful. Here is a well crafted, meaningful writing that stirs the heart. When love is taken, indeed, we are awash with hopelessness and fumbling toward our next step. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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A beautifully formed Acrostic Loop poem. The form is perfect and the content very meaningful. Here is a well crafted, meaningful writing that stirs the heart. When love is taken, indeed, we are awash with hopelessness and fumbling toward our next step. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful and encouraging review and comments, very much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from susand3022
Hi Kahpot, I never knew that Loop poetry had so many ways you could write it as long as you kept the loop! I checked because I saw the extra line in the last stanza, and I sure was surprised about how varied the formatting could be as long as you keep the loop. I'll have to remember that... looks like it can be a lot of fun... good job! :)
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Hi Kahpot, I never knew that Loop poetry had so many ways you could write it as long as you kept the loop! I checked because I saw the extra line in the last stanza, and I sure was surprised about how varied the formatting could be as long as you keep the loop. I'll have to remember that... looks like it can be a lot of fun... good job! :)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you susand3022, this form can be fun, keeping the loop is sometimes very challenging, very much appreciate your wonderful comments****kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
Wish I had a six for the lovely construction of your wonderfully constructed acrostic loop poem, Kahpot. I think it should have been in a contest. I like the message and you made the iambic hexameter flow so smoothly. And the last stanza had lines that all
had feminine endings. The message is comforting that even after the devastation of losing love, one can still heal and one should not neglect living life.
Comments / question:
"When love was taken loneliness found its home (suggest a comma after 'taken')
Home once filled with life now baron of emotion (did you really mean 'baron' or 'barren?')
"Neglecting life will not erase when love was taken" (maybe "that love was taken" not "when")
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Wish I had a six for the lovely construction of your wonderfully constructed acrostic loop poem, Kahpot. I think it should have been in a contest. I like the message and you made the iambic hexameter flow so smoothly. And the last stanza had lines that all
had feminine endings. The message is comforting that even after the devastation of losing love, one can still heal and one should not neglect living life.
Comments / question:
"When love was taken loneliness found its home (suggest a comma after 'taken')
Home once filled with life now baron of emotion (did you really mean 'baron' or 'barren?')
"Neglecting life will not erase when love was taken" (maybe "that love was taken" not "when")
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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As always lyenochka very helpful an inspiring, I have added the comma, and spelt barren the way it should have been, I agree "that love was taken" seems a better fit, though to keep the loop I chose "when" as to join the beginning, hope this makes sense, so very much appreciate your never ending help****kahpot
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You're so welcome. I think you did a fabulous job with this difficult form of an acrostic loop!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written acrostic loop poem about love taken from us we feel robbed from something special that cannot be replaced. It takes a long time before we are able to trust again.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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A very well-written acrostic loop poem about love taken from us we feel robbed from something special that cannot be replaced. It takes a long time before we are able to trust again.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful review and comments, as always much appreciated****kahpot
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow, this is the most impressive acrostic-loop poem I have ever read. It is seamless, and I have nothing I can find where I would change a single thing. The presentation is fantastic, with the white lettering on a black background, and the awesome artwork integrated into the background of the piece. The flow is like melted butter, and the choice of words, to explain your story of love lost, is extraordinary. There is deep meaning and a clear message that goes along with this. In the last stanza, you speak the word, which is so important in order to get over the pain, 'acceptance'. And the very last line is chocked full of wisdom, "Neglecting life will not erase when love was taken." This is extremely well written and has a depth of meaning, not usually associated with this format. If I had seven stars I would give them to you. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Wow, this is the most impressive acrostic-loop poem I have ever read. It is seamless, and I have nothing I can find where I would change a single thing. The presentation is fantastic, with the white lettering on a black background, and the awesome artwork integrated into the background of the piece. The flow is like melted butter, and the choice of words, to explain your story of love lost, is extraordinary. There is deep meaning and a clear message that goes along with this. In the last stanza, you speak the word, which is so important in order to get over the pain, 'acceptance'. And the very last line is chocked full of wisdom, "Neglecting life will not erase when love was taken." This is extremely well written and has a depth of meaning, not usually associated with this format. If I had seven stars I would give them to you. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2020
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Your comments, encouragement, inspiration, and help you give in your reviews is worth more than stars, I am so glad you understood that this was a journey, and I needed to say it and very happy you enjoyed the way I did, so very much appreciated****kahpot
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I am so glad. Your comments on my reviews mean a lot to me. It feels good to be appreciated.
Have a great day.
Take care, Jesse